midnitestarz18 [2007-03-20 00:49:02 +0000 UTC]

I haven't read this before, but now I'm going to read others. In shortest terms, it's a wake up call to me.

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disgruntledlemur [2004-08-11 19:51:15 +0000 UTC]

Aheheh. "Reporting live, which you will never do again." -nice little "neener-neener" at the end there.

All in all, this was very well executed. It's rare to see such skillful use of the fine art of sarcasm, especially when conveying such a message. I like this a lot.

And Nietzsche... definitely worth checking out. His ideas are incredibly important to the way we live today, as society becomes increasingly secular.

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zindryr [2004-08-09 16:38:23 +0000 UTC]

Felt very Nietzsche-esque. I don't have his quote with me but it went something like, "If a demon were to come down to you today and tell you that you would have to repeat this life with all of it's triumphs and all of it's failures a thousand, no, a million times on and to eternity, would you curse him for telling you that which you feared, or would you get down on your knees and cry in thankfulness for the life that you have lived?" Something to that extent, although this is a bit more negative because of the ending, (I can't really see it ending any other way though).

As is, nice work, I did enjoy the sort of obituary style aimed at the person who died.

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cometeoraine [2004-08-07 02:02:19 +0000 UTC]

I really like how this article bit by bit reveals the viewer's past and how it can be view through many angles.

You've touched dilemmas that everyone has to face and no one can escape. For example, conforming to non-conformities and vice versa; there's only those two choices so it's a lose-lose situation no matter how you look at it. But if the reader is wise, he or she will understand that once they are being brought out into this world, they have to play within established rules and there's no other way to get around it. So conformity will no longer be a choice but the only way to survive.

I especially like the fantasy land part, because everyone is guilty of that one time or another (especially when we're little kids). But then again, this fantasy land is a necessary part of human existence. Visualizing ourselves into other things is another way to establish our identity. For if we exist alone, how do we know that we are existing at all? We need to project ourselves into other objects and learn about them in order to acknowledge our differences, therefore, establishing our self.

Maybe I'm taking this from a perspective different from the one you want to portray (I'm guessing trying to value-lize the reader's life and bring regrets), but I'm getting the impression of someone trying to discipline their children or of someone (the devil himself maybe?) talking down to a soul ready to be damned and whatnot. If one of those are what you are aiming for, it's effective. However, if it is a person who thought their life through before this and had battled this trial of self-worth and values in life, then this article will have little effects on them.

I don't know what your original intent for when writing this article is; whether you want to end it in a negative tone or it just ended up that way (or the article is served as a punishment in hell itself). But as a reader, I think it would much more interesting if you somehow encourage the dead one to accept the vanity of his or her life, accept things that are beyond their control, accept their failures and then move on (but if it's the hell punishment case, this wouldn't work. I would suggest backing your claims with the "why" they are so and so).

Regardless, I like this piece (and your icon). That's my two cent. Thank you for sharing. [And my apology if this comment turns out to somehow be incoherent and a bit long.]

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