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maybe it is Rusty.you decide!
Before critiquing! artists want you to point out their mistakes during critique! I am no exception. ^_^
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thank you so much <3 owo really appreciate it
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of course, I hoped this helped in some way ;w;
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Wow. This is very well done e.deviantart.net/emoticons/b/b… " width="15" height="15" alt="
Pros. The lighting in this is exceptional. The anatomy is amazing! And the correl painting technique really makes the picture. The detail in the fur only makes this picture better.
Cons. The back ground looks a little rushed. I was a little disappointed to see it didn't have so much detail. It may be for focusing the attention on the cat but I'm not sure. The back leg is my only problem with the anatomy here. It looks as though you tried to drew him in mid-leap but it just didn't turn out right. some of the fur on his back looks like it has little ripples in it. the bothers me slightly, but that's just my opinion.
All in all, this is a great piece e.deviantart.net/emoticons/b/b… " width="15" height="15" alt="
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This is my first critique, so please bear with me! I love this picture so I decided that I needed to do a critique on it. (let's call the cat Rusty because I find it easier that way I don't know why but I'm just going to do that XD)
First the things I like.
I love how you drew Rusty's fur, It looks realistic and just over all very welly executed. The ear fur is another thing I have to point out, too. It looks very nice. His eyes are wonderful, too, they show a little bit of emotion too, like awe. The collar is just lovely, the texture is wonderful. But my favorite part of this picture has to be the lighting. I love the lighting so much. The way it hits Rusty and reflects off the bell, just every thing about it.
Now for what you should improve on.
First off, I didn't find that the white on Rusty's belly mixed very well with the orange. It seemed to stand out too much. I think you either should've blended it more or used a very light orange. Next is Rusty's back leg. In all honesty, it looks deformed. It appears as though he's sitting on a little mound, so his knee or whatever it is should be a little higher than it is. Another thing I should point out is the front leg, something just doesn't seem right about it. I starting to think that Rusty's muscles look a little too round there. I would flatten it out a little if I were you. Another thing is the fence and the background. I think the fence needed more detail, and so did the background. It needed to look more realistic to me.
All in all, I found that this picture was very beautiful and gave off a warm and sort of welcoming vibe. Like the woods was welcoming Rusty to them. I very nice picture that definitely deserves a spot in my favs! e.deviantart.net/emoticons/w/w… " width="15" height="15" alt="
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thank you
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Your very welcome!! ^^
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It looks very good! I love the bright colors and the technique used to create this. The cat has a great expression and the sun makes the picture glow warmly. I would not change anything about this picture. It is fantastic and cute! The shadows are also very nice. The back leg looks like it is tilted towards the "camera" or point of view, when I think it should be tilted fowards. The trees in the background look like they are a little blurred, I would make them more eye-popping. The eye on the cat is very good! I love this very much!
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Since you did write a few things that were wrong about the picture, I reluctantly hit "fair". What you should do is NOT give me five stars for everything [you should never, ever do that on a critique. ever.] and second of all you should never tell me there's nothing to change on a piece.
But i'm thankful for the advice you did give me... although you should think about writing critiques a bit more in-depth.
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ok i am sorry about the stars. It was my first critique. Next time, i will do a better job.
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This a very nice work.
I love the shine and how itsgld and how real it feels.
But the back leg lookslike it would have two paws and the color seems to be flat a bit and is not shinin as much.The background is also nice but its not getting all that sun.Its still a very nice work and I just love how it feels warm and golden.Also the fur doesnt seem to get all the light as the rest of the pic and it feels like theres no pattern to his fur because you can barely see it.
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very beautiful piece of art work. it looks so real.
on the back leg is a bit up, as tho its on a hill, which i dont think it is....
the shoulder llos a little distorted. its too far down and somewhat lop sided.
overall, the fur is very nicely executed.
the collr is very emphasised. you can tell because the fur out side of the collar emphasies how tight or lose the collar may be.
the scenery/back ground is simply amazing. the pine trees are very beautiful, and they show the gleam from the sun rays on them. tho i cant tell if there is a slight slope near the bottom right in this piece of art. the forground of the grass looks like a slope, but at the same time it doesnt. you might have wanted to make the fencing a little bit smaller, just to show that in reality, the fence is probably bigger than the cat, but also you might have it the way you do, size and height and all, due to the fact of how far or the distance between the cat and the fencing.
overall, this piece of art it beautifully executed, and very realistic. you did a very good job.
