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Description                 Its Christmas Eve in snowy 1800’s London England, and in a small house at the edge of town there lived a lonely 7-year-old boy named Isaac. Isaac was a sad child with not a friend to his name. While most children were spending time with their families and eagerly looking forward to opening the presents that were placed with care beneath a beautifully decorated Christmas tree, little Isaac spent this most holy of nights alone in his cold dusty attic room. Isaac’s parents were very poor, his mother was a strict crow of a woman who stayed at home and schooled Isaac. His father worked long hours down at the London harbor to support his family, although a large portion of his earnings went toward purchasing and consuming copious amounts of alcohol at the end of his shift. Sometimes he would come home drunk after being thrown out of every bar in London and shout at his beloved wife, Isaac’s mother. Occasionally it would escalate to violence and he would beat her savagely, then when he was done he’d force himself upon her in a drunken sexual rage. As it so happens this particular night was one of those occasions. Isaac just remained quiet, quivering beneath his soiled bed sheets until the screams and loud bangs subsided. Once poor frightened Isaac was finally able to fall asleep, he’d dream of what it would be like to have a friend to play with, so maybe he could laugh and be happy like the other children of London. Luckily for little Isaac this Christmas Eve marked a big change, when his abysmal loneliness caught the attention of a guardian angel, who then crafted a very special gift for the sad little London boy.
            As the sun rose on that Christmas morning, Isaac opened his eyes to find a strange wooden box sitting at the foot of his bed. With eyes widened in awe he stared at the colorful hand crafted box wondering who had left it. He was not used to receiving gifts, especially toys. What little toys Isaac did have were ones he’d found abandoned in the street or washed up in the gutters. Isaac scooted up to the foot of his bed in front of the mysterious box and picked it up with both hands. The box was beautifully painted in colorful styles with carvings of happy clown faces on the side. There was a tag on the box that simply read “For Isaac.” On the top of the box was an engraved text. Isaac squinted his eyes as he sounded out the words, “L-laugh-ing-J-Jack-in-a-b-box…” he paused, “…Laughing Jack-in-a-box?” Isaac had heard of a Jack-in-a-box, but never a Laughing Jack-in-a-box. His mind spun with curiosity as he grasped the box’s metal crank. Isaac tuned the crank and the song Pop Goes The Weasel chimed in rhythm with the crank’s gyrations. As the song came to its climax, Isaac sang along with the final verse, “Pop goes the weasel.” but nothing happened. Isaac let out a sigh, “Its broken…” He placed the box back down on the edge of the bed, and shuffled across his small dusty room to his dresser where he changed out of his soiled sleepwear and into his usual tattered clothes.
         Suddenly Isaac heard a loud rattling noise coming from the bed behind him. He spun around to witness the wooden box violently shaking. Then without warning the top of the box swung open and a parade of colorful smoke and confetti bellowed out. Isaac rubbed his eyes in disbelief of what he was seeing. As the smoke cleared there stood a tall thin multicolored clown man, with bright red hair, a swirly rainbow colored cone nose, and feathery shoulders that sat atop his raggedy and colorful clown outfit. The Technicolor clown spread his arms and excitedly announced, “COME ONE, COME ALL! WHETHER BIG OR SMALL! TO SEE THE BEST CLOWN OF THEM ALL!! The one, the only, LAUGHING JACK-IN-A-BOX!!!” Isaac’s eyes lit up, “W-Who are you?” he asked. The colorful carnie stepped down off the bed and with a happy grin said, “I’m glad you asked! I am Laughing Jack, your new friend FOR LIFE! I’m magical, I never get tired of playing, I’m a wiz at the accordion, and I adapt and develop with your own changing personality… In other words, whatever you like, I like!” Isaac looked up at the mysterious clown man, “W-were friends?” he stuttered. Jack looked at the boy while cocking an eyebrow “FRIENDS? Were BEST friends! I was specially created to be YOUR not-so-imaginary friend Isaac” Isaac’s jaw dropped, “You know my name?” Jack let out a whimsical laugh, “Of course I know your name. I know everything about you! So, now that the introductions are out of the way… How would you like to play a game of I Spy?” Isaac grinned from ear to ear, “REALLY? We can play games? Id LOVE to! I-… Oh…” He paused, “I-I cant… I have to go downstairs to see mother for homeschooling and chores…” his smile faded into a look disappointment. Jack placed his hand on Isaac’s shoulder and with a warm smile said, “Its ok! Ill be waiting right here for you when you get back.” Isaac’s smile returned as he looked up at his new friend. Just then he heard his mother’s shrill voice calling him from downstairs. “Well I gotta go! Ill see you after I’m done ok Jack?” He said as he headed toward the door. Jack smiled, “Absolutely kido! Oh and Isaac!” Isaac looked back at Jack who gave him a wink and said, “You should wear that smile more often. It suits you.” Isaac grinned happily as he turned and walked out the door.
         All day Isaac told his mother about the amazing colorful clown man who came out of a magical box that appeared on the foot of his bed. His mother however, did not believe a word of it. Finally he persuaded his mother to follow him up to his room so she could behold Laughing Jack for herself. They walked up the stairs and Isaac swung open the door to his room. “See mother? He’s right he-…” Isaac paused as he scanned the room that contained neither magical dancing clown man, nor mysterious wooden box. Isaac’s mother was not amused. She gave Isaac a glare so menacing it made his knees weak and his stomach sick. “B-but mother… he was-“ SMACK! Isaac’s mother delivered onto him a swift hard smack across his face. His eyes began to tear up, and his lip began to quiver as he could feel himself about to break down. “YOU STUPID ISOLANT CHILD! How DARE you lie to me about such childish idiocy! Who would want to be friends with a useless worm such as you! You shall remain in your room for the rest of the evening, and shall receive no dinner... Now what do you say you ungrateful wretch?” Isaac managed to swallow the knot in his throat in order mutter a reply, “T-thank you mam.” His mother glared down at him for a moment before leaving the room in disgust.
           Isaac kneeled over, burring his face in the side of his bed. Streams of tears ran down his cheeks as he began to weep. “What’s wrong kido?” a voice called out. Isaac looked over to the edge of the bed where Laughing Jack was now suddenly sitting beside him. “Wh-where were you?” Isaac murmured. Jack ran his hand through Isaac’s hair to comfort him as he softly replied, “I was hiding… I can’t let your parents see me… Otherwise they won’t let us play anymore.” Isaac wiped the tears from his eyes. “Look kido. I’m sorry I had to hide, but I’ll make it up to you! Because tonight we can play games and have tons of fun!” Jack said smiling. Isaac looked up at his vibrant pal and silently nodded, as a little smile began to form in the corners of his mouth. That night Laughing Jack and Isaac played so many fun games. With a wave of his hand Jack made all of Isaac’s tin solders spring to life and march around the room. Isaac was amazed as he watched his toys move around the room on their own. Then Laughing Jack and Isaac told each other spooky ghost stories. Isaac asked Jack if he was a ghost, but Jack explained that he was more of a cosmic entity of sorts. At the end of the night Jack reached into his pocket and pulled out an assortment of delicious candy. Isaac was in ecstasy when he popped the first colorful treat in his mouth, as it was his first time tasting something so sweet. Isaac had so much fun and laughed so hard that night that things seemed to be finally looking up for little Isaac… At least until the incident that occurred 3 months later…
