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As I surprisingly got to draw a little more, I could sketch out another character who makes a background appearance in my novel.As one of the (very) few Generation-8 survivors, this old supersoldier was only called back into service since the organization which created her was really short on staff.
She now leads a double life and uses every bit of her free time to return to her husband and three adoptive children, as well as her business, while in the organization, she has the pleasure of training the younger generations and recruits, or working as a psychologist. It sounds like a lot of work, because it is. Don't wanna be in her shoes XD
Spoiler though, she does survive the next war and gets a break finally.
I'm kinda fond of her, not sure why. Maybe because she and her fellow remaining Gen-8 soldiers are so different from the newer generations, lol. I do tend to torment the characters I like most, so me being fond of her might make her suffer, ha ha.
Done with ballpoint pen. I hope you like her^^
Nachaya SkandΓ‘r is my OC. Do not steal, trace/copy, heavily reference or use without my explicit written permission.
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First off, how many generations of supersoldiers are there?
Second, I do like her.
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There are 11, counting the newest prototypes (which are all nutjobs due to their unstable genetic setup in favor of power). That being said, Gen-10 had two versions, as the first one was a bit of a failure due to a lot of nutjobs there as well, and NA had to overhaul the concept before they made a second version.
Also, the oldest generation still in active service (officially) is Gen-9, of which aren't that many left...well, they are all 120+ now anyway, like Lono XD
And of Gen-8, only a handful is still alive, but the only have been called back into combat because NA was very short on staff for a while (due to the Gen-10 failure). They are not compatible with the nanites for example, though other upgrades might be possible.
And I'm glad you like the old lady
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Well... that's a handful of supersoldiers. And I thought I had too many supersoldiers, aka the Elemental Elites, in my story. Originally, I wanted 118, but decided to cut it down to 24 because I believed that not many of them would get developed and be one dimensional.Β
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By far not all of mine are even mentioned by name or described in the story. I actually did this to avoid repetitiveness, as some of the models might look somewhat similar or have similar abilities, since for each type, a certain genetic setup is developed. I only turned a certain amount of them into more than just background characters, to serve as examples and keystones to give the story a little more depth. I believe I only ever developed/named close to 40 of them and gave them distinctive abilities and a personal skillset, and of those 40, not all appear in my novel (a few only make an appearance in sidestories), and of the rest, only a couple get enough "screentime" to work on even more in-depth.
That being said, it was hard enough to keep things somewhat original between them, given the similarities they are supposed to share after all.
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I'm always amazed what you can do with a ballpoint pen!Β Β
And the character look's very likeable indeed!Β Β
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Ha ha, thanks^^
Glad if you like her
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Well - hope she hasen't some dark secret...Β Β
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Does originally being created by an organization that wants to eradicate all magic count?
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Not like she had a choice, since she's property X'D
But yeah, since her current General is fond of the oldtimers, they get to do the less atrocious stuff if possible, and if they're not needed, they can do their own thing^^
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...sounds like there is a whole background story and a world /universe behind it!Β
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Well, this organization serves as the antagonist in the first and second arc of my main novel...and they play a role in other parts of my universe too^^
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Sounds very interesting indeed!Β
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I hope it will be, once I'm finished. But that'll take a while. So much to write.^^
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Do you write chapter for chapter or a rough summary first or as the mood strikes you?
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The first version was just born from the imminent urge to write again way over 10 years ago, but since then, I've played with it, and by now, I do have a rough summary that is still in development for the final version. It's under construction as I plan out the chapters more closely, since I want to give it my best shot now and bring in everything I learned about storytelling in the meantime.^^
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Sometimes an idea or a story needs time to grow!Β
(And is all the better for it)
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Indeed it does. I also went back to the next interation of my novel, plunging myself into working out the details and chapters more closely. It's a lot of 'debugging' and closing potential plot holes before they can wreak havoc on the entire thing.^^
God, the first and second arc alone have around 80 chapters....and there's still the third arc which I'm not done with. XD
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That sounds like a lot of work!
How long are your chapters on average?
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It is, believe me XD
Hmm, it's been a while since I wrote the original, but it was about 20, maybe 30 pages, unless it was a rather short one meant to just provide a sense of foreboding and/or what happens in side or sub plots that'll later join the main one, or it can be longer when there's complex action or explanations flowing in that happen through conversation or the characters learning, etc.
Dunno how the average will be though with what I know nowadays
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Did I get that one right? 80 chapters per story arch and beween 20 and 30 pages... Ok lets go with 20, then we have 1600 page for a story arch - that one huge book. So how many Story archs? 3 ? or 7 ? you put GoT to shame with that!Β
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No, around 80 chapters are the first and second arc together. I haven't worked out the number of chapters I need for the third, so I can't tell the final number yet. And no, it's just 3 arcs XD
It's likely though that I split it into 3 books, if it gets too long, although having it all in one huge book would be nice too~
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That sounds better managable: 3 books of 800 - 1000 pages each!
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It'll still be one ass full of work, given the complexity of the story XD
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Well, you could do a kind of plot-paper first...
...like a skeleton and then work from there!
