b3421 In reply to ADashOfInsanity [2012-06-02 00:47:52 +0000 UTC]

Oh, sorry! (I haven't even checked to see if you've updated.) Alright, I'll get right on that. I don't think you're nagging. In fact, I like that you're keeping me reviewing!

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ADashOfInsanity In reply to b3421 [2012-06-02 17:45:27 +0000 UTC]

It's ok! I'm glad you don't think I nag (PalindromeIsntOne definitely thinks it!)

I'll reply to your review here if you don't mind!

How Ike got a retail truck... Well he lives in a large (supposedly-under-refurbishment) supermarket so it wouldn't look too unusual to have a lorry approach it. Also he lives in a fairly derelict sector (Sector H, the warehouse sector)so not many people would actually notice it!

As for Roy, I feel sorry for him too. He does have some good news coming his way but for now, he's pretty much a puppet for Elice, S and Z to play with.

Code Red isn't Heist, I can tell you that. However it does take one to know one, and I was very happy to see you pointed out he is very Heist like. There is a very good reason behind that that's entirely Heist's fault!

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b3421 In reply to ADashOfInsanity [2012-06-03 19:45:12 +0000 UTC]

So Heist screwed up somewhere, then? 'Cause he should know that one of himself is more than enough, even if Code Red is opposing him. (I don't think the authorities could handle Heist and Code Red going at each other.) Speaking of that, Code Red has a lot of hard-to find info on Heist. Interesting, interesting.

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ADashOfInsanity In reply to b3421 [2012-06-03 20:08:02 +0000 UTC]

Not really, Code Red isn't the result of a mistake on Heist's part, his actions were 100% intentional, which only makes them even more dangerous to each other. In my opinion Code Red is the most dangerous enemy in the story, second to Elice, because he knows so much and therefore has control over Elice herself!

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b3421 In reply to ADashOfInsanity [2012-05-10 23:05:36 +0000 UTC]

Yeah, no problem. I'm really sorry it took me this long to respond though.

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ADashOfInsanity In reply to b3421 [2012-05-11 10:28:28 +0000 UTC]

It's ok

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b3421 In reply to ADashOfInsanity [2012-03-14 21:53:59 +0000 UTC]

Hey, ADOI! Let's see....I reviewed, but didn't really go into detail, so, here I go.
First of all, I'd just like to say that I really like AU IkeMarth. I just think that there's way more you can do with it in terms of settings and developing other personality traits that wouldn't be there if everything was "canon", I suppose, and they lived in Smash Manor. Of course, that's not to say that I don't like Smash Manor fics, but there's a lot more flexibility with AUs and it hows off the author's skills.
Now that I've opened up with that, onto the actual chapter. I liked how Marth was in it without actually (physically) "being there" at all.
I also liked how Roy took the chance to shine. Not only did it make him that much hate-able, but it was realistic. No offense to Marth, but if I was his best friend like Roy was, I'd have gotten fed up with him a long time ago. (Well, maybe. Marth is so adorable, I may not have.) Roy was resenting Marth for totally legit reasons (most of them, anyway), and you wrote it in a way that was easy to see where he was coming from. In any case, without Marth constantly by his side, it was completely believable for Roy to step into the spotlight and soak up the attention Marth's been kinda.. holding him back, I guess...from getting. He now has what he's been missing all this time, and it doesn't look like he'll be giving it all up when Marth comes back.
The I-hate-your-guts tension between Ike and Roy was great. I'm definitely siding with Ike, though. Also on the subject of Ike, I liked how you gave us a look at his "home life" and what he has to do to support his family on top of going to a prestigious school.
Ike's some-what confession was appropriately sweet and awkward, but I liked how he wasn't embarrassed or abashed. (And it was funny that he didn't know whether he liked Marth or not. Pit nudged him along on that one.)
All in all, I really liked it. Both Ike and Roy's points of view where conveyed nicely, and I could see where both of them were coming from. It was very easy to relate to. Good job, and I look forward to your next IkeMarth story update.

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ADashOfInsanity In reply to b3421 [2012-03-17 22:17:29 +0000 UTC]

Hello! Thanks very much for your review I really appreciate it!

I'm glad you think so, it's the matter I get the most haters about, but story after story about the return of Tabuu gets boring. There's a lot more inspiration for an author in AU because you get to try out new things and write about topics you're interested in or simply want to try writing!

Marth's not going to be 'physically' back for quite a few chapters so I'm going to be playing about with his presence in the story as Roy gets more and more chances to shine. I'm happy someone understands Roy's resentment against Marth (usually all reasons get passed aside for hatred in my readers) Marth does hog Roy's limelight to some degree, then again, Roy isn't as good as Marth overall, so the question of jealousy or prevention remains open!
I don't know whether I should take sides as the writer, but I'm on Ike's side too (Though I know the real reason Roy hates Ike so much so I'm probably biased!) As for Ike's home-life, I wrote him in a disadvantaged position, but with a loving supporting family, to contrast with all the others Ike's I've written (who are generally on top of the world) but also to constrast with other characters, especially Marth. As soon as he reappears back in the story you'll why!
Oh and Ike's as terrible with his own love-life as he is with advising Pit's, another cause of tension with Roy later in the story!
Thanks very much! There's plenty of Roy v Ike in the chapters to come and I'm glad you thought their arguements were believable. The next IkexMarth story to update I think will be Walls Apart, but I haven't decided yet! Thanks again!

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b3421 In reply to ADashOfInsanity [2012-03-18 01:49:14 +0000 UTC]

No problem for the review. And semi-teasers all through out that reply! And I'm actually really, really, excited for an update of Walls Apart. I think that ts my favorite of all your stories. Of course, which ever you choose, I'll be ready to reply/review, so...write away!

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ADashOfInsanity In reply to b3421 [2012-03-19 20:39:10 +0000 UTC]

I can't help but put teasers in! If you'd like something to read, you see what you think of "Crossovers in Wonderland", WA!Marth is the protagonist but its a mix-up of all my IkexMarth stories, and Pikana's Circo de la Luna.

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