         It was pleasantly warm and sunny in London that day, which was a bit of a rarity. So with the help of a certain not-so-imaginary friend, Isaac was able to finish his chores early and was allowed to go outside and play for a bit. Things started simple enough, the duo were back behind the house playing pirates, when Isaac spotted the neighbors cat sneaking into their garden. “YEARGH! WE GOT AN ENEMY SPY OFF THE STARBOARD BOW!” Isaac yelled, captivated by fantasy and imagination. “Yo ho! Ill gets him Captain Isaac!” Exclaimed first mate Jack in his best hearty pirate accent. Laughing Jack’s arm stretched out across the garden and snatched the unsuspecting feline, who began to struggle quite vigorously. “DON’T LET HIM GET AWAY JACKIE, OR ILL MAKE YE WALK THE PLANK!” Isaac antagonized. Jack’s grip on the cat tightened, and his arms grew and extended like anacondas wrapping themselves around the wily feline as it struggled for dear life. Jack’s arms just kept squeezing the animal, pressing the air out of its lungs. As the once dear house pet’s eyes began to bulge out of their sockets there came a loud SNAP! Jack quickly released the creature from his grasp as its lifeless furry husk thudded against the ground. There was hush silence as the two observed the cat’s now twisted and mangled corpse. The silence was finally broken by an uproarious laughter… coming from Isaac… “AHAHAHAHA Wow! I guess cats really DON’T have nine lives! AHAHAHA!” Isaac exclaimed nearly teary eyed from laughter. Laughing Jack began to chuckle as well, “Heh heh. Yeah… But wont you get in trouble if your mother finds your neighbor’s cat dead in her garden?” Isaac’s laughter quickly subsided. “Oh no! You’re right! Um… Ill just… throw it back into the neighbor’s yard?!” Isaac panicked as he grabbed a nearby shovel and scooped up the broken cat cadaver before lobbing it over the fence back into the neighbors yard. They quickly went back inside and up into Isaac’s room.
         About an hour later it came. The ear piercing squawk of Isaac’s mother shrieking his name from downstairs. Neither Jack nor Isaac said a word as he crept down the stairs alone to face whatever horrible fate was coming to him. Jack could hear much yelling from downstairs but couldn’t make out what was being said. After about thirty minutes a teary eyed Isaac ascended the stairs back up into the room. “Well?” Jack asked nervously. Isaac just starred at the ground as he spoke, “I… Tried to tell her it was you who hurt the cat… She didn’t believe me…  Said you weren’t real…” Jack frowned knowing this was all his fault. Isaac used his sleeve to wipe away his tears, “I’m being sent off to a boarding school… I’m leaving tonight… and you can’t come with me…” Laughing Jack’s face turned to shock, “What?! I-I can’t come? Where will I go?” Isaac said nothing but pointed over at the beautiful colored box from where his friend had originated. “Back in there? But I wont be able to get out until…” Jack paused. Isaac looked up as his only friend with tears streaming down his face, “Jack… I promise I’ll come back for you as soon as I can!” Jack looked at the box, then back at Isaac. “And I’ll be right here waiting for you kido.” Jack smiled as a single tear ran down his cheek. He walked over to the box and with a puff of smoke was sucked back in, unable to be free until once again opened.
            That night Isaac was sent off to boarding school. For the first time Laughing Jack felt what it was like to be lonely. Even when trapped in his box Jack was able to see the things going on around it, so each day he waited for his friend to return, and each day the room grew older and dustier. Laughing Jack’s one purpose was to be Isaac’s best friend for life, and now he waits day after day, month after month, to reunite with his special friend. Isaac’s parents still lived in the house but never came to the upstairs room. The only time they made their presence known was when Jack would hear them fighting. Still Jack’s life became one of solitude, loneliness, and disappointment. As years went by Jack’s once bright vibrant colors began to fade into a monochrome blur of pitch-black void and stark white emptiness. Trapped all alone… eternal and hopeless.
           13 years passed until the night Isaac’s father came home particularly drunk, and got into an argument with his wife as per usual. Things escalated to physical violence once again, however this time, she didn’t get back up. Isaac’s father had beaten his wife to a dead bloody pulp and was sentenced to hang at the gallows the next day. With both his parents dead this meant that the now 20-year-old Isaac inherited the dusty old house he spent the earlier half of his childhood in. Laughing Jack was quite surprised when he heard his old friend’s footsteps walking up the stairs to the attic room for the first time in 13 years, however it was not the reunion Jack had hoped for. Isaac looked… different. Not only was he older, but he also seemed to posses this odd grim look on his face. No longer was he the hopeful and curious young boy Jack first met all those years ago. Jack eagerly awaited Isaac’s releasing him from the prison he had waited in for so many years, but still Jack’s box sat there untouched and unnoticed on a shelf in the corner of the room with all the other dusty unwanted knick-knacks. Isaac had completely forgotten about his old friend, dismissed as some sort of early childhood fabrication. Surprisingly this made Laughing Jack feel… nothing. He was hollow, 13 years of waiting and disappointment left the monochrome clown void of sorrow and self-pity. Jack remained in his box, colorless and without emotion.
         The next day Isaac went off to work at his job as an upholsterer, doing furniture repairs for the good people of London. Jack waited in captivity. Hours later a drunken Isaac returned home and stumbled up the stairs to his room, but this time he had a friend with him. It was a lady friend Isaac had picked up at the bar earlier that evening. She was beautiful with flowing blonde hair, sapphire blue eyes, and a smile that could make hearts melt. Laughing Jack’s attention was drawn to Isaac’s guest, “Who is this? A new friend? Why does Isaac need new friends? I thought I was Isaac’s only friend?” Jack thought to himself from within his hellish confinement. Isaac and his lady friend sat down on the bed and chatted about life in London. Isaac made a joke about the weather and they both laughed. Laughing Jack hissed with envy over Isaac’s new friend. Isaac and the girl looked deeply into each other’s eyes as they leaned in for a kiss, locking lips with a passionate swirling of tongues in one another’s mouth. Jack was perplexed by this strange display of affection, for he had never seen kissing before. As the kissing grew more intense Isaac ran his hand along the girl’s smooth thigh and up her dress, however his guest just brushed his hand away. Isaac was persistent though, and once again ran his hand along her smooth thigh and up her skirt, this time placing his hand upon her silky undergarments. The woman took great displeasure with Isaac’s sexual advancements and pushed Isaac away before delivering a hard smack across his face. Isaac’s eyes darkened as he glared at the woman, his once drunken passion turned into booze-fueled anger. The woman’s heart sped up as she saw Isaac’s face boil with rage. “STUPID WHORE!” Isaac yelled as he smashed his fist into the girl’s face. Laughing Jack’s eyes widened as he witnessed the long streaks of red liquid gushing from the girl’s nose, “What game is this?” he thought, his eyes a virgin to such violent sights. Isaac firmly clutched the girl’s wrist with one hand as he tore her panties off with the other. The terrified girl tried to fight back but Isaac was overpowering her. He roughly fondled her breasts before savagely grabbing her hair and forcing his tongue down the sobbing young woman’s throat, who responded by chomping down as hard as she could on Isaac’s tongue. Jack watched with wide and curious eyes as his old friend released his new playmate and clutched his mouth as it filled with warm red blood.  The frightened girl fell off the bed and dropped down on the floor as she scurried toward the exit. Isaac quickly lurched forward and was able to catch his fleeing plaything by the end of her dress. Reaching back he wielded a lead candlestick off the nightstand beside him, and with all of his might bashed in the back of the young woman’s head, which burst open like a ripe watermelon. Thick blood splattered across the room as the girl’s body convulsed on the ground for several seconds before going completely still. Blood was everywhere, some droplets even managed to get on Laughing Jack’s box, who was very much enjoying show. For the first time in 13 long years a smile began to creep across Laughing Jack’s face, and all of a sudden a chuckle escaped his cold lips, then another, and another, until Jack was cackling and howling with laughter from inside his sealed box.  “What a wonderfully fascinating game!” Jack thought as he watched the motionless girl’s golden blonde hair flow red with blood.
