Comments: 106
Silver-cLaw In reply to ??? [2016-12-26 22:13:21 +0000 UTC]
Good crying, I hope?
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MidnightDaybreak [2014-09-11 07:17:23 +0000 UTC]
Well then, that was certainly something. That was very good indeed.
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leiyue [2014-07-27 06:34:50 +0000 UTC]
Congratulations on the DD!
Have a nice day
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OriiPrincess [2014-07-27 05:55:33 +0000 UTC]
Wow!! Kinda reminds me of Death Note with the Shinigamis. I like it!!!
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Gi-Saggiomo [2014-07-27 05:40:07 +0000 UTC]
God, that's fantastic!!!
Seriously, it is! It is simples, but so full of meaning... Thanks for sharing it with us <3
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TEN-OS [2014-07-27 04:54:53 +0000 UTC]
this is literally the best short story i've probably ever read.
echoing others, it's so lovely and creepy and sad - really a super satisfying blend!!
definitely deserves the feature ♥
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TheLittleTomatoFairy [2014-07-27 03:22:13 +0000 UTC]
I don't know what to say.. It's sad and odd an even a little creepy. But in a comforting manner. like, I almost feel like Bo is a Reaper and everythinng's decided from the get-go. And that the end was her death, but.... Even if that's wrong, it sort of makes death seem nicer.. In an odd way...
I live it.
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PicktreeBrag [2014-07-26 23:32:11 +0000 UTC]
This story is beautiful! I love that it's in a way somewhat eerie, but the concept of these black people who watch over certain people is intriguing. My first thought was that it was a guardian angel type entity, but as it continued they sounded more like the Shaii entity of Egyptian mythology. Shaii was a destiny god where one Shaii (or Shait, if they're female) would follow a person around writing everything they did, both good and bad, to judge them after they died. I don't know if that's what you were going for, but I loved it.
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InspiredMusica [2014-07-26 23:20:35 +0000 UTC]
I totally agree with Natmonkey - it's unusual, but that makes it special. I literally read it in half a minute, enjoyed every second. I wish there would be more. You are not planning on continue with this, do you?
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kevinjoseph [2014-07-26 22:35:21 +0000 UTC]
Sad and sweet.
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bruxing [2014-07-26 21:20:53 +0000 UTC]
What a fascinating tale! I love how it took more shape as the years went on, and how simple conversations between Lindsay and Bo helped to reveal so much about the nature of their acquaintance. I especially loved the ending, and getting to see what Bo thought of Lindsay, and that his relationship with her was irregular; that she shouldn't have been able to see him, but she could.
I would have liked to know more about why 45 was the magic number--if "taking her away" meant that her time had come, so to speak, and she perhaps passed away early (though I'm not sure if this was what you intended, but it's how I read it), I would have liked to know what happened to her, but in the end I think your story is still a fantastic achievement even without that detail.
Congratulations on the DD, and great job overall! Keep up the fantastic work. C:
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Silver-cLaw In reply to bruxing [2014-08-29 10:29:04 +0000 UTC]
Thank you so much!
There was no particular reason why 45 was the "magic number". But you read it the way I meant it; she did pass away early, though I felt the "how" and "why" was unnecessary. I think it could be something to do with why her parents died early as well, or it could be mere coincidence.
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bruxing In reply to Silver-cLaw [2014-08-29 22:11:42 +0000 UTC]
Ah, that's interesting to think about! I always love reading stories that give you some food for thought, and this was one of them. C: Lovely work.
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LeanasArt [2014-07-26 21:18:22 +0000 UTC]
Congratulations to your DD! You deserve it.
I really enjoyed reading the story. It's a bit creepy but also beautiful in its own way, and of course well written. I'd love to know more about this world!
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Siochanna [2014-07-26 19:17:59 +0000 UTC]
You have completely blown my mind.
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Deathwolf555 [2014-07-26 18:57:31 +0000 UTC]
This sent chills down my spine. I like it....Bo scares me
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Silver-cLaw In reply to Deathwolf555 [2014-09-11 01:43:31 +0000 UTC]
I don't :/
Well, at least not at the moment.
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