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Deltapotamus [2014-05-16 20:25:59 +0000 UTC]

Ahh, my links! So sorry.  I must have missed a closing tag. D:
Thankfully, both of them work - there are two separate links, and the second one starts where it says "here's another."

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Deltapotamus [2014-05-16 20:24:13 +0000 UTC]

Hi there! I'm here to critique this piece, as you requested in equinspiration !

First of all, I think this piece has a lovely composition.  There's something interesting about the rising smoke and how you have the horse cantering out of it.  I think, however, that you could play up this idea in the rest of your piece. 

Overall, the image is a little dully-colored, and I can see that it's due to how the original background looks.  Don't forget to edit your background as well, not just your horse!  I think you could have really played, perhaps, with a contrast of lighter colors to where the horse is running and then darker, stormier, more foreboding colors on the left half of the image.  That's just one possibility though - but overall, just find ways to make your image more interesting!

Moving on to technical aspects of the image, I think it was very good insight on your part to make the horse half-disappearing into the fog/mist/dust/whatever that is.  It provides an awesome effect of the horse emerging from that.  However, I can tell that, rather than painting over the horse, you made it transparent.   This might not ordinarily be a problem, but in this case I can see the horizon line through the horse's legs. :c

I'd also like to look a little at your hair painting.  In the tail versus the mane, the tail has a lot more contrast between the strands, and this is because it's lighter, due to the dust stuff.  However, it would probably have less contrast, because the dust is getting in the way of light travelling back to the viewer.  What I'm saying, basically, is that I think you should put more contrast into your mane c:

Your color change to white looks excellent, but remember!  Where a horse has white markings, that means they have pink skin, rather than black skin.  On places where the horse has very very short and thin hair, that means you'd be able to see pink skin through white markings.  If you look at this image, you can see clearly where the gray horse had white markings to begin with (a gray horse is different from a true white horse in that a gray horse has black skin and a dark coat that turns white with age, whereas a white horse is born white with pink skin!).   Here's another pretty pink nose .  So, while you did an excellent job making those white markings, remember that white markings aren't completely grayscale!  They look much more realistic when you add hints of color to them, especially pretty pink noses. c:

I also think it generally looks better when you add detailing to your horse. Granted, everyone's method is different, and everyone adds different kinds and amounts of detailing, so I'm not here to tell you how you should do your own art.  However, I think it's generally good practice to make sure that you can differentiate different large body parts - for example, in this case, being able to tell the jaw from the neck, and the shoulder/elbow from the barrel of the horse.  I think those would be great things to add to this image!

Overall, I think the largest piece missing from the puzzle of this manip is a cohesive color/lighting scheme.  Add some dramatic flair through color, light, and shadows!  It certainly is a background that begs for some action and power, but it needs more to make it complete. c:

If you have any questions or would like clarification, feel free to ask!

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Dramance [2014-05-12 04:21:50 +0000 UTC]

Wow! This is amazing! I love how the smoke curls around the horse as it runs through the field, and it really explains the title too! Amazing job!

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Timely-Studios [2014-05-10 14:43:24 +0000 UTC]

I love this! I love the title! I love the composition! Archi looks like he is on his way to mess stuff up, I love it!

 

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