          As the adrenaline began to mellow Isaac realized he had to dispose of the body. He picked up the girl’s lifeless corpse and plopped it on the bed, he then left the room closing the door behind him and locking it before leaving the house. He returned almost a full day later and re-entered the room brining with him a metal garbage can and his bag of upholstery tools from work. He then cleared everything off the wooden desk on the wall opposite to the door, and then dragged the bed with bloody corpse into the middle of the room. This not only gave Isaac room to work, but it also gave Laughing Jack a front row seat to the whole spectacle. Jack watched with a big unfading grin as Isaac played his new game with the soiled corpse. Once Isaac was all set up, he got to work. First he dumped out the contents of his big black tool bag onto the worktable behind him. An assortment of knives, hammers, pliers, and other tools was now laid out before him. His first pick was curved upholstery knife, which he used to carefully skin the body. That skin was then placed on racks to be stretched and turned into leather. Once that was put in place, Isaac then used a handsaw to saw off the arms, legs, and head, disturbing the home of several families of maggots in the process. After filling the garbage can with bleach and other vile chemicals, he submerged the limbs until the meat was stripped from the bones. Isaac fished the bones out of the soupy corpse juice and placed them on the worktable, then in the cover of night he brought the trash can outside and dumped the rotten remains into the London sewers to be swept away into the harbor.
         For the next 3 days Laughing Jack watched with wonderment as the inspired Isaac crafted the once human anatomy into a grotesque armchair abomination. The femur was made into the back legs of the chair, while the tibia with the feet still attached of course, was made into the front chair legs. A wooden frame was used for the base and backing of the chair, however the rim of the backing was crafted using the spinal column. The arm bones were used as the arms of the chair, and were fastened in place by some ribs. The now leathery flesh was sewn onto the seat and backing of the chair, and the golden blonde hair was braided into a lining for the base. Atop this armchair from hell sat the skull that once belonged to the girl who had the golden blonde hair, the sapphire eyes, and the smile that could melt hearts. Isaac was quite pleased with his work, and Laughing Jack too was impressed by his old playmate’s profound creativity. After that night Isaac never touched another drop of alcohol again, for he now possessed a much more macabre thirst.
          In the following weeks Isaac made several improvements to his little workshop of horrors. He removed the mattress from the bed and put a row of thick wooden planks in its place, and then he fastened arm and leg restraints to the bottom and sides. This would mean he would be able to entertain his guests for a longer period without them trying any rude escape attempts. Isaac needed only one final thing before planning another grotesque party. He worked on it for a week straight, hand carving it out of wood. After a coat of white paint was applied, Isaac’s creation was complete. It was a wooden mask resembling something one would wear at a Venetian masquerade ball. It had a furrowed brow and a long troll-like nose, and would allow him to strike fear in the hearts of his beloved guests. With his new face complete and the room transformed into a bloody murder nest, it was finally time for Isaac Lee Grossman to bring home a new playmate.
         That following night Laughing Jack watched as the masked Isaac Grossman stomped up the stairs, carrying with him a large burlap sack with his newest guest writhing within. He dumped the bag out on his torture bed, and out plopped a bound, gagged, and very frightened young boy probably only 5 or 6 years old. Isaac quickly undid the boy’s bindings and held him down as he restrained his hands and feet to the steel bedframe. Tears streamed endlessly down the boy’s helpless little face, as Isaac laid out his tools on the workbench. Isaac returned wielding a pair of rusty pliers, and wasting no time he slid the bottom jaw of the pliers under the boy’s fingernail on his right index finger and clamped it tightly. The child’s eyes quivered as he began muttering through his gag, begging Isaac to let him go. Isaac smirked as he slowly bent the pliers backward, painfully prying off the first fingernail. The boy screamed through his gag as he writhed in agony on the wooden boards, his finger beginning to gush with blood. Isaac then moved on to the boy’s middle finger, firmly grasping the nail with the rusty pliers. Once again he jerked the pliers back, but this time the nail only tore off half way. The boy yelped in pain as his fingers twitched and shot with blood. Clamping the half pried off nail, Isaac gave it another yank. The nail tore off but not without taking a good deal of skin tissue with it. Even Isaac was a bit rebuffed by this painful sight, unlike the spying Laughing Jack who was cackling with joy at the disturbing action as he watched from within his old dusty box. Isaac returned to the workbench and swapped the pliers for a large iron hammer. He then made his way to the foot of the torture bed, where with one hand he held down the boy’s left leg. He raised the hammer high above his head as the boy cried and pleaded for mercy through his dirty gag, then with all his might Isaac slammed the hammer down on to the boy’s bare kneecap, shattering the bone into gravel with a loud CRACK! The child convulsed in pain with shrill screams muffling through the cloth gag tied tightly to his face. As the child struggled with intense pain, Isaac placed the hammer down on the wooden bed and returned once more to the workbench where he equipped himself with a long sharp knife. Without delay he began carving the words “Useless Worm” into the child’s quivering chest. When he finished the boy was barely conscious. Isaac knelt down and whispered into the boy’s ear, “This is what happens to rotten children who make nasty faces at people…” The child’s eyes filled with tears one final time as Isaac began to carve the skin off the boy’s face, but to Isaac’s surprise the boy still clung to life. The mutilated child just stared up at Isaac with his big round eyes, which filled Isaac’s black heart with rage and hatred. “EVEN WITHOUT A FACE YOURE STILL AN UGLY LITTLE SHIT!!” Isaac shouted as he picked up the hammer from the foot of the bed and began to bash the poor boy’s skull in. He smashed it over and over, until it was nothing but a bloody caved in mass of flesh, pouring with thick red blood and oozing out chunks of brain matter. From across the room Laughing Jack gleefully observed the grand finale, which had lived up to his expectations quite wonderfully.
         Isaac’s next guest was a blind old woman whom he had invited over for some tea. It took her almost 5 minutes to realize the chair she was sitting on was crafted using human remains, and another 6 minutes to find the stairs, only to topple down them flailing and screaming like a loon. Isaac decided to end the cruel joke there with a simple ice pick through her eye socket. After that he brought over a little girl whom he force-fed broken glass before using her stomach as a punching bag. As the weeks went by more and more unlucky souls met their end in Isaac Grossman’s attic, and as the mad Grossman’s personality became more dark and sadistic, Laughing Jack’s personality followed suit while he rotted within his dusty box… until one very cold December night.
