Leerimuna In reply to jessicavonpaint [2009-05-24 02:12:48 +0000 UTC]

You're welcome!

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Leerimuna In reply to The-Wall-flower [2009-05-17 04:22:04 +0000 UTC]

You're welcome! I've read you're story Made For You before, and decided to start reading it again!
I really liked your peice but I would change a few things. Such as the length of the dialouges, they were a tad long with uneccisary information and with that it made the chapter a bit lengthy and diminished the readers intrest. Also there was a lot of repeated information that was already stated in previous chapters and they don't need to be restated.
"Cameron blinked. Something told him that Maxi wasn’t talking about the murals on the walls." Wasn't really needed for expanation, let the reader pick up on it.
I hope these suggestions will help better your piece! Good luck!

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The-Wall-flower In reply to Leerimuna [2009-05-17 15:49:19 +0000 UTC]

Really? Wow. xD

Holy crap critique, yay! : D
When you say too much length of dialogues, do you mean the actual dialogue itself, or the bits around it? Or is it both? ._. Either way, next time I'm editting older chapters, I'll keep that in mind and shave off as much excess as I can, including the needless "tell-not-show" stuff and the redundant repetition.

Thank you very much for the awesome advice.
You have no idea how much I appreciate it. :>

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Leerimuna In reply to The-Wall-flower [2009-05-24 02:17:48 +0000 UTC]

Haha, you're welcome! Do you not get much critique?
And excellent, I'm glad you appreciated my advice! When I say that there was lenghty dialouges, I meant just shave around it and make it sharper!
Keep up the good work!

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The-Wall-flower In reply to Leerimuna [2009-05-25 14:47:19 +0000 UTC]

Unfortunately, no. But that's all right; the bits that I get here and there are extremely helpful. :3

And of course I do! Any advice to help improve is always appreciated. xD And thank you for clarifying a bit more; I'll do my best to make the dialogue sharper in both older and future chapters/stories.

Thanks!

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Leerimuna In reply to The-Wall-flower [2009-05-28 22:02:55 +0000 UTC]

You are very welcome! Kudos on chapter 22!

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Leerimuna In reply to delboysb91 [2009-05-16 17:02:27 +0000 UTC]

Haha, no prob, it was a good picture and I liked the media!

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delboysb91 In reply to Leerimuna [2009-05-16 17:42:19 +0000 UTC]

^___^
im glad u liked it

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Leerimuna In reply to WildRainOfIceAndFire [2009-05-16 03:38:03 +0000 UTC]

lol You're welcome dear!

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Leerimuna In reply to Iardacil [2009-03-28 17:06:24 +0000 UTC]

lol you are welcome!

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Leerimuna In reply to AkiTusspot [2009-03-26 23:02:18 +0000 UTC]

Excusez-moi ? Nous sommes des amis...vous connais-je ? Je ne comprends pas que vous avez l'intention de dire...Je suis désolé si j'offense!

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AkiTusspot In reply to Leerimuna [2009-03-30 21:41:22 +0000 UTC]

O.O!

I'm very sorry. The band Metallica says "A loud 'Metal Up Your Ass'" to somebody as a way of saying thank you.

When I said "A loud 'Metal Up Your Ass' to you", I was saying thank you for faving my art.

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Leerimuna In reply to AkiTusspot [2009-03-30 23:11:00 +0000 UTC]

Pardon? I am fairly bad at english I have problems understand the language! I'm not sure when I talked to you, so forgive me! I confuse you for a friend trying to tease me in english!
excusez-moi!
Merci many for your thanks! You are welcome!

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AkiTusspot In reply to Leerimuna [2009-03-31 22:05:48 +0000 UTC]

Usually people say "my friend" referring to a normal person who's done something nice.

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Leerimuna In reply to AkiTusspot [2009-04-03 15:38:27 +0000 UTC]

Oui? I understand what you mean, sorry for having over-reacting

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AkiTusspot In reply to Leerimuna [2009-04-03 16:29:10 +0000 UTC]

It's no problem, many people overreact.

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Leerimuna In reply to deamonslaor5 [2009-03-26 22:53:11 +0000 UTC]

You're welcome

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Leerimuna In reply to ginacartoon [2009-03-22 00:52:59 +0000 UTC]

You're welcome!

