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LMNtL [2006-10-07 01:27:49 +0000 UTC]

Yah, alright I'll jump on board for tips.

First, I'll start by saying "you've improved a lot!" and "good for you for going back to basics!"--because this piece resembles both.

Now about that colour scheme. Good idea to use contrasting colours like green and red but you're drawing too much attention to the wrong elements of the piece. Generally, you want your fill to be one color scheme that blends nicely and doesn't contradict itself too much (NOTE, however that once you get the hang of how colours work you'll be able to pull off such feats but for now... "stick to the basics"). Following the same rule, then, you want your 3d to be a colour scheme that contrasts the fill's colour scheme. So, for instance, if you used a red fill, try using a dark green background or something else really dark to balance the colours out. Then, you've gotta find a line colour that either contrasts both of them or blends with one of them (typically one that blends with the 3d [eg: black for light pieces, white for dark pieces]).

On to the letters. I like that you experimented with tilting the letters and played with their size. Good stuff. If you keep doing pieces just like this one, nice and simple, and focus on the bigger picture like shape and flow, you will learn so much about this art that in a year's time that you'll be burning some crazy-complicated pieces. There IS a reason why everyone says "go back to the basics".
In this piece, the A and R can use some work. Try "squashing" the 'a' a bit to eliminate some of the white-space between the loop and the arm. The R looks kinda funky... maybe try moving the right leg of it right a bit (to extend from the loop instead of the stem...)

I'm not sure that I agree with marmalade in saying that the lines need to be thicker, but I DEFINITELY agree that there should be more distinction between letters. I find that drop shadows from letter to letter works really well. Also, you could try giving a letter on top just a little bit of 3d so it looks like the letter underneath is coming out of the side of the 3d surface... that's a fun effect.

Which brings me to 3d. The 3d in this piece seems to be all over the place and doesn't seem to really know where it's going. Try just doing a straight down 3d. Start by taking every corner on the bottom edge of the piece and draw a straight line down from each and every single one of them. Then, just copy the horizontal line that falls between each vertical line... it's kinda like you're taking that line and just moving it down about a cm or whatever.

What else can I say? Oh... force field. The idea of a force field, or key line, or outline or whatever people wanna call it is to make the whole piece POP off of its canvas. Experiment a lot with BRIGHT colours. In this piece that yellow you used in the splatters would have worked well, or even a super-light blue... experiment with different stuff.

Umm... yea... I dunno why I felt like writing so much, but there ya have it. My advice really just pertains to typical conventions shared among many graff-heads. Your own unique flavour is entirely up to you, and the name of the game is experimenting. I'm done.... for now.

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DylanPierpont [2006-09-29 02:48:38 +0000 UTC]

tips? ok

since you made this a 3D piece, dont make the fill the same color as you 3D portion (it makes it too hard to differenciate between the two). Mabey if you made it solid black, or just something to contrast the pinks and greens. If you plan on making the fill a little more simplistic in the future, then you can go a little more wild with your lettering (ie: arrows, quotes, etc.)...but if you choose that route, you might want to slim down your letters (gives you more room to inter-loop, criss-cross, and over-lap your extras)...

but thats all i have for now...nice job otherwise...keep it up man

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truemarmalade [2006-09-27 16:04:01 +0000 UTC]

Your color choice needs a lot of help. It's better to go simplistic, then to put a lot of color into a tag. With the colors you chose, it makes it hard to see the edges of the letters since they're so skinny.

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