         The rusty nails that were holding up the shelf of forgotten knick-knacks finally gave way and the whole thing plummeted to the ground. Isaac heard the loud thud from downstairs, and decided to climb up to the attic to investigate. He walked across the blood stained wood floor of the attic, over toward the fallen shelf. Isaac brushed aside some of the trinkets that broke in the crash, when he finally came across the Jack-in-a-box from his childhood. Isaac barely recognized the old tattered box as he picked it up and blew off some of the dust. Then for whatever nostalgic reason he decided to grasp the box’s rusty clank and begin turning it. A horribly off key Pop Goes The Weasel clanked from the worn out old box, and as it reached its climax Isaac sung along with the final verse, “Pop goes the weasel…” The top of the box swung open but nothing happened, it was empty. Isaac expected as much, and he tossed the old box in the garbage with the other broken knick-knacks. After the mess was cleaned up he went to open the door to go back downstairs, but it was stuck. Isaac pulled hard but the door wouldn’t budge. Just then he heard the most horrible raspy voice call out from behind him. “IsSsaAac…” A cold jolt ran down Isaac’s spine and the hairs on the back of his neck stood straight up as he slowly turned around… All the way across the room by the garbage can stood the nightmarish Laughing Jack. He was completely monochrome, his mangled black hair hung down in twisted locks, sharp jagged teeth decorated his twisted grin, and his arms hung down like a ragdoll with his grotesquely long fingers nearly scraping the floor. Then with a bone chilling raspy voice fiendish clown spoke, “How nice it is to finally be free!... Did you miss me Isaac?” Isaac was paralyzed in fear, “b-but I thought you weren’t real… IMAGINARY?!” Isaac stuttered. Jack replied with a long horrifying cackle. “HAHAHAHA! Oh I’m quite real kiddo… In fact I’ve been waiting such a long time for this day to finally come… When I can play with my best friend for life… One. Last. Time!” Before Isaac could reply, Jack’s long arms stretched across the room and wrapped around Isaac’s legs. The twisted clown began pulling him closer, dragging him onto his own wooden torture bed as Isaac’s fingernails scraped along the floor. Ignoring the restraints, Jack swiftly grabbed 4 three-inch long iron nails from the workbench and pressed them straight through of Isaac’s hands and feet, nailing him to the wooden torture bed. Isaac growled in pain as he shouted at his captor, “AAAH! FUCK YOU! GOD DAMN CLOWN NOSED FREAK!!” Laughing Jack just chuckled as he forcefully held Isaac’s head in place stating, “If you cant say something nice, then don’t say anything at all!” Jack reached his long crooked fingers into Isaac’s mouth, firmly grasping his tongue and stretching it out as far as it could go. The clown then reached back and grabbed a long sharp knife from the table and slowly began to slice through the meat of Isaac’s tongue. Once lobbed off, Isaac’s mouth began to overflow with blood. Jack responded by shoving a small cylindrical metal tube trough Isaac’s throat to act as a temporary breathing hole. At this point Isaac was already in great pain, and had his eyes clenched shut to avoid seeing the sickening horrors that were being preformed upon his body. “Come on, its no fun if you don’t watch!” Laughing Jack said playfully, but Isaac kept his eyes tightly shut. Laughing Jack sighed, “Suit yourself.” Jack then forcibly held open one of Isaac’s eyes. He reached back with his big arm and took out some long pointy fishing hooks from the workbench. Slowly Jack pushed the sharp end of the hook through the top eyelid straight through the bottom of the eyebrow and out the top, permanently pinning it open. Then he took out a second hook pushing it through the bottom eyelid and pinning it to the cheek. Jack repeated the process to the other eye, and before long a series of sharp metal hooks made sure Isaac didn’t miss out on any of the action. Laughing Jack then took the same knife he had used to lob off Isaac’s tongue and began to focus on the removal of Isaac’s lips. Jack carefully sliced two long strips of flesh off of Isaac’s upper and lower mouth, causing his teeth and gums to be completely exposed. “Hmm… looks like someone hasn’t been flossing regularly…” Laughing Jack cackled under his breath as he reached back and grabbed the hammer. Isaac attempted to mutter some kind of beg for mercy, however only gurgled moans escaped his throat. Jack raised that hammer into the air and with a twisted grin he slammed it down, giving off a loud CRACK as the iron hammer shattered Isaac’s teeth like brittle clay. Jack dropped the hammer and began to howl with laughter as he tore open Isaac’s shirt. Taking the sharpest knife, Jack cut straight down Isaac’s chest all the way down past the stomach. Isaac groaned with sharp stinging pain as the monochrome monster wormed his wretched fingers underneath the skin on Isaac’s chest, peeling it back as he was about to preform his horrible live autopsy.
          First Jack began to pull out Isaac’s intestines in the same manner a magician would pull a series of colorful cloths out of his pocket. Then after snipping off a small length of intestines, Jack pressed one end against his cold black lips and began blowing air into the foul organ. Once inflated, he twisted it up into the shape of a poodle, and with a loud chuckle exclaimed, “I can do giraffes too!” Isaac remained still in pain and shock, as the clown creature gently placed the macabre balloon animal beside Isaac’s head. For his next trick Laughing Jack reached deep into Isaac’s open stomach cavity and yanked out one of his kidneys. Holding it in his hand, Jack turned to his captive friend and shrugged stating that, “kidneys really aren’t my thing...” Tossing the organ aside Laughing Jack noticed that Isaac was beginning to drift into death. “Feeling tired already? Why were nearly at the grand finale!” Laughing Jack exclaimed as he reached into his sleeve and pulled out a long adrenaline needle. “This ought to perk you RIGHT up!” Jack shouted as he slammed the needle into Isaac’s retina and injected the liquid into his right eye socket. Jack wiggled and twisted the needle further into his old playmate’s eyeball, as Isaac was reeled back into life to the feeling of a sharp needle scraping the back of his eye socket. With a sinister chuckle Jack yanked the needle out, pulling the eyeball out with it. Isaac’s right eye now hung out of its socket by the eyestalk as it dribbled down the side of his face. Jack smirked, “Well now that I have your full attention…” The insidious clown then took his long crooked index finger and poked a hole in Isaac’s stomach. Jack lowered his head down toward the open chest cavity and stretched his mouth open wide. Within seconds a torrent of filthy cockroaches started crawling out of the clown’s gullet, spilling onto Isaac’s open chest. Each vile roach crawled and pushed its way into the small opening in Isaac’s stomach, filling it from within full of disgusting writhing bugs. As his stomach became bloated with bugs, the roaches began to scurry up his throat, squeezing their way out of his mouth and nasal cavity.
       Isaac was inches from death when his captor kneeled beside him and spoke into his ear, “It’s been a blast kido, but it looks like our time together is about up. No need for tears though, because I plan to spread my friendship to all the lonely kids of the world!” and with that said, Laughing Jack reached into Isaac’s chest and yanked out his still beating heart. As his life bled out on that cold wooden bed, Isaac’s life flashed before his eyes. He saw his mother, his father, the boarding school, his victims, and the last thought that fluttered through his mind, was of that very special Christmas where he woke up to find the beautifully hand carved wooden box that contained his very first friend...
          There are rumors that when the police finally found Isaac Grossman’s rotten maggot infested corpse weeks later on Christmas Eve, that even though his face had been bashed and torn to bits… He almost looked… Happy.
~THE END~
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0lexdelapp [2014-04-05 02:22:40 +0000 UTC]