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Leerimuna In reply to kissimmeebabe48 [2009-03-22 00:54:58 +0000 UTC]

Yeah, I saw a video and I thought it was the freakiest thing I'd ever seen, so I liked it! Have you heard the soulchild remix of 19-2000? Gorillaz have the most bizarre names for their damn songs

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kissimmeebabe48 In reply to Leerimuna [2009-03-22 01:42:48 +0000 UTC]

Yeah I've heard it, pretty good. I think that "Feel Good Inc" is the weirdest video.

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Leerimuna In reply to kissimmeebabe48 [2009-03-23 01:34:30 +0000 UTC]

I love Feel Good Inc, it makes some sense, but I think it's kind of sad too O^O 2D's part was, and the happiness in that song was Noodle's bit, and Murdoc's part...uhm, his was just fun to watch lol But you are totally right, weirdest thing I have ever seen, really!

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kissimmeebabe48 In reply to Leerimuna [2009-03-23 02:08:34 +0000 UTC]

But you gotta' admit, they're a really great band(;

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Leerimuna In reply to kissimmeebabe48 [2009-03-23 04:19:14 +0000 UTC]

Of course, I like nothing but the greatest! (:

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kissimmeebabe48 In reply to Leerimuna [2009-03-23 10:42:46 +0000 UTC]

What's your favorite song?

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Leerimuna In reply to kissimmeebabe48 [2009-03-23 23:37:35 +0000 UTC]

Of the Gorillaz? I like the Soulchild remix of 19-2000 the very most, my second is Clint Eastwood. But if you meant what's my fave song over all the bands, it's still 19-2000 lol What do you think 19-2000 means anyway?

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kissimmeebabe48 In reply to Leerimuna [2009-03-24 00:15:52 +0000 UTC]

Lol I have no clue

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Leerimuna In reply to kissimmeebabe48 [2009-03-24 01:43:09 +0000 UTC]

What's your favorite song from them?

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kissimmeebabe48 In reply to Leerimuna [2009-03-24 01:56:03 +0000 UTC]

I just LOVE Feel Good Inc and Clint Eastwood xD

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Leerimuna In reply to kissimmeebabe48 [2009-03-25 00:59:37 +0000 UTC]

Ooooh, have you heard Latin Samone? Pretty good I think

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kissimmeebabe48 In reply to Leerimuna [2009-03-25 03:47:36 +0000 UTC]

Not yet, but now I will(:

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Leerimuna In reply to kissimmeebabe48 [2009-03-25 04:18:41 +0000 UTC]

It's dark compared to some of the other gorillaz songs, but I still like it

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kissimmeebabe48 In reply to Leerimuna [2009-03-25 04:26:43 +0000 UTC]

Yeah, I've been listening to more and more of the Gorillaz along with Paramore. I've never listened to Paramore and I must say that they're a great band! I just burned two CD's earlier of their songs ^^

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Leerimuna In reply to kissimmeebabe48 [2009-03-25 23:29:49 +0000 UTC]

I don't think I've ever heard Paramore! I should give them a listen!
But that reminds me, I have to go buy some Gorillaz cd's sometime so I can get them on my ipod! Plus, I wanted to get their book Rise of the Ogre, which that all will be pricey (by my standards) lol

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kissimmeebabe48 In reply to Leerimuna [2009-03-26 01:49:00 +0000 UTC]

Oh yeah Paramore is AWESOME! My favorite songs are Decode, That's What You Get, I Caught Myself, and Pressure. Lol believe or not but I first heard of Paramore through my Sims 2 PS2 game!! One of their songs was on the game which was Pressure and I loved it! It's what got me to listen to Paramore a year ago(: All of their songs are really good!

What's their book "Rise of the Ogre" supposed to be about?

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Leerimuna In reply to kissimmeebabe48 [2009-03-26 03:11:08 +0000 UTC]

I'm giving them a listen now!

Rise of the Ogre is just background on them all, like, you get to find out how they all got together and thier personal origins and such in a sort-of comic format, with a lot of art by Hewlett (the real reason I am getting it) There are a lot of other features so I've heard, so I'm going to save up the money somehow and buy it soon!

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Leerimuna In reply to arm01 [2009-03-22 00:52:49 +0000 UTC]

You're welcome! Awsome picture dude!

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Leerimuna In reply to Silvolf [2009-03-18 17:06:56 +0000 UTC]

You're welcome!

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