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I Love This, But The Front Shoulder Looks A Little Distorted, To Renounced. I also Noticed The Fur Technique You Used Doesn't Flow Right; It Looks A Tad Bit Forced. The ell Is A Tad Bit To Large, But That's Probably Me Just Being OCD. Also, I Noticed You Said you Aren't Good With Cat Faces, I Disagree. This Is The Best Over All Drawn Cat I Have Seen On Any Art Sight. I Also Love This Representation Of Rusty Of Firestar. The White Under-Belly Tones Down The Severity Of The Crazy Fire Colors! I Really Hope To See More Work From You.
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Ok, so, not holding back any punches here.
First of all, where you laid the contrast, my eyes keep getting drawn to his stomach. It leaves me asking the question - where is the heart of this piece? Do you want me looking at his eyes? His collar? You have a lot of brightness just everywhere - the fence, his eyes, his fur, the grass, and it's hard to look at his face where it's just about as bright as the background.
Next, his posture really throws me off. I can see his back legs and his paws, but his front legs vanish off the page. Is he folding his legs? If so, it's not really showing in the rest of his posture. I can only assume he's sitting on an incline, but if you look in the background, the fence is relatively straight. I'm not sure if you were going for some dramatic angles, but do bear in mind that if you can utilize and execute dramatic angles, it can really help your piece. Learning how to angle the foreground against the background is awesome, but here, the foreground really blends straight into the background, so it creates a confusing perspective.
Speaking of dramatic angles, if you were to redo this piece, that there is a much more dramatic transition in a cat's back when you go from the shoulders to the back. In this piece, however, it's a very gradual, even keel slope and there's not much of an angle to it.
The shoulder is really bothering me here in terms of anatomy. It may be the grass obscuring it, but where the shoulder connects to the elbow connects to the foreleg of the cat is very... stumpy. I'm not sure to describe it. Don't forget that cats and dogs have limbs very much like ours, /\/ shape if you will as opposed to /\. But I'm sure you're aware and it was just a difficult posture to execute.
Then, if you listen to anything I do say here, I'd say to work on your shading. I've noticed in all of your realism pieces that you use a very hard brush when you're using the fur. It's a very scratchy, hard appearance. Good for stylization if that's what you're looking for, but it also keeps you from realism.
Especially along the back, you're creating a very uniform appearance. Looking at it right now I see that you've created rows of hatching along the back and in other areas rather than overlapping the fur more. It isn't just this piece - looking at all your other realism pieces, that has been my chief complaint.
One quick way to remedy this is to work on a larger canvas. I have no idea what size you were working at, but if you use a larger canvas, and scale down later, using hard brushes isn't so much of a problem.
Though, around the neck and chest area, you really did do a nice job creating a much more natural, realistic look compared to the rest of the body.
A few people have remarked that the background isn't that detailed, but really, it doesn't have to be. You want the focus to be on the cat, not on the background. Perhaps what you could do is maybe give it a bit more detail, especially in the foreground, but I might blur it. Tamberella does this nicely, and really, in simple pieces like that, you don't need a really detailed background, it detracts from what should be the main focus of the piece. I go back to one of my other points where it is really hard to focus on anything in particular because there's so much bright vivid colors and details all over the place.
Another thing to consider is that cats have many different colors of guard hairs. What I see here is uniform orange where there is orange. There's no ticks of white or black or anything.
Oh, and another thing, I have to question the composition. It's rather unbalanced in the sense that you have a lot of different areas of color, and yet half the canvas is taken up by a very solid swatch of orange. I might even crop off part of the piece and focus more on the head, or otherwise rearrange the picture so that the head isn't so far off to the left.
This piece caught my eye mostly because I'm currently working on a piece that is very similar, by the way.
In terms of originality and content... looking back at your description, it's either Rusty from Warriors or just an orange cat. Seeing as the facial structure doesn't really support the notion of it being a kitten, I'll go with random orange cat. You're not exactly creating a compelling narrative or delivering a unique concept, so I can't give you many points there.
If I have to applaud anything, I have to say that your unflinching approach to hard, bright, vivid colors is really something to be admired. Looking back at your simpler cell-shaded pieces and then over to your realism pieces, the style really carries, and it's even something I envy. I have a tendency to go with subtle, bland colors, but you're not scared of going full force with contrast and light, and that I can appreciate.