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Hello~! I have to warn you that the only creepypasta I read besides this one was the Hetalia one, and I won't be able to compare. But I'm sure that I will be as honest as possible~! ^^
When I first started reading this, I was completely surprised. I've seen pictures of Laughing Jack, and didn't know that he was very colorful before things took a wrong turn. I actually feel quite sorry for Jack, and I was also surprised that I wasn't sad at all when Isaac died. I give vision 100% because I could see what was happening clearly, and loving every second of it! XD
Like I said before, I haven't heard the stories of any of the creepypastas, except how the bonus episode of APH. So to me, this is all you! *thumbs up*
I have to say, you are an amazing writer! This is better written then some books I've read! I'm actually really jealous~! So a perfect 10 on technique!
Impact: HOLY SHIT, I'm gonna remember this forever! This is seriously one of the most amazing pieces I've read, and I just can't find a reason to dislike it. It's filled with a few things I love! Gore, blood (same thing, I don't care), a few things I can relate to (like the being poor kind of thing), it takes place in 19th century in London (I love that combination!), friendship, and most of all. . . TORTURE!! I don't know why but I just love the idea of torture (don't judge please)
I actually wish I could go on and on about torture, but I'm already way past the limit on here! Actually, the only thing I dislike about this is how they tortured. I will just rap this up with just one or two sentences so I don't have to bore you. If I was in their shoes, I would careful with how I do it. For one thing I wouldn't break their bones. I would only give flesh-wounds, make their pain last as long as possible, and treat their bones like precious jewels. . . . I just creeped you out, didn't I? XD
Well, that's it for me! Bye~! ^^
(Total count of words for this critique is 363. Not counting this note of course.)