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I did already do that. That's partially what my iterations are for. First the rough summary, then more details and calculating how much fits into one chapter, and when it is a good idea to make a cut or switch to another scene elsewhere. And with every iteration, the details are worked out better and plotholes are stuffed.^^
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That sounds good - you have to be a bit systemathic, when you reite something so long!
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I know, otherwise you end up with more work eventually. I used to just start writing and see what comes out of my pen, but once I decided to write this more seriously and saw it would turn out rather long, I immediately came up with a system. I do that for all of my stories, and it really helps.
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I usually stick to short stuff - like these:Β
Unusual Ways to Fight MonstersI give you this mini-sequel of several unusual, but not totally serious ways to fight D&D monsters (written in character). I hope you enjoy the read β and feel free to contribute!
How to Fight Red Dragons:
The person who slays a dragon β especially a red one β is often celebrated as a hero. In my opinion, the killing of a single dragon is β apart from the danger to your own life β quite futile and ineffective. In the long run, the most effective way to decimate a species is to diminish its food source. As everybody knows, red dragons eat virgins.
Iβm sure you will agree with me, that this kind of dragon-slaying is much less dangerous and more importantly, much more fun. Okay, itβs not totally without bloodshed - but most men are already proficient with the necessary βweaponsβ. Letβs take up the fight and conquer the red dragons together.Β Iβm convinced there is a hero in every one of us!
In short: Β orΒ
Tales Reported by J. E. J., The Great PanartiasΒ Β Β Β -Β Β Β Β Β Β Β Β Β Tales from Krynn β Preface
As you know, I travelled to Krynn often β at first over a year as a professional boxer at funfairs from the cold south of Ansalon, up to the hot and dry deserts of the north. Later on, I became a member of the Order of the Red Robes β the guardians of balance who follow Lunitari β and led in this function further journeys and expeditions, that led away beyond the boundaries of time itself.
One of the oldest and most fascinating tales that is told especially in times of war and plagues, is about healing:
Β Β Β Β -Β Β Β Β Β Β Β Β Β The Tears of Mishakal β
In the first age of Krynn, when the gods were still young, mighty creatures ruled: the dragons and the giants β although called high ogres or Irda. In the woods, the first fairies and elves just awakened and Reorx still forged the
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Nice^^
In my case, even shorter stuff turns out somewhat long. Like my side novel. It was based on a really long and complex dream I had in January 2006, and I'm preparing a reprise. It's only planned to be around 22 chapters long though, so no comparison to my main novel XD
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Thank you ^^
I for my part like shorter stories where I can keep an overview without structering first (or meaning I can still do it in my head quite easily)
But I admire you for the long and complex stories!
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You're welcome^^
Sure, I have the 'short story and myths' part too, but more as a part of the lore in my universe. To actually incorporate these concepts in the stories and exploit their potential, the stories need to be a bit longer XD
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Yeah I know what you mean.
My short stories I linked to you were part of a role playing game (D&D) so they were embedded as well...
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I especially laughed at the part of "Dragon-slaying through virgin-laying" XD
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Thanks - that was the core idea around which the whole essay was formed! XD
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I can see the appeal of writing such things. I've done something along those lines too already, but just for my own entertainment and that of a few friends XD
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Yeah, it started like that as well.Β
But then those friends said: "This is great - you have to publish it!"
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Yeah...I have bad associations with "you have to publish this" though.
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Like what? Do you prefer to keep your awesomeness to yourself?
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Which awesomeness? XD
No, it's just that back then from early age on, everything I picked up turned into a chore, since my family was always like: "Practice a lot, you can get popular and make lots of money!" Like when I played on my grandma's guitar for fun as a preschool kid, she gave me my own guitar for next Christmas and from there on, they all pressured me into a minimum of practice everyday, when I had to practice (if I wanted to do or have something specific, like a condition), and it demotivated me even before the real lessons began. Plus, I could never experiment and try what I wanted, since I liked to create my own little pieces...this shit dragged on forΒ more than 6 years until I could finally drop it.
Same with writing, drawing or anything I did. "You could publish this, you're gonna get famous!" Always with this greedy look in their eyes, and the notion that I could get the fame they never could. That's also why I didn't even try to sing in front of them...I didn't want this to go to shit as well.
Couple all of that 'good never is good enough', and you know why I'm my own harshest critic. I'm still working hard to get this out of my system.
(Sorry if this sounds like I'm whining, but I needed to elaborate on this to make it understandable).
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OK - I know that feeling!
How about you do it just for the fun of it then and share /publish it later, if you are satisfied with your work?
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I will probably never be really satisfied with my work, and while it's kinda cool to do it for fun, I can't help but have certain goals in mind, and to work towards them.^^
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You are a tricky one!Β Β
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Is that now good or bad?
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A bit of both actually, I'd say!Β Β
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Indeed! It is had to please oneself, when you are over - critical with your own work...
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But at the same time, I need to be really critical to see my own flaws and improve, so I won't get lazy or arrogant, like some artists I've seen when they think they're 'good enough'.
Bonus points to my self-bashing as I rarely ever get to practice anything :/
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Well, I've allways thought you overdo it a bit with your self-bashing!Β Β
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