Hopefully I helped. Bear in mind that I'm no expert either, though I have taken a few college classes on drawing and painting and plan to attend an arts college, so, I do at least have some knowledge of what I'm talking about. However, as with every critique, consider what to take and what to leave. Consider what is a matter of style and execution and may not need to be changed depending on what you're going for. Maybe hard brush strokes is what you want, maybe you want to create a piece that keeps you looking around. Just know what you're going for and have that vision in mind while you work.
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This is extremely helpful. <3
I'll keep this in mind for a really, really long time.
Thank you so much 8D
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You're welcome. Glad I could help.
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Ahem.
This cat/Rusty/whatever is very nicely done.
The composition is quite lovely (I really like seeing characters not fully portrayed within the canvas) and I adore your background. And the picket fence is literally perfect howdidyoudothat
The anatomy and stance of the cat/Rusty/whatever is nicely done, but something seems a bit off with the forearms. I guess they would just look better if the forearms were a bit more extended.
I really like how saturated your shading is and especially the fur around the neck where the collar is. It adds that realistic touch to the piece.
I have to say something about the light values, though. Since the fence is light, the cat/Rusty/whatever's muzzle is light, and the gold bell is light, this creates a bit of a problem. Since these are relatively the same value (close to white) they should be a bit more separated with different values in between, because right now they all look like they are blended together.
Overall, awesome work. I really like this one.
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Before I say anything, I am a HUGE fan of yours, and this is my first critique.
Okay,
when I saw this in my inbox, I was like, "Oh, Urnam's done photography." HELL NO, this is amazing! But there are some things you could have done differently:
The side of the face. Unless it's shading, it looks like the left side of his muzzle is sticking out when it isn't supposed to, If you focus on that one white spot, it looks like it twists the noes, then you look up the bridge of the nose, and it throws off the eye. So if it's shading, then be careful with your highlight next time, but if it's Rusty's face, then yes, you do need to go back and re-visit your anatomy (Get what I'm saying?)
And the only other thing I have is what everyone else has pointed out: the grass in the front. It could have been highlighted a little more.
That's pretty much it... overall, it looks amazing!
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Okay so I'm too lazy to write something long so this will be a crappy critique hurr hurr.
Okay.
The fence, the eyes, and the collar all look nice and realistic. However, the fur, grass, and trees look really rushed and scribbly. The foreground grass, instead of looking like individual strands, look like clumps of oddly shaded stuff. The bell doesn't look very gold... It looks a bit too pale imo. The belly fur looks a bit weird compared to the rest of the picture. The dapples... I don't know, they just don't look very realistic. The hind leg looks quite squished at the bottom, and the front leg has a very large shoulder. As for the shading on the flank (I believe that's what the body part is called?), if there are going to be folds in the skin then the fur is going to stick out over them.
Okay I'm lazy this is a nice piece bye.
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Hey Dawnstarwarp, Just a thought I had with your critique. I believe the scribbley look in the grass and the fur is the style the artist was going for. You may not like it which is totally cool cause not every one is going to like everything. On the other hand you could be 100% correct if the artist was trying for a realistic feel and extreme detail, in that case it is too scribbley.
Also, Xumam. The lighting on the bell and the fur on the neck I would have to agree with your first critiquer on that, It blends in to much with the light on the fence. However it seems to be the right level of lighting (if you understand what I meant by "level") perhaps add a hint of yellow to the fur or orange maybe to give it some contrast between the fence and the fur/bell. Otherwise, everything else looks great and it makes me want to do up a picture of my kitty now =^.^=
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Thank you for your input.
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first critique so sorry if its terrible OTL
try to work more on your trees aand further away grass they look abit messy and I think the bell should have more values to it to make it look shiny
the fur on the... cats armpit? I guess looks abit weird and goes in random angles
also the closer grass is much more blue than the further back grass
I do like how vibrant the orange on the cat is and how you did the rest of its fur its lovely`
the close up grass is awesome
and the face looks great as well ^^
overall its a great job
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This is a wonderful picture, Urnam.
Okay so
PROS:
*wonderfull display of lighting overall
*whiskers, fur, and body parts are anatomically correct and look natural
*slight tilt of the picture generates a creative esscence
*shading corresspondes with textures
*overall realistic sense (except maybe the leaves)
*eyes are equisitely vibrant and appear very realstic
CONS:
*colors of grass vary from sides of the picture (could've made a bit more same-colorey, even with shadow of the cat)
*circle highlights on the fence don't really seem to go togther as much as they would with leaf like lighilghts and cast shadows
*leaves, again, could have been in greater detail to add further realistic sense
*I personally think that blue is not a very correct color to use for the stomach shading, possibly a bit more orange or even gray/green?
