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I MADE A LINEART AND TRIED TO MAKE A CLEAN COLORATION AND ALSO TO WRITE JAPANESESUCH AN ACHIEVEMENT
( this is the first drawing from my "new gallery" as i deleted all the other deviations by the way. i'll try to make more clean drawings like this one, because my "old" gallery was really ugly. >_> )
ALSO i activate critiques because i really want to improve, so if you see anything i have could have done to improve this drawing, please tell me!
I hope you like it. ♥
Melody © *Teadi
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thank you very much for the critique!!! ♥
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Vision:
This doesn't really represent a point or show a story... But it shows a person and every person has a story And when you look at someone you see their expression try to guess their feelings and that is a story in itself.
Originality:
This is a very commonly used technique, digital, art but you have done it in your own way. And I think you have used your won character.
Technique:
Your colors and shading is superb! You have also used bubbles of lighting, it would be good f you done a few more. The colors are very neat and there patterns are as well. The colors go well as well and they don't clash.
Impact:
The doesn't necessarily blow my mind as it is very simple but because it is very cute and has a story behind, yet one we don't know. It makes e want to fave ite.deviantart.net/emoticons/let… " width="15" height="15" alt="
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awww thank you so much for the critique, my dear!! ♥ It really means alot, I'm happy you like it!! Just a little question, for the bubbles of lighting, where do you think I could add some more? c:
Thank you again for everything!!
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Maybe a few more on the hair an clothes, and skin...
Otherwise it's perfect >.<
I'm happy I could help
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First off, I love this piece. It's a sheer joy to look at, and it's so easy to just stare at it for ages.
As far as improvements go, one of her feet is pointed inwards so sharply it looks unnatural, and is extremely flat in comparison to her other foot. Because her foot is the only area that touches the outline of the shape, it's a lot more noticeable than one might think.
On top of this, her left arm's sleeve is so poof-y that it looks like her arm is not fitting inside it and is getting clipped. it's partially because the folds on the sleeve don't go anywhere, but also because we have no indication of how big her arms are or her hand is, based on the way the clothes are drawn.
But on to what I like - which is a lot. I love the line-work for this picture. the lines are curvy and full of character, and rarely do they compromise the form. The fact that all the lines are consistent in style, makes her silhouette flow in a way that she looks really striking.
Her clothing is adorable, and looks perfect on her. I love the pattern you chose for her sweatshirt, and the horizontal lines slow your eyes down in what would be a straight up and down picture composition. It subtly keeps you looking at her for a lot longer.
The choice of colours for shading and for the flat colours of her clothes really go well together and make her have a wonderful effect of making her pop from her pink background. Her hair feels like it has had a lot of attention put into it, and has a perfect energy to it.
Also her expression x3
You don't have much to improve on within your own style, but I hope this offered you food for thought.
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Aaaaah thank you so much for the critique omsidhfsoidhf //hugles// Yeah I just noticed for the foot ; m ; But I don't know how to draw feet omg I swear I try and also I try to find references but even when I find some I don't know how the hell I'm supposed to draw a foot that looks natural??? ARE THERE SOME CLASSES ON HOW TO DRAW FEET BC I WOULD SERIOUSLY NEED ONE /coughs/
and for the arm I don't really see what you mean tbh. ; ; I mean, to me it looks pretty hum, "normal"? I don't really see how I could've done it another way, I mean except if I made it closer to her arm, but I love to draw things that look to loose. ;w;
And thank you so so much for the compliments omg it really means a lot!! Thanks again for everything. ♥
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Hmm, what i was trying to saw with the arm is the sleeve looks like it cuts through where her arm would be near the wrist, but I don't know how thin her arm is, so i dunno if that's just my mistake. With feet, try and think of them as a trapezium shape coming out of the ankle for front on shots. and from the side think of them as a gold bar kind of shape, with a bend in where the ball of the foot is. Then again, I can't draw feet either.
