scooby82101 [2011-11-27 18:59:29 +0000 UTC]
Like I said before, you have improved a lot since the first verion. Just keep practicing, experimenting, etc. You'll get better. ^^
Everyone is in better characterization as well as a better flow. You also explained why Jack said those three words the night before, it makes sense. Emotions can get the best of us.
Well done, and thank you for the credit. ^^
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