*shading of the cat changes from head to body and so they do not seem to fit together
*it would possibly look better if the tail tip was shown (just a thought)
*could've possibly shown some fur showing through the grass
*hind paw doesn not appear to be on the ground, or level with it
overall this is a wonderfull representation, especially considering this was to be just a sketch
thank you for gracing the art community with your wonderfull drawings :3
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thanks ^-^
dfjsdkjfds, wow im getting a lot of critiques to read on this XD aha
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Well this is my second critique in my entire time on DA so if I sound bad I apologize. XD
What I like: I really like the pose first of all, It's original and gives enough room to put shading and lighting into it. The collar is pretty gorgeous as well. I like the way you did the fence. It shows the parts that the trees cover. The fur looks pretty realistic and the eye is beautiful
What bothers me: The front right leg bothers me a lot. If the cat is crouching the shoulder would be showing a bit more near the neck and the leg would be a little more back. If he is lying down the legs would have to be lifted just a bit and the shoulder would be relaxed. (if it isn't already) The grass's color bothers me a bit as well. The grass near him(or her) Has a turquoise tint to it while the grass farther from the cat is more of an olive green kind of color. Of corse this might be a result of the lighting, but I'm not sure.
The background: I love the use of perspective! The trees look nice but a bit unnatural. Try adding a bit of a darker brown. Also, subtract from what you want less focus on. If you want less focus on the background make it simple. You did well with that part.
I like this drawing a lot : D And I hope I helped <3
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The oranges you used are very powerful, drawing a lot of attention the the cat. The eye is well shaded but not glowing, and the texture added to the collar was a nice touch. I am just now noticing the white picket fence which was a phenomenal detail that you added. Clean, well shaded, blends in fairly well.
I recommend you take it easy with the placement of your highlights. It looks like your light source is coming in from the left side of the image, but the right side of the cat is equally as bright as the left. Perhaps tone it down a bit. The foreground grass looks good, but the background grass could use some attention. Since it's farther off, the highlights shouldn't be as solid as the highlights on the cat; I suggest blending them, but don't blur them too much.
The trees are also rather distracting. In regards to the lightsource, every leaf seems to be reflecting light. Try to keep the bright highlights only to the leaves with surfaces facing directly to the light source. Also, the amount of detail in the trees is drawing attention away from the focal point, the cat; it makes the picture rather busy. Perhaps make them a more solid color and only add a few highlights instead.
Otherwise it's an impressive piece with powerful coloring and shading. The fur technique on the face is very uniform, but the body looks a bit rushed, especially at the meeting between the limbs and the body. It's ok to leave some areas solid, some areas textured; it will give the eye a break from all the business.
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thank you
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This is beautiful! The lighting you've used is very well spread out and is shown exactly where the sun would hit the fur. For proportion, i think the front shoulder should have been a bit smaller. Also looking at my own cat, the back paw (what you can see of it) seams to be a little too big. On my own cat, the paws are petite and she is a also tabby. If you have a cat of your own compare the size of the paws to the ears. All cats have different "body types" though. I am very impressed with the size of the head too! Most artists make it too large.
The background trees look pretty simple so i would create some extra branches coming out from the sides or blend the leaves a bit. The focal point is obviously the cat and you did a good job having the colors pop to make that happen.
Over all i LOVE this piece and i would never be able to create such a well-done picture myself!
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thanks ^-^
i dont have a cat D: i've had them before but never when i got serious with art.
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Np. I guess you can just look up pictures online of cats then x3
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Over all I think you did a really nice job on this piece e.deviantart.net/emoticons/s/s… " width="15" height="15" alt="
Something I would say is next time try to blend a little more. The fur on the cat looks more like random lines/brush strokes. On the shoulder you did a very good job of making it look like fur but more towards the back it is spiky and jagged.
Another thing I would change is the grass, try to blend the shadowing a little more. mostly the lighter parts. Just like with the fur it should be smooth instead of crisp cut.
I hope I'm not being rude :3
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Well, this is my first critique so please bare with me XD.
First off the grass near the fence is very green, but the grass under Rusty/random cat had a blueish tint to it, even though the light is reflecting a yellow color. The colors should have matched more. Back to the grass near the fence, its very lazy. i couldn't think of any other word to use. the way you made the lighter parts, makes it look like there covered in big blobs of light. They should be smoothed out more, to fit the blades of grass.
on to the good stuff!
