apocryphos [2003-02-22 22:48:58 +0000 UTC]
that first line comparing someone to a pumpkin really drew me in. i've never seen an approach like that before. lovely imagery. "the apples and oranges fell...smirking like the cheshire Cat." - that whole stanza left me flabbergasted. amazing piece.
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zodiacwizard [2003-01-27 23:32:02 +0000 UTC]
Yes, yes, amazing... I wish I could get something like this in my poems.
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catrin [2003-01-27 02:50:46 +0000 UTC]
Absolutely beautiful. ...Vivid visuals, concrete and elusive at the same time... great job.
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