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Published: 2004-05-07 12:30:21 +0000 UTC; Views: 212; Favourites: 1; Downloads: 101
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You've rescued me from the darkness I've been living in,Cheer me up with bright smiles on your face,
I've never felt so much comfort with someone
Whom I didn't recognise.
You pulled me out of the darkness I've locked myself in,
Give me warmth and strength to live on,
I've never felt so loved before by a stranger..
Chorus
A perfect stranger,
so little people who are as nice as you,
I owe my life to you,
You'll always be in my mind.
You've come to wipe out the darkness that sunk into my mind,
Such a gentle, caring face that you have,
No stranger has ever cared me as much as you..
Chorus2x
You've taught me to live on,
My road of life is still a long way down,
You've repaired my broken soul,
You've restored my perfect being.
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Comments: 22
I like this one too. I'd make minor changes though, like 'Gave' instead of 'Give' (because the previous line was in past-tense) and I'd change the second line in the first chorus because not all people are small (just kidding) but it's a bit confusing.. and last but not least: the line 'No stranger have ever cared me so much like you' I'd suggest you revise it to 'no stranger HAS ever cared FOR me AS much AS you'. (just a suggestion, I don't want to put words in your mouth).
VERY NICE piece though, I'd love to hear it sung!
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The only thing that caught my eye as far as critique goes is that the line 'so little people who are as nice as you,' is very confusing. I'd suggest changing it to 'not very many people are...' or 'so little people, as nice as...' I think something to that effect would help the chorus flow better. I'm not very good at critiquing songs. I'm sorry I couldn't be of more help.
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it's ok 
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I'm glad I could help in some small way 
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awesome job...very inspirational. its a nice departure from all the dark-themed poems ive seen here lately. do you have music written to this? anyway good job and keep up the great work
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Very sweet and touching song, I'm glad you put this to paper.
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very good.. i was reading it and almost singing it 
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the sentiment is well conveyed, and though it can get a little typical, the song is well written. Good job.
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thank you for the comment
yes.. there's no rhythm in the song
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Aww, I like it. It's a nice thought, nice thing to hear from someone. Everyone wants to hear about how they've helped their friends be better people, and it's nice when someone can find the words to say so. It's a good song, but to me it doesn't seem to have much in the way of rhythm. Like, I'm reading it, and I don't hear it as a song. That could just be my head of course 
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Ooo a fellow singaporean
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glad that you like the song
record the music.. maybe
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aww this is such a nice song,well written,good job
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0oooo. EMI could give you a recording contract ye know.
I loike!
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hahahha... music contract for me? ^^
hmmm.. I'm happy that you like the song..
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