Ratros [2012-03-16 02:31:32 +0000 UTC]
Some simple literary mistakes, that can be fixed during editing. The story is interesting, and the writing well done. I have to reread your other stories to see if I have a real complaint, otherwise it's quite good. Do you have a timeline for the events? If not I would make one up at this point.
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TheSpokesman In reply to Ratros [2012-04-16 19:50:51 +0000 UTC]
There is totes a timeline man, although usually the dates aren't real important.
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