Comments: 15
ArmorFelix2001 [2004-10-17 21:33:23 +0000 UTC]
The smaller ones tried to touch me;
Pressing their pink fins on the bowl side.
I liked this poem, cute yet philosophical. The overall execution seemed planned out and rather good, I don't think you'd want to do anymore than a few minor tweaks. Most of the imagery you use seems to connect to something else in the poem, which is a plus to how effective it is...
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shade01 [2004-10-17 00:30:20 +0000 UTC]
I like how you took two completely different things and made them more relative then we usually see. I love the fishbowl idea. like you said it's not your usual style but I love it.
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Maikaduriel [2004-10-13 11:11:02 +0000 UTC]
I enjoyed that one! *is chuffed* the best bits all seemed to be [in the square brackets] I noticed.
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JenniferStarling [2004-10-13 00:11:32 +0000 UTC]
That's actually pretty good although I dislike the all bold/underline. Makes you wonder what you'd really want to live life as.
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NippyKitty [2004-10-12 23:54:39 +0000 UTC]
I don't really get it, but I wanna be a fish now...
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LordOfSenses [2004-10-12 23:52:31 +0000 UTC]
I LOVE IT!
it's so sad though...so final...
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LordOfSenses In reply to Wombatchar [2004-10-13 00:01:55 +0000 UTC]
you're most certainly welcome banana lover!
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