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TheCrazyWolfGal [2014-03-30 16:19:21 +0000 UTC]

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Ehehehe.... I am not reading this before I go to sleep again...... Anyways, overall, it's quite a nice piece of literature. I personally think of it quite shocking, I was surprised to see something of much detail. The idea of Laughing Jack is amazing, though he changed a lot since Isaac was a child. I haven't seen another like this, it stands out against them.

The 'Kidneys aren't really my thing.' quote, made me crack up. The Eyeless Jack reference was too much XD. This impressed me in many ways, I can't even begin to list them. As a creepypasta fan myself, I love to see pieces like this.

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CarmenGodoy550 [2014-03-17 18:22:39 +0000 UTC]

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This is the best creepypasta I've read!
So Laughnig Jack was not always a murderer but a good and harmless, well not so inoffensive clown since he killed the neighbor's cat (poor kitty, if Jack were real would protect my cat, AWAY FROM MY CAT EMO CLOWN!).
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Este es el mejor creepypasta que he leído!!
Así que Laughnig Jack no era siempre un asesino sino un payaso bueno e inofensivo, bueno no tan inofensivo desde que el mato al gato del vecino (pobre gatito, si Jack fuese real protegería a mi gata, ALEJATE DE MI GATO PAYASO EMO!!!)

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sasukexkarin666 [2014-03-04 02:26:52 +0000 UTC]

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I liked this story and pretty much all that it portrays. hen I saw this story it intrigued me enough to give it a look and it was an enjoyable experience but the technique writing has been used before but he managed to improve on it so that's always good. My only real problem I can foresee this story encountering is that it is a long story and some people are just not going to be interested in reading for a while. I didn't mind how long it was but I do see a gap in plot points there but I liked it.

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creepypasta-lover [2014-02-17 21:23:37 +0000 UTC]

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I really like this story, its wery detailed and Well written.
I like the time line of how it was for Jack waiting in the box, i think you are one of the Best writers of creepypastas i have read so far.
The details are wery good and i like Reading every detail there was, you have a great talent, even though it is a very bloody story it is also a very good one if you are in for bloody/Murder storys. I would like to read more of your storys if you wanna make more of them, good work

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hailgenocide [2014-01-17 11:26:08 +0000 UTC]

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This story is well-written, well, it is quite gruesome, but very well-detailed. In the first part, it definitely captures the feeling of sadness, neglect and somewhat betrayal, not being able to live the luxuries of other people and unfairness that has come into Isaac's life. And when it comes to the point of Laughing Jack seeing Isaac through the box, it comes back to the neglect and betrayal of how no one had talked to Jack. With Isaac torturing the other people, it was like a watch-and-learn for the point when Jack came to torture Isaac.

If one was reading it and could picture this happening, it would surely cause a few frights, or even a lot (it doesn't scare me).

A negative, the capitals, such as the
"EVEN WITHOUT A FACE YOU'RE STILL AN UGLY LITTLE SHIT!!!", it could threaten the reader.

Overall, this is very well-written and it describes many emotions, from jealousy to revenge and vicious glory. Well done, Snuff.

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redlittle [2014-01-13 11:09:58 +0000 UTC]

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Absolutely one of the more finer pastas I've ever read. You truly did great job at creating a single effect upon the reader. The great imagery helped provide a perfect atmosphere for the reader, and at some points is almost too vivid for my own mind to withstand.

Other than a few grammatical errors and some drag-on paragraphs, you did and fantastic job. The origin story by far topped your first story of laughing Jack. A feat that most sequels fail to do these days, and gave so much life-like qualities to your characters. Instead of just providing the rogue murderer to your story, you appealed to a more human aspect, which reflects upon the reader making them feel more in touch with the character. A quality you see this trait more in famous pastas as well. (Jeff the Killer, Ticci-Toby, Ben Drowned, etc..)

Fine Job indeed! Keep up the good work!

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Username353 [2014-01-08 22:46:41 +0000 UTC]

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Wow, I didn't realize Laughing Jack had an origin story~! Shows you where I've been. e.deviantart.net/emoticons/a/a… " width="19" height="19" alt="" data-embed-type="emoticon" data-embed-id="417" title="Sweating a little..."/>

Alrighty, so let's begin. Overall, it's not a bad story by any means! However, in terms of the formatting and such, I fear that there might be a small "wall of text" issue. Although you do have a bit of an indent for each paragraph, there's still incredibly long paragraphs- plus, although there's the indent for the paragraphs, the lack of space between each of them still gives the "wall of text" illusion. The only reason something like that can be concerning is that it can overwhelm readers. XD Yet, at the same time, it's easily fixed~

Now, onto something that I think is more important than the paragraphs. For every new character that speaks, you should write the line of dialogue on a new line. So, an example would be-

Instead of-

"Pop goes the weasel...", but nothing happened. Isaac let out a sigh, "It's broken..."

Try something like-

"Pop goes the weasel...", but nothing happened. Isaac let out a sigh-

"It's broken..."

Even when the same character speaks, if they happen to have an especially long monologue then it helps to break up their dialogue onto a new line every now and again where it's appropriate. Again, it's all to avoid the dreaded "wall of text" and to make the story flow more smoothly. ^^

Now, to get really nit-picky!

You seem to have neglected to put in some apostrophes here and there- like "Id" instead of "I'd", "Its ok!" instead of "It's okay!"- "Ill" instead of "I'll"... but again, super small stuff that's easily fixable with a little proof reading. e.deviantart.net/emoticons/s/s… " width="15" height="15" alt="" data-embed-type="emoticon" data-embed-id="391" title=" (Smile)"/>

Now onto the incredibly nit-picky!

If you can- try to avoid the excessive use of caps or exclamation points. Like for example, when someone's yelling- "EVEN WITHOUT A FACE YOURE YOU'RE STILL AN UGLY LITTLE SHIT!!!"

Try something like italics or bold face words. And one exclamation point will suffice just fine! e.deviantart.net/emoticons/b/b… " width="15" height="15" alt="" data-embed-type="emoticon" data-embed-id="366" title=" (Big Grin)"/> So- re-written above, it would look like

"Even without a face you're still an ugly little shit!"

I personally thing that using those sort of things would have a lot more impact rather than all caps with a few exclamation points. ^_^

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AwsomeQua [2014-01-01 07:49:44 +0000 UTC]

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This is the best horror story I have ever read!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I give it two bloody enthusiastic thumbs all the way up!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I have always loved stories about killer clowns but this one takes the cake & every little trimming!!!!!!! I can't wait to read the rest of your stories on here and check out what other things you have in store for the general public!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! You can definally expect a watch from me & I am inspired to come up with designs for the box you talked about & said the Laughing Jack was imprissioned within. Keep up all of the great work!!!!!!!!!!