Oh my. The cats anatomy is fantastic! the fur is very real and well colored and formed. It reacts to the color just the way it should! They eye is the perfect shape and has a lovely color. The collar looks so real and detailed. The golden coloring on the tree's leaves is very nicely done, and the rest of the lighting is also very well done. The over all piece is very original! i've seen many drawings of Rusty, but he's also just sitting on the fence. This one shows him looking out there. like he's about to leave for the first time.
Over all, this was very, VERY well done!!
(and to be honest, when i first saw it in my messages, it looked like a real picture!!)
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I love the colors, and the lighting is done very well. The trees are a little boring, but it's the background. The colors for the tabby is nice, though tabbies have more pronounced makings and a little lighter base fur.
Now for he collar. I love the color, and the bell is incredible.there is a nice and believable texture to it.
The grass is also good, but maybe you should have blended it together because it looks like a bunch of multi-shade sticks.And maybe if you added some more curl and turn to them.
Over all this is a great piece and I love it!
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np
btw big fan of Dimstar's past :3
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Ok, so first off, this is a VERY good piece, like a photo.
But I was just looking at my cat, and the ears on her were smaller then in this deviation, and more spread apart, so maybe just tweak it a bit (sorry if the cat you were referencing had bigger ears). The fur color can be toned down a bit as well, maybe. Also, same with the other critique, trees have more shades of color, and are more unique in real life. Hopefully this helped... I am pretty bad at a useful critique...
Anyway, awesome drawing, Xurnam :3
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Oh meh gosheez Urnam! it's truly one of the most amazing cat digital piece I have laid my eyes upon. The anatomy, for a starter, is pretty much spot on. The shape of the head is perfect, everything in the right place. The ears are so realistic, and the way you blended in the markings is very well done. The way the fur overlaps the collar is another reason why the picture is amazing. And the eyes are perfect, the way the green turns dark to the colour of the light. And I love how he is diagonal on a small mound, like he's looking up. Amazing Urnamz, well done! :3
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Dang gurl.
Now first when it was in my inbox I thought you took an actual picture and converted some colors. But when I actually clicked on it, I could easily see the strokes within the cat, grass, fence, and trees. Now that's what I call a realistic drawing.
The shading is absolutely beautiful, and the face, the whiskers -- EVERYTHING is FLAWLESS! The bell looks shiny and I can actually see a texture on the collar! It's not one of those "no texture" collars. Plus, that eye... Oh my gosh.. Wow. My -- Goodness...
The only thing you should work on is the blending in the grass. It still looks beautiful, but you should just mix it a little bit more than usual. And possibly a bit more on the arm anatomy. It seems a little squished. But it still is amazing. e.deviantart.net/emoticons/h/h… " width="15" height="13" alt="
Great work Urnam! e.deviantart.net/emoticons/b/b… " width="15" height="15" alt="
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Wow, I don't know where to start! The background looks amazing, I especially like the grass. Rusty (lets just call the cat that) looks good in overall anatomy. I'm not sure if you wanted the stripes of the orange tabby to appear very well because it's somewhat hard to recognize. His head and chest area looks really nice texture wise, but then as you go down the body it starts to look like the texture of something else that I can't remember of the name...
I really like your use of lighting in the image, it shows that it's probably between morning to noon.
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You should probably work on the trees. they look the same, boring. In reality they have this incredibly beautiful forms, shapes, sizes. And the colour you chose to them are to bright. They'r trunk are: red, a little bit of orange, grey. [link]
Pine trees are darker, even if its sunny (If those are pine trees .D)
And if you used the "rectangular marquee tool" for the fences then you should finish the bussiness with them. Used the brush! I know it will be hard, but its better for the future.
On the other hand, I like the cats anatomy. Its realistic. And you made it furry, yay! Grass colour in the front is beautiful, stick with that.
I hope I gave you some advice, even if my english is horrible a.deviantart.net/avatars/y/a/y… " alt=" " title="yaominggifplz" />
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thank you xD i also saw that you put this into a comment too, i saw that first actually.
i thanked you there as well owo teehee
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This is a true piece of work I've ever gazed my eyes upon. This is the true work of a legend of a master realism artist. In my power and mind, I never will see this as an ordinary sketch, or even just a digital art masterpiece. These talents you were given are in-bedded in your hands, are the talents of a god that is hidden inside of you. Your not a good, ordinary artist, your history upon the works of life. There is no words to explain you, but that was all in my best power I could say.
~UpForACynderMuffinX3 <3
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