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[2010-08-26 00:33:48 +0000 UTC]
"Sepharius"
(United Kingdom)
# Statistics
Favourites: 44; Deviations: 46; Watchers: 7
Watching: 20; Pageviews: 6983; Comments Made: 221; Friends: 20
# Interests
Favorite bands / musical artists: Nobuo UematsuOther Interests: Writing, reading, creating.
# About me
Operating System: Windows 7# Comments
Comments: 36
Thank you for all the favs! I'm glad people enjoy my work
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I did the chapter! It should be in my gallery. I called it 'The Pazuru saga-prologue 2.'
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Sorry internet is down at the moment, can only come on when down a friends ._.
Its good xD
I'll work on Chapter I when I can (sometime next week).
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well thank you anyway
could i give you a pic so you can donate some more
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Pic of what? o.o
And naw its cool, thanks anyway.
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hi! so i really like the quote in your signature! who said it?
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Its best to think it over and take your time, good luck ^^
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Np o.o
Just got the ones I really like x)
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this is the group where creation unites
here are a few rules of the group
more information is here
for the rest I wish you a great time at Creation-Inspiration
and feel free to upload your creations anytime ^-^
regards, Crew Of CI
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Ok thanks, I'll upload soon.
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All right, you said you were into expansing stories correct?
Well Babermirza's here to help!
Okay, so from what I can see so far you can work out plot and characters, but not so good at brining up expansion I take it? That's okay, we're all like that at time.
So here are some things to help you with that: first of all, always use description when showing a type of expansion. Don't be afraid to go into details, that's what people want!
Secondly, you always have to have some sort of buildup, that way the reader wants to know what will happen at the end result. Another tip, always have some sort of reason as to why the expansion is occuring- you can't just blow up someones boobs without a reason, or else it will seem boring.
Talk to me anytime, I'm here to help 
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Details have always been my weak point, I can describe things alright but I can't seem to get wwhat the reader would want xD
By a build could you give me an example please?
As for the blowing up the boobs bit (rofl), you mean explaining the nature of an attack used?
Thanks for the help.
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A build up is like a sequence of events leading up to your point.
GENERIC EXAMPLE:
Babermirza slowly watched as his target, Ayra, unsuspectingly walked on top of an X placed in the middle of the floor. Babermirza's anticipation was met as the ceiling opened up immidiately after the red haired fairy stepped in the center of the X. A ray gun popped from the ceiling and shot her, increasing her cup size five times over.
See? The main point was Ayra getting a bigger bust size, but before that occured, I explained how it happened. Breifly.
As for the third part, yeah attack being used is kinda what I mean. As used in the example, there was a cause and effect rule that occured, and that needs to be a part of expansion stories. You can't just make someone a giantess for no apparent reason.
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Oh and another thing is with some attacks I like to let the reader think "whats going on?" then have it used again against a future opponent who explains the attack without breaking the third world barrier.
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I'm new to deviant, I'd like to say I'm a writer but I'm still learning.
Please help me improve by criticizing my work.
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