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Stormtali [2013-12-30 20:27:19 +0000 UTC]

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A Very Chilling Origin Story for Laughing Jack. I First Read it at first it did not give me chills down my spine up until the near end then there is where it got the good scares and shivering in the arms. Though I Heard and read the originally Laughing Jack. It was very scary story indeed. I Even Saw the Trailer For The Laughing Jack Film which That made me go through the ceiling on the jumpscares. This Story being one of the great examples of a story that really nails the thing it did I give this a 9.5/10

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LostLillypad [2013-12-18 21:19:42 +0000 UTC]

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If I could offer more than just 5 stars in impact and vision I would because I loved Laughing Jack and I'm absolutely in love with his history. I flinched and squirmed so many times and now that I know my favorite clowns history I absolutely adore him even more, it freaked me out though when Laughing Jack was all cheerful and happy >.>

There's not really anything negative I can really say because you never fail to satisfy. One question though, is Isaac the kid in the new series on your YT channel? I've been trying to figure it out and I think so but I could be wrong.

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MinecraftLady1112 [2013-12-17 05:32:23 +0000 UTC]

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All I have to say is wow. This is a spectacular creepypasta and with this , dare I say it, prolouge, it's an even better creepypasta. You, sir, have out done yourself to great heights and now all I have to ask is that you keep up the great work. This isn't the first thing I've seen from you, and I must say all of your works are amazing and you deserve a lot more recognition than you currently have. I also must thank you for creating my very favorite creepypasta well known as Laughing Jack.And again I say, your work is spectacular, don't stop creating.

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villiantimewleeannn [2013-12-17 00:14:06 +0000 UTC]

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This is a beautifully crafted work of art. It left me hungry, and wanting to hear and see and imagine more of Jack's killings. And, "I really don't do kidneys"? magnificent. The reference to Eyeless Jack that I saw, sorry if I am wrong, but that seemed very macabre and also left me thinking of dark humor. I think that your writing was very developed and was, in fact, so detailed that I imagined the whole entire story. There is also something that I would like to point out. I found no spelling or grammatical errors. This is something that I, personally, love to find in the fan fiction universe. This is an amazing work of art, as I have said once before. The part at the beginning, the introductory, was so vivid and magnificent. It really made me feel Isaac's life in my heart and brain and mind.

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LovelyLumi [2013-12-16 13:04:07 +0000 UTC]

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Best creepypasta I've ever read; but I wouldn't expect any less from you, Snuff! e.deviantart.net/emoticons/b/b… " width="15" height="15" alt="" data-embed-type="emoticon" data-embed-id="366" title=" (Big Grin)"/>

Now I must must must draw more Laughing Jack fanart!!! XD

Your originality is amazing, to which I can only imagine that you must have been eating some really good brownies to come up with your evil-clown creation! e.deviantart.net/emoticons/b/b… " width="15" height="15" alt="" data-embed-type="emoticon" data-embed-id="366" title=" (Big Grin)"/>

Keep up the awesomeness!

(I love showing my friends your Laughing Jack story and watching their expression turn to sheer terror >u<)

Hell, the only true way to put this critique into precise words is: EPICALLY SNUFFBOMBING!!!! (now I must leave to do my schoolwork and come up with new fanart ideas) e.deviantart.net/emoticons/s/s… " width="15" height="15" alt="" data-embed-type="emoticon" data-embed-id="391" title=" (Smile)"/>

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XxSpikRxX [2013-12-14 20:41:26 +0000 UTC]

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I am always very very fond of your work and this story is the best thing I've read about laughing jack I've ever seen.i thought the first one was scary but this just scared me solid! I love all that gore and feeling in so much of it! I love how there is sad and emotional bends in so many of the parts of the story! It just tingles me how Isaac was smiling after laughing jack murdered him on the wooden bed. Laughing jack is my favorite creepypasta ever since I read his first story and just by reading this I love his pasta more! Keep up your amazing work!

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KyomiHikaru [2013-12-14 18:40:41 +0000 UTC]

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You've really outdone yourself. This story is beautifully written, and it just explains so much we didn't know about LJ,.

I've read this maybe three times (First time I lost my appetite but still thought it was great.) and with each time I read it, I feel like it doesn't feel the same from each time you read (in my opinion) and I was a little shocked that LJ was innocent at first XD.

The gore was amazing. I normally never feel 'sick' when I read gory creepypastas, well guess what. I could feel a knot forming in my stomach. Congrats on that!

All in all, this has probably jumped up to my top favorite creepypasta. (You even knocked down Jeff. Kudos!)

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SugarCoatedKitty [2013-12-14 12:42:57 +0000 UTC]

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I think this is amazing, the fact that LJ became twisted and waited for Isaac to come back was awesome. the detail in this is amazing and I was almost ill, I could actually see what was going on! the idea for this is amazing and the gore was so cool. All in all this is an amazingly detail creative and gory story and I love it e.deviantart.net/emoticons/b/b… " width="15" height="15" alt="" data-embed-type="emoticon" data-embed-id="366" title=" (Big Grin)"/> the was Isaac grew up made me sad but the fact that LJ and Isaac kinda became twisted together was really creepy and awesome

This is my first critique so please don't hate me if it's awful :L

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SkelloMelon [2013-12-14 11:07:16 +0000 UTC]

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oh my god! that was terrifying! i was alomost puking, laughing jack really is the most famous creepypasta now! good job snuffbomb. thank you for creating this vile creature! i wish he was real though T-T. i think you should have a cookie, your so good at stories like that! the "even though his face had been bashed and torn to bits he almost looked happy" part made my day!i still don't get it! how come issac is a grossman but died by his own imaginary friend? that actually made me quite sad and happy at the same time. wow.

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jeffthekillerfan578 [2013-12-14 03:28:04 +0000 UTC]

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This was kinda sad for laughing jack but it had a lot of details tha made me love and feel pity for LJ. Plus the way you disurbied everything was like i was seeing it with my own to eyes. The way you made Isaac seem like a pyscho when hr was a child to made it easier to tell he was going to become a killer.
LJ grew darker from Isaac and so he became the laughing jack e all love today. (sorry if some words are spelt wrong. My phone is acting as if BEN was in it.)

