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Published: 2008-10-26 15:34:15 +0000 UTC; Views: 202; Favourites: 2; Downloads: 1
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Description God is smiling on us
No mind that it's an all-knowing,
Crescent, Cheshire grin,
It's a smile,
And that surely counts for something

I make people think,
That's my job,
I'll make it big some day
And be famous and rich
In death,
By introducing ideas
That they don't
Think of
On their own

As cliche as it is
My favorite element is Arsenic,
All 33, in between, unstable;
Always trying to bond to be content
And never finding it
But I've found it

Ithappenedithappenedithappenedbutshhh
Eloquence is such an oddity. No one ever asked for it; wanted it, sure, but prayed? It's only underrated when the studious children and lecturing teachers at school don't want to admit to liking it. It's only a curse when your muse runs out on you. The will to write, the words to write, but nothing to be written.
Nooneneedstoknowokaywe'lljustleaveitwhereitstays

God is smiling on us.
We've found it.
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Comments: 22

ElderFyre [2008-10-29 16:26:12 +0000 UTC]

Meep I love the poem in the begining! Absolutely adore it. It puts a whimsical spin on God and the whole idea of him watching us and what not. Very glad you shared this with us. considering you wrote it in the submission box I do like the rest of it as well. However the middle section wasn't as captivating as the begning, but I like how to end tied back into your start. Clappers for you yet again!!! Keep writing, as always I love it.

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ryu-son In reply to ElderFyre [2008-10-29 17:57:42 +0000 UTC]

Thank you! Which middle section threw it off?
Thank you again!

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ElderFyre In reply to ryu-son [2008-10-30 03:19:03 +0000 UTC]

"Ithappenedithappenedithappenedbutshhh
Eloquence is such an oddity. No one ever asked for it; wanted it, sure, but prayed? It's only underrated when the studious children and lecturing teachers at school don't want to admit to liking it. It's only a curse when your muse runs out on you. The will to write, the words to write, but nothing to be written.
Nooneneedstoknowokaywe'lljustleaveitwhereitstays"

That piece. Granted I do love it, but it doesn't feel like it belongs with the poem. Just my oppinion. I do love it all though jsut not together.

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ryu-son In reply to ElderFyre [2008-10-30 15:50:01 +0000 UTC]

Okay! Thank you so much!

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ElderFyre In reply to ElderFyre [2008-10-29 16:26:34 +0000 UTC]

PS! What did you find? o.o; can I have a peice of it too? lol

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Nekomi-Minosuke [2008-10-29 02:14:20 +0000 UTC]

Lol Finally working on clearing out my list of crap xD

Love it :3 Even though it's got God in it, it's pure, and well written.

I hate how you can write so well in such short amounts of time xD

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ryu-son In reply to Nekomi-Minosuke [2008-10-29 11:32:47 +0000 UTC]

Than you! And I go in spurts. I'll write really fast and well for one hour, and then not do anything for a week. XD;;;

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Nekomi-Minosuke In reply to ryu-son [2008-10-29 14:31:09 +0000 UTC]

Hey it's better than too slow and hardly ever! XD
And you're welcome <3

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Dracawyn [2008-10-28 23:19:35 +0000 UTC]

Really cool images and I love your wording. Are you taking Mrs. Bedeaux's class yet?

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ryu-son In reply to Dracawyn [2008-10-29 00:27:48 +0000 UTC]

Next year! Thank you so much!

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thedarkmesiah [2008-10-27 00:36:03 +0000 UTC]

anything you write always comes out beautiful and i love it!!!!!!!!!!!!!![link]
Obsessed[link]
Adoration

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ryu-son In reply to thedarkmesiah [2008-10-27 15:08:57 +0000 UTC]

Thank you so much!

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BurstChyld [2008-10-26 19:24:13 +0000 UTC]

My last three songs were submission box...and your poem is great I really like itl...especially once it gets to the line about Arsenic.

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ryu-son In reply to BurstChyld [2008-10-27 15:08:26 +0000 UTC]

Thank you so much! I love submission box poetry.

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BurstChyld In reply to ryu-son [2008-10-27 15:58:43 +0000 UTC]

You are most welcome!

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TheBread [2008-10-26 16:48:43 +0000 UTC]

Beautiful.
(:

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ryu-son In reply to TheBread [2008-10-26 16:54:34 +0000 UTC]

Thank you so much! Answer my texts! XD

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TheBread In reply to ryu-son [2008-10-26 17:16:31 +0000 UTC]

Sorry, It hasn't been on. D:

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ryu-son In reply to TheBread [2008-10-26 17:22:23 +0000 UTC]

Answer it nao? D:

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Garnr [2008-10-26 16:39:15 +0000 UTC]

Its great ,don't worry.I `ve made all my poems in submission box.

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ryu-son In reply to Garnr [2008-10-26 16:54:57 +0000 UTC]

Thank you! I'm fond of that method, it makes it seem more raw.

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Garnr In reply to ryu-son [2008-10-26 16:56:44 +0000 UTC]

np

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