Comments: 24
Jmontufar4 [2017-04-02 19:21:41 +0000 UTC]
Did you stop continuing the story? Will there be part 2, 3, 4, and etc ? I'm really hoping to read what happened next.
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Aisha132 [2017-02-13 22:41:37 +0000 UTC]
Omg awesome story can't wait for the next up date
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Hetalialover91 [2016-11-22 05:12:25 +0000 UTC]
“What wrong? Scare of me? Oh common (y/n) I don't bite. Yet.”
Did you even proofread? If english isn't your first language then I sorta understand but even if that's so proofreading is still necessary. And that's just one sentence, along with unsteady dialogue this needs to be revised
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Jmontufar4 [2016-10-16 22:43:52 +0000 UTC]
Where's part two?
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Jmontufar4 [2015-07-17 03:53:27 +0000 UTC]
SxKxR great story. could you please continue on this story line. i would like to know what happens next on part two. i wonder what would happened to the reader. will she/he escape from his insanity or have to find away or out-run Alfred from his grasp of torture. If I misspell, I'm sorry about that.
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Belarus-natasha [2015-06-15 03:34:39 +0000 UTC]
Really awesome! I love sadistic! America
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Nevermoremist [2015-04-20 17:43:37 +0000 UTC]
Aww poor Al her shouldn't have told Reader he orchestrated it all but still poor Al and poor Reader
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FrozenKeys671 [2015-01-11 14:06:57 +0000 UTC]
Alfred, you kadukas boy. You already screwed up with this.
love the story so far, can't wait for part two
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OTAKUIN23 [2014-06-10 10:02:20 +0000 UTC]
Hi my name is Beatrice Dayne Penelope Guerrero Bulandos..... Curse my long name.... Nice story by the way.
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mobgurl145 [2014-04-09 22:48:50 +0000 UTC]
me: *waiting and waiting annnnnnnnd waaaaaaaaaating* WHERE IS PART TWO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!????????????????????????????
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clairethebear25 [2013-10-04 03:23:57 +0000 UTC]
Love the stkry but....what grammer?
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NinjaJaffaCake [2013-09-14 21:12:09 +0000 UTC]
I don't want to sound rude...But the grammar could be improved a lot. It's a very interesting story and I'd really gotten into it as I read on. I'm sure you were probably up late or something and I am a grammar Nazi...But I won't be mean to you. Even if your spelling could be improved. Honestly, I'm not being mean. Just being blunt and honest. xD I lack social skills! o.o But you could probably tell. x3
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Miri464 [2013-09-12 09:34:34 +0000 UTC]
Chapter 2!
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Alice-Fujioka [2013-07-07 08:14:18 +0000 UTC]
Chapter 2 soon please
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Blossemfall [2013-06-12 02:08:35 +0000 UTC]
(Btw good start. This will be intresting)
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Amai-Gee [2013-06-11 07:32:36 +0000 UTC]
omg can't wait 4 chapter 2 TuT~
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Blossemfall In reply to Amai-Gee [2013-06-12 02:08:05 +0000 UTC]
...................... I just better not say my thoughts..............
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Blossemfall In reply to Amai-Gee [2013-06-13 00:26:38 +0000 UTC]
It just might be better for us both.....
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