Comments: 22
Devastar [2012-12-02 01:24:28 +0000 UTC]
It's the Archvile! I'm going to need a bigger gun!
And a bigger gun I'm going to need. It was only fair that I commented back, you know, and I seem to be pretty damn distracted lately. Took some work, had to reread it a few times to find the words.
The Sojourner was great. I found the initial setting familiar, yet at the same time different enough to be interesting in itself. The slice of life came off as somewhat idyllic, soothing even- right after the bait-and-switch with the little sister. Loved the part where you pointed out that was only a taste of what was coming to get him.
Anton's an interesting person too, though I'd like to get to see more of him playing a role in this story. So far, all we know is that he has this bizarre intuition, that he's a natural rolling stone by half (and squared...), and that he's a hearty, healthy lad somewhat frustrated with his own restlessness. I do wonder, though- if over time, these trances got him from seeing different countries to winding up in Felarya... does this mean they'll eventually toss him somewhere even weirder? That's the kind of thing that keeps the imagination going, but I suppose that's going to exceed the scope of this story.
Consider my curiosity for Farra whetted- I'm guessing I won't be able to predict her intentions too well myself. The irony of it all was pretty fun- there was a naga that was probably going to give him good odds, and he wound up scaring her off- to afterwards try and track her, even after figuring out this place was likely to be pretty damn dangerous! That kensha pup was a first, Archvile, at least in the capacity of potential predator, and the effect was quite unexpected, too. I'm hoping for more surprises!
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TheArchvile In reply to Oliveleaf [2012-12-12 16:14:09 +0000 UTC]
Why thank you!-- And sorry for the late reply, I don't get on much these days, but I intend for that to change. (Oh joy, 744 messages - better get to work >.< )
I'm really glad you liked it, and yeah, I just had this really vivid picture of what the jungle looked like in my head, and I wanted to write it all down, like, all of it...
I had to limit myself in the end of course, but even then I was afraid it dragged on somewhat. So I'm happy you liked that part!
Yep, Anton was pretty desperate for some familiarity by that point, good thing for him he didn't wind up on an airless rock or some barren ice planet. All things considered though, Felarya isn't that much better a place to transport to...
I really have been itching to get back to writing the continuation, not a week goes by where I don't think about it, but right now the spare time simply refuses to manifest itself. *sigh*
So thank you very much for the comment! And it looks like have not one but two of your undoubtedly excellent stories to read!
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PrinnyDood-Abides [2012-01-13 10:47:55 +0000 UTC]
Well, this is embarrassing . . . I remembered reading two stories in this series, and that the most recent one was part 2, but totally forgot one of the ones I read was the prologue.
Anyway, now that I've read it, I must say once again that your writing it top-notch. Your descriptions of the jungle at large, and the very tense Kensha scene in particular, were near perfect, and your characterization of Anton and Farra remains quite exemplary. Moxy is adorable, too!
Looking forward to the next part, which I went and made absolutely sure wasn't already up.
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TheArchvile In reply to PrinnyDood-Abides [2012-01-13 14:18:54 +0000 UTC]
Thank you! ^^
Yeah I've been having a lot of trouble (both in writing and obtaining free time to write) with the next part, but it's coming soon! (I hope)
I think I'll write longer, more stand-alone chapters like you do after this, I think it makes it easier to avoid writing myself into a corner like I did with this series!
Thanks again for the comment!
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TheArchvile In reply to PrinnyDood-Abides [2012-01-15 13:45:07 +0000 UTC]
What imean is, I can't go back and modify the last part if I find the overall pace is wrong, or if I want to reveal something or have a character do or say something earlier or later... Since the beginning is already written it forces me to write the next chapter a certain way, and it makes it that much harder... I guess you can call it a lack of planning on my part >.<
Now if I wrote it little bit more like say, you, Globfish or Frenchsnack, with each 'chapter' having a defined 'end' I don't have to worry about that, and I can still have a long/complex arc.
Though I guess in my case it's a very good thing I started like this, because I learned alot in the past six months about Felarya and its canon, things I probably would have screwed up without the input from other members of the community. So it's all good in the end... Hopefully I can free up some time soon, because I keep having good ideas for where I want to take this story, and I can't write them, because I'm stuck at this part...
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TheArchvile In reply to AngelOfLight999 [2011-10-13 15:22:19 +0000 UTC]
Thanks! ^^
It should be coming soonish, all my free time got pwnt this summer >.<
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Sehoolighan [2011-06-21 05:52:37 +0000 UTC]
Now this is how a newcomer should react, spot on writing my friend. Though it may take awhile, keep on keeping on.
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