You're very welcome though, keep drawing - you're very good at it
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Oooh yeah you're right! I guess it's only a mistake of innattention omg it looks so obvious now. x) Yeah I know all that but it's easier to think about it than to actually make them. ; A ; But I'll try to see tutorials/refs and improve at drawing them somehow, I have to. x')))
thank you so much for the watch btw ; AA ;
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AAAAAAAAAAAAAAA THIS IS SO CUTE<33333333333333333333333
I'M SO IN LOVE WITH YOUR WARM COLORING SEXY WATERMELON-- YOU'RE SO UNIQUE--
Her facial expression is so adorable aND HER JACKET AAAAAAAAAA--
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OISDHFMOSDIHFSDOF THANK YOU SO MUCH BBY AWMUGAD U'RE FLATTERING ME
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thank you so much oshdfmoisdhfoisdhf
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I like how you gave her a personality with just the clothing and how you positioned her. Like how she is blushing and looking away from something, like her crush might be nearby. The clothes, color scheme, and art style suggest that she is girly and a little child-like. The idiot hair sticking out (Ahoge as it sometimes called), and her knees together suggest she is nervous, but I cannot read that from her face,instead it suggests that she is looking at someone. If we could see who she is reacting to, it might give us a clearer idea. Overall, I like it, it says she is a shy girl looking at her crush who wants to hold a "keep cool" persona in front of him. It's the small things that give us an idea of who she is like.
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Aww thank you so much for the long comment! ♥ It means a lot, I'm really happy you like it hehe > 7 <
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This is adorable :3 Keep up the awesome work, you're killing it
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luidlsjdhdsu- thank you so much ; A ; <33
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Anytime. Hey, credit given where credit's due
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Oww, elle est toute mimi! ♥
J'adore ses cheveux, avec la petite lumière jaune. ~
Mmmh, je pense que les jambes ont un petit souci. Celle de droite ça va, mais celle de gauche, le pied est carrément de profil. Du coup la pose ne fait pas très naturelle. Essaie de modifier un peu le pied gauche pour voir.
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aw merci beaucoup!! ♥ je modifierai pas le pied par contre parce-que j'ai la flemme + pas le temps, mais j'essaierai de penser à faire des pieds moins chelou la prochaine fois xD C'est vrai que je viens de m'en rendre compte et beaucoup de gens me le disent x__x il faut que j'apprenne à les dessiner lmao
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Haha, pas de souci.
Mmmh, j'avais du mal aussi à une époque, mais en fait c'est juste une question d'"orientation", à mon sens. On a plus tendance à les dessiner de profil car ça parait plus simple.
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Honnetement la je passais sur DA comme ca donc je regardais pas les deviations mais la ça a vrt capturé mon attention.: )
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Haaan je suis trop contente que ce soit le cas, merci! ; A ; <33
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mERCI BEAUCOOOUP ; A ; <33
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MIOHDFMSDF- SAME HERE <33
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i've seen a cardigan like that in urban outfitters before but it was so expensive and i was broke that month ;A;
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sdfoijsdmofh sUCH A SAD STORY
i feel you babe
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yes it's a love that never will come true ;_;
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i love the colours and her outfit! i can clearly see that you put more effort into drawing her!
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Oh! Your art (lines and coloring both) has really improved. I love the colors in this work, and it's a real nice thing to look with all the softness in it~
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thank you so much smdofhsdoihsdmoifhsd-
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omg, dis is so niice!! this is a great improvement! //adding to favourites!//
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mosdihfmoisdhsdlfh - thank you so much bby ; AA ;
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losfhmosidf thank you so much ; AA ; <33
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QAQ you're welcome *A*)/ <3 `
Hoo your french ! Nice ^^ Do you have Facebook page?
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Yeaah I do > 7 < I'm not really active on it anymore as I don't have a lot of likes here though, but I'll try to give more updates soon >w< Here it is: www.facebook.com/adele.teadi
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What 102 like? QuQ is more them me :'3
Thanks for the link <3
I have many French friends (I'm canadian (Québec) ) Alors je parle français ^^
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Nah I meant active people on the page x) when I post something nobody likes or comments so it's a bit boring and I don't post anymore so people aren't active, and it goes on and on...
Oh je vois >w< cool!!
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hooooo ok bref
Ton dessin est super ^^ j'espèere qu'on pourra se reparler un jour :')
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