wernstrum [2003-10-14 05:44:51 +0000 UTC]
interesting piece. I think it would sound better without the reptition in the 3rd last stanza. good starting point. this, i reckon, has really big potential. Keep up the good work!
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yisp In reply to wernstrum [2003-10-14 11:02:51 +0000 UTC]
well...I like that repetition pretty much adds a bit to the contrast.... and it serves as a break before to two ending stanzas set in...imo thx for commenting!
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