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Published: 2008-06-01 02:37:25 +0000 UTC; Views: 150; Favourites: 0; Downloads: 7
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Description "No! Brother stop!" A young female probably around the age of 20, spread those words over the blazing fire, to where her brother stood. "Shut up! In order to obtain Expletus, some must be sacrificed. This my world!" They both went silent for a moment. "I've told you...I will reach Expletus, and everyone, no everything will be mine." He took out his gun, and shot a women he had hit to the ground. She was dead. "Brother! No! You have to stop, this isn't what you were meant to do!" "It's too late for that, I will be Expletus." He looked to the ground. Then shot another harmless victim. The murderer looked up at the burning village, and all of the dead bodies of it. He walked away. The girl was left there, alone. She wondered why he hadn't killed her again. This was the second time he left her alive. She cried.

3 Years Earlier...
Unfolded; Chapter I
The Unnamed Twins

"Maik?"
"What is it?"
"What are we supposed to do?"
"I've told you, I don't know. Our best bet is to find someone who knew our parents, assuming we ever had any."
"How do we do that?"
"To be honest, I don't have a clue."

Maik and his sister Bliss, do not know their parents, they have no memory of their past. They don't even know their own ages, but they call themselves seventeen since they look it. They both have emerald-green eyes, and light brown hair. Maik keeps his short while Bliss's is longer. Currently, they're living with an elderly women named Magmorel Pegason. She's quite famous around her area, the village of Caelum. Not only is she a master of potions and other magic, she's very skilled with weapons and even sells them in her shop, Pegason's Potions. Magmorel was once a temperantia teacher in her past. She prefers the staff type of weapon as opposed to a sword or gun.

Magmorel found Maik and Bliss sleeping on the nearby beach, and when they awoke they had no memory of anything. Magmorel named them at that time. Now, about a year from then, they're still living with her. Within this year Magmorel has been teaching them about temperantia, and how to use it. As well as how to fight with certain weapons including guns and swords.

"Hey! Mag!" Maik called from the lobby of the shop. "Yes? What is it?" She answered. Maik began, "I'm going out with some friends, Bliss might come too." "Alright, be back before sunset, the guards are becoming more strict." "Okay!" He ran off. Magmorel sighed. "Sometimes I wonder if he even hears what I have to say..." A customer walked through the door and Magmorel did the usual stuff and went back to her usual busy self.

Sure enough, some hours later, it was already sunset all of their friends went home, as well as Bliss. Maik though he'd check out the new shop that was trying to compete with Magmorel. After checking out the supplies, which were more expensive, yet not authentic, and most of the people in Caelum could use temperantia, so they knew to still shop at Magmorel's. "Oops!" Maik said as he looked at the dark sky. He began to run home until one of the guards stopped him. "Hey! What are you doing outside? All citizens are to remain inside after sunset!" Maik just starred at him, as sweat poured down his face. "I'm sorry, I lost track of time and-" "Don't give me that. This law has been addressed many times, I'm going to arrest you." "Wha-?" Maik started running away. "Get back here kid!" The guard started chasing after him. Then, in a bright light of fire, the guard was incinerated instantly. Maik turned around and whispered to himself, "...What's that? Temperantia?" Suddenly a man in a white cloak with a block symbol on it came from a roof top. "Run child. If they see you, they'll kill you." Maik hesitated at first, as he had never seen such a powerful, yet small attack like that. Magmorel couldn't even pull that off. He gained control again,

"Who are you? What was that?!"
"Go. Now."

Maik decided not to ask anymore questions. He ran off without another word. The man in the cloak smiled, and disappeared into the darkness of the night.
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Comments: 12

Neo-Kieran [2008-06-05 01:48:56 +0000 UTC]

Very good. But some things of spelling to pass by. In the first paragraph, I didnt know if you meant to do this but maik says "This my World" Didnt know if you wanted this is my world or not so yeah. second in the 6th paragraph you said Maik though hed check out the new shop. didnt know if you wanted it to be thought. But it was good just thought Id help with spelling like I always try to do.

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veXchu In reply to Neo-Kieran [2008-06-06 00:06:42 +0000 UTC]

Ah.

Thanks.

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Pirate-King-Jing [2008-06-01 21:45:33 +0000 UTC]

This si good, but my one downside is that live action thing you made, now i imagine master chief everytime i read a line of the white cloaked man's.

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veXchu In reply to Pirate-King-Jing [2008-06-02 00:13:52 +0000 UTC]

A joke was your downside?

>.>

Well, thanks.

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Pirate-King-Jing In reply to veXchu [2008-06-02 19:12:08 +0000 UTC]

Yes, which is very good, because you purposely made that joke

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veXchu In reply to Pirate-King-Jing [2008-06-02 19:28:30 +0000 UTC]

-_- I was joking in the last message.

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Pirate-King-Jing In reply to veXchu [2008-06-03 00:22:55 +0000 UTC]

-_-_- oh, wellll, I was not.

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veXchu In reply to Pirate-King-Jing [2008-06-03 19:48:59 +0000 UTC]

O..kay..

Then how can a joke be a downside?

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Pirate-King-Jing In reply to veXchu [2008-06-04 00:06:10 +0000 UTC]

HMMMMMMMMM...... i do not know, in fact, that whole thing was SHOOSHAMMERY!

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tellmewhoiam [2008-06-01 03:19:22 +0000 UTC]

Not bad

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veXchu In reply to tellmewhoiam [2008-06-01 04:12:35 +0000 UTC]

Thanks

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tellmewhoiam In reply to veXchu [2008-06-01 11:03:56 +0000 UTC]

No prob

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