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The-Clockwork-Crow [2011-09-09 23:42:20 +0000 UTC]

As it is, your character will not be accepted into Pokemorph Paradise. There are many issues with it that will be addressed below:
- For one thing, the whole bounty hunter/adventurer thing for hire is not only overdone, but it's also a sure sign that you didn't think very hard for his occupation. In other words, it's someone who since you can't think of anything, can be paid to do EVERYTHING.
- 'A little Crazy' is also something we're very against, particularly for a character who's already more or less Hell-bent on getting revenge on Team Rocket and gets paid to do virtually anything. We see this personality trait as an excuse for him to do crazy shit (like blowing up buildings, causing collatoral damage, killing Rockets left and right) and more or less be allowed to get away with it because he's 'LOL CRAHZEE'
- His level is far too high for someone his age and background. He may have fought his way out of Team Rocket's labs and escaped, however it's not as if EVERY SINGLE JOB he's had up til now would have him battling and gaining levels quickly.
- Art-wise, the overall image looks fairly rushed, the lines are rough and the anatomy looks off.
- You need to work on your spelling, I've noticed there're mispellings here and there in your app. Since the main focus of the club is roleplay, we expect a certain level of literary competency.

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