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Published: 2003-03-26 01:49:30 +0000 UTC; Views: 153; Favourites: 0; Downloads: 7
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Not EnoughIt\'s not enough
that I left notes to make you smile.
It\'s not enough
that I went the extra mile.
It\'s not enough
that I loved you with all I had.
It\'s not enough
that I was there when things went bad.
It\'s not enough
that when you needed me I was there.
It\'s not enough
that all I ever did was care.
It\'s not enough
that I held you when you cried.
It\'s not enough
that I came the night you would have died.
It\'s not enough
that you broke my heart in two.
It\'s not enough
that somehow I still love you.
I just wasn\'t enough.
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Comments: 18
Would it be enough to say
that I love your poem?
Would it be enough to say
that I can associate with it?
I hope so, cuz I mean every word I just said.
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I don't care what the others have said... it isn't always easy to get even a "cliche" poem to flow this well.. I loved it! Simple, straightforward, universal emotion that can appeal to anybody- great job in my book!!! KUDOS TO YOU! And a big hug from someone who's felt the same way too many times!!
Michelle
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The pain in this poem is unsettling prevelent through out each verse. I think its easy to understand that throughout relationships we never feel as though we do enough. I love how you managed to express the confusion as to love's working and how you didn't understand exactly what went wrong. Overall, stunning.
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Wow ... it evokes alot for me ... it expresses how i feel right now ...
take care,
Drew
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hey now... I love this! It's short, but it's so to-the-point. i love the repetition of *It's not enough*, like Britt said, and the way it rhymes contributes to how hard it hits you. I would take the very last *I just wasn't enough.* off though, I don't think it helps the poem. I think the line before that is perfect for an ending line-- you express how you were always there for this person, and how they used you, and then you state that even so, you still love them. And I think that's what hits so hard-- the very last line that's all by itself feels tacked-on-- more distracting. But great work~ this is beautiful!
--jess
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Oops...i'm rusty on my Italian *Bravissimo* woopsies
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I agree with what people were saying before...you were more than enough...i think the other person wasn't much of anything. That cruel realization of being used hits like a ton of bricks...and i feel your pain hardcore...like you're me or something. You did a great job using the repetition of "It's not enough"...it flowed nicely, and the poem just dripped with emotion. It was so teeming with emotion you could just dive right into that poem. Emotion is what it's all about!! Bravissima!
~Brittany~
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What is enough? when the world keeps on changing, world keeps on revolving underneath our feet. What is enough that will finally be enough? When enough is reached will we search for more?
This is a question eternally explored by humanity, and powerfully written here.
ANd contribute to the Castle!!! *grumble* ecspecially if i'm editor next year!
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...you really have a powerful writing style...as always. take care Erin.
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I'm a dick.
Way too many of the same topics that you've addressed almost literally countless times. The inter-piece repetition is just too much for my tastes.
Write something completely different and off-the-wall.... I think you could r0x0or lots of different topics if you would decide to crushor them.
~T'gotsk Biamb
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Your devotion is touching and tragic. Sometimes people simply do not deserve the love we bestow. That's when we leave... and never look back.
It's depressing, but ultimately well written. Smile, I like ya
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Well structured..and very emotional..the repetitive..ness..really sounds great in this one.
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I really like the setup of this. And never let someone make you feel inadequate. It's their priorities that are out of whack.
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this is a very good poem and I have to agree completely with everything amy said.
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Great flow & rhythm. And I know those feelings all too well. Good job.
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Hun, you were enough... believe me, as I was saying to you, I'm sure you were more than enough...
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WOW... i've had those feelings expressed before... i know it's hard when all you try is not enough... good work! it's repetitive, but it works very well, i have poems just like this, i like yours a lot!!
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