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The lineart ofFeel free to color, just credit me:3
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This is the first time I used the critique feature, so sorry if there is any typos and grammar mistakes e.deviantart.net/emoticons/f/f… " width="18" height="18" alt="
First of all, I love all the details in this drawing e.deviantart.net/emoticons/e/e… " width="18" height="15" alt="
Secondly, is the hair. I think I had mentioned this before. You can reference some Arina Tanemura artworks (or other mangaka) and see how she draw the hair details. The character hair is long and beautiful. But it does not flow smoothly with the character. Take this: [link] and [link] for example and compared to this piece. In this drawing, to me the hair looks like it has been pull to one place and the other one to other (sorry, for my English :'D)
Finally, this is a great piece. But it need more improvement. I hope this critique helps. I spent like 15 minutes to write this first critique ever. Never thought it would be that hard.
(Okay, now you can punch me e.deviantart.net/emoticons/s/s… " width="30" height="30" alt="
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For your first critique it is greato_O and I get what you mean, first time I wrote one took me some time, too
Thank you so much for this critique! It is exactly what I was expecting for
Indeed, you are right about the hairo_O I will take more references when it comes to that, thanks for the links and tipsC: and when it comes to face, well, I do practice a lot but I'll tell you sometimes it looks good sometimes not. But oh well, I will try to work even more on this.
I won't punch you, this is what I needed
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You are welcome 
Ah, yes the link. Glad I found a few 
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it's ok. but you did great
I agree, balancing eyes is so hardx___x but hey, we will improve that, that's why we're here!
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Yeap, yeap 
Moar practice!
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interestin'~~~ :3 but first i agree to silver-moonnight~
1) the hair does need to thin out more and more flowy (sorry, >_<**)
2) the anatomy's not bad but...could still use some work/practice~
3) the face needs a little work, but its all good~ :3
overall, i'm impressed!~ :3 i like it~ :3 <3
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thank you for the critique and tips!<3 and hey, why are you sayin' sorry?
are you?aww, thanks!<3
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haha i just said what i thought might needed a little improvement~ :3 keep practicing/workin' and you'll get it right~ ;3
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XD XD i'll be lookin' forward to it then~
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Your linearts actually look a little bit like my sketches xD I wouldn't want to imagine what your sketches look like D:>
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really?well, that's cool
I can show you, I have a link somewhere...
*searches*
oh!
[link]
the sketch of this one was even worse, though
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Wow, the details are great! It'll look amazing coloured.
Umm, I guess one thing I would say is that the part around her left knee looks a bit odd ... like maybe the thigh should be a bit wider, because it looks the same kind of width as the lower leg. I may be wrong here though, as I'm no expert at anatomy.
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thanks, I think so too
I get what you mean.
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I try. details are awesome
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Good luck with the contest dear
And congrats on getting new colourpencils!!
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thank you so much, Piece-chab!
yay!I am so happy, I couldn't wait for'em anymore
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holy crap, all the details in the fish and stuff are astounding!
hehehehe, didn't want us to see your messy sketch, eh?
and yay for your mom! can't wait to see trad art from you!
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you think so?thank you, Iris!<33
no I didn't
yay yay, I loves mah mom<33 you will, don't worry! I can't wait to get my traditional tools again
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Whoah, you did it again Gwen! 
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thnk youC:
you will
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Awesome Gwen, i'll be looking around for it!
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lmao, I will color it
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I could use some critique on my linearts too
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You wanna me to do it? Just not now, I'm a bit busy but I can critique your linearts if you want... well, I'll do my best at least.
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Well you don't have to, but it would be appreciated, I can upload it to my scraps once finished.
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good, I will then. Just make sure to tell me when you're doneC:
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How long are you going to be online for?
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I am not sure. maybe one hour or two, but I am with a friend so don't expect me to comment anywhere for today...
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