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windfallsdelirium [2007-08-14 23:52:46 +0000 UTC]
I vote for of too, it creates an interesting image.. that works, I think, better together vs. separately.
Good one, either way.
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scarredsodeep In reply to windfallsdelirium [2007-08-17 01:02:06 +0000 UTC]
Thank you! The of is staying. And has lost the popular vote and its appeal as a word.
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KunoichiKaoru [2007-08-09 16:31:27 +0000 UTC]
Though I like all of it, especially the last stanza, this is my favorite: "shot of thought of
you."
Of.
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Ashen-Frin [2007-08-09 15:06:19 +0000 UTC]
and
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scarredsodeep In reply to Ashen-Frin [2007-08-10 01:33:56 +0000 UTC]
The hill and the train cars--that was real. We drove past it by random; they called it a trolley museum.
I thought of you.
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Ashen-Frin In reply to scarredsodeep [2007-08-15 03:24:33 +0000 UTC]
"of" is better
The rain outside... I could hear the car tires slide as they drove past, one after the other. The light from the lava lamp morphing on the cealing. My friends snoring snuggled beside me; the warmth of them.
I thought of this.
Thought of you.
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scarredsodeep In reply to Ashen-Frin [2007-08-17 01:00:48 +0000 UTC]
I think,
am thinking,
am being
of you.
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