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YoriDoriArts [2013-12-14 02:26:05 +0000 UTC]

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It's fascinating how it was innocent at first but later grew corrupt. In the end, the very friend who brightened Isaac's darker days became his worst nightmare.

Although his childhood and how in some ways Isaac grew up to be like his father was generic, I still didn't expect him to kill someone and make an armchair with them. That's original, and I often watch horror movies.

The gore in this story was very creative, and having Laughing Jack make wise-cracks about his little "game". Wow, this was probably the first horror story that brought me close to vomiting. Congratulations!

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QueenDreaveev [2013-12-14 01:54:15 +0000 UTC]

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Yes! This story was extremely well written! It brought out so many emotions for me & it was scary! I cried, I thought I was going to throw up, & I flinched multiple times! I'm sure that's exactly what you were going for with this! I was looking forward to this story & yet I was still very iffy about reading it because of it being so disgusting! You really got me at the eye part! I hate eyes! I'm glad I did read it though because it was amazing! Great job Snuffles! I loved it! Keep it up! (P.S.- Isaac's last name threw me for a big loop! OMG! PLOT TWIST!)

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Requiem-of-Ice [2013-12-14 01:45:25 +0000 UTC]

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W-wow...
What can I say? This was marvelously executed. This had enough impact to both creep me out and make my entire body feel odd. This was very well crafted, and I could imagine the entire thing happening from both a third and first person perspective. This was very original, and quickly surprised me with a few characters. The atmosphere is also quite mystifying and is brought together well with the characters, thus balancing this out.

The gore of the victims, and the varied description of the murders was spectacular. I would like to say that this story has impacted me to the point that I say that it is very marvelous, well executed and imaginative in two perspectives.

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AgentMaryland93 [2013-12-14 01:21:42 +0000 UTC]

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What an interesting background story that which started all the macabre! Laughing Jack is truly an interesting character to behold. Very original, very well thought out. I enjoyed reading this very much.

I love the well detailed gore vision and how it fit into the plot behind the character. And over all it was a fascinating story! (Also, I believe that was a poke fun at Eyeless Jack reference with the 'Kidney's aren't my thing' bit, that made me laugh. XD)

Besides a few grammatical errors of spelling and what not, this was an enthralling read. (Don't feel bad, I'm just a super grammar Nazi, but even I make grammatical mistakes XD) Besides that though? Everything else was beautiful; in a monochrome, death, and gore riddled way. ^^

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catalinapassion [2013-12-14 01:18:45 +0000 UTC]

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Well personally I started this thinking it wasn't going to be that bad, but thank you for going beyond expectations. The detail of each death made me cringe and gag, but I couldn't stop reading. It was the most dark, twisted story I ever read in my entire life and I loved it. I will forever fear the song 'Pop-goes-the-weasel' and I will be sleeping with the lights on for the next month.And I loved the fact you added Grossman in there too,but I won't say anymore to keep from adding any spoiler.Great work and I plan on sharing it with everyone.

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ExpectOCs [2019-11-17 22:09:00 +0000 UTC]

Soiled bed sheets? Isaac is a little pp boy. I read this out load to my friends and refused to call him Isaac and only Pp Boy

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LadySionis [2019-08-22 20:18:36 +0000 UTC]

I really loved the part where Jack claims kidneys aren't his thing. It was like a shout out to another Jack we all know and love. XD

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Ephrom-Josine [2019-06-02 03:01:23 +0000 UTC]

You have somehow made the torturing and killing of a child and a blind woman boring, congratulations. Bad Creepypasta was right, this story is the worst kind of awful. Keep in mind, that's coming from someone who actually likes the idea of Laughing Jack. You have no understanding of poverty in the 19th century, no understanding of history in general, and no understanding of how to write anything but gore. That isn't scary, it's more gross followed by bland. I was more disgusted with you for writing such detail in regards to children being killed then I was actually scared. This is really only scary if it were a nightmare happening to you, not scary if you're reading it happening to someone fictional. While I think you do have a good chance of becoming a good author, make no mistake, this is a story you'll have to work your way up from. Basically, it's clear you can write, this just is not a good example of you doing so.

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muffinatmidnight In reply to Ephrom-Josine [2020-02-07 08:13:23 +0000 UTC]

I haven't bothered to read the entire comment section here, but you're the only sensible person I've come across so far.

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MugiMewgi [2017-11-03 06:22:41 +0000 UTC]

While I thought the first Laughing Jack story was good on it's own, this is a alright sequel if you ask me. Although it kinda ruins my headcanon of it all being in the mother's head and she really did kill the son, but whatever.

I am not a fan of the beginning, Jack is a literal Deus Ex Machina to begin with, he could've had a better introduction or something. Though I do like how Jack changed for the worse. The part with the dead cat does a good job at foreshadowing the killer that Isaac eventually becomes, and also the part about how Laughing Jack adapts to whatever Isaac likes gives a good explanation on how Isaac's sociopathic change affects Jack as well, and why he would want to kill him after being released from the box. I also like how despair had caused Jack to lose his color and emotion, very emotional there. For all of you nay-sayers who say it's all gore, that is not true. I mean look at those moments like what I just described.

When you think about it, Laughing Jack was not initially evil. He is only what Issac actually was and changed to be, not to mention he was also put into years of solitude without Isaac. So he is actually just a poor soul forced to do what his counterpart turned out to be. It's actually kind of sad when you think about it. Plus even though Jack goes on to kill other children, he killed Isaac who had now become an insane murderer, so with Isaac's death he is not really killing a good person.

However, there were some problems that this story really had that I must address. I mean this isn't a terrible story, but then again, not a masterpiece. For starters, this takes place in the 1800s, but he uses an Adrenaline Shot on him? Adrenaline Shots weren't invented until 1901.

Overall I'd give it an 8 out of 10.

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LunalaCrevan [2017-06-02 00:21:39 +0000 UTC]

Love this!

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LeilaTree [2017-05-21 16:27:56 +0000 UTC]

Damn its such a good yet scary story   

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killerkitfangirl [2017-04-07 05:51:41 +0000 UTC]

i read this listening to pop goes the weasel ... thank god i have sleeping pills tonight

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