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[2006-01-19 12:04:35 +0000 UTC]
"~the secret study~"
(Singapore)
# Statistics
Favourites: 110; Deviations: 193; Watchers: 619
Watching: 39; Pageviews: 82510; Comments Made: 3124; Friends: 39
# Interests
Favorite visual artist: norman rockwell, haruhiko mikimoto, katoki hajime, yosa no busonFavorite writers: jin yong, sir conan doyle, buson and issa
# About me
study of japanese language together with apprenticeship in haiku-writing is a long-standing hobby.painting is another love of my life. i haven't been able to shake it off no matter how tied down by other affairs in real life.
traditional paintings were done using chinese ink on rice paper. i also do graphite and color pencil drawings, as well as digital art by photoshop 7.0.
see my other artwork at the default dA art account:
enjoy.
# Comments
Comments: 354
Hello there;Β Are you familiar with the works of Riadorana?
Riadorana (Ruby Alcarin) | DeviantArt
Here is a recent example:Β ChouDaiBouken No Satoshi To Pikachu
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I see; Sorry for bothering you!
Feel free to leave a comment for the artist herself to read.
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Your profile is a treasure trove. Your collection of seventeen syllables has unending joy.
Please make me your apprentice!
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I am looking for a sensei myself... Β siragiku san no longer comes to dA.
But, I'm glad to delight you with my idiosyncrasies.
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Wow! Thank you so much!
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Hello Random Deviant I hope you're having a good day and if not there is always tomorrow
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oh yes, thank you.
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You are very welcome ^_^
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Cheers very much for the 
Sorry for the really late reply, I've been somewhat distracted recently - might be time for another Totoro picture shoot
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Thanks for the Llama. Keep up your beautiful work!
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Thanks so much for the llama. Your art is beautiful!
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Thank you so much for the llama badge!
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ahm...you say that you are from singapore, but you write in japanese, why?
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That's because i am a big japan fan, i have spent two decades learning about japan. My mother tongue is mandarin as i am a Chinese.
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thought so, that's why i asked in the first place^^
well i think you know a lot more about japanese than i, what do you think: is it easier to write haiku in japanese or english? and what does it do with the...feeling of the poem to write it in english and japanese?
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it's easier to write it in japanese. the original form of haiku in its minimalistic form fits the language well, that's why.
as for the feeling, i guess it is the oneness with nature and objective pov that makes the haiku works.
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would you like to have a look at my gallery and tell me how i am doing with my haikus? i just write in english and sometimes have problems with the minimalistic style and also i'm often not writing about the oneness with nature, please tell me what you think [link]
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i would say that what you wrote is not really haiku, at least not the traditional ones.
to learn more about this form of poetry you might like to check out some of the resources on haiku listed on the first page of #the-haiku-club . It is not meant to be a poetry form with only 5-7-5 syllables restriction.
for a starter you might like to read this article to know the original form and intention of haiku:
[link]
i hope these helps.
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hmm you mean that haiku are more about images, and not so much about actuall phrases, feelings and concepts?
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Images are very important in haiku. The images are conveyed by your phrases, the images tell your feelings and concept.
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would this be a more traditional haiku then?->
The smile of the girl
Brings a smile to another
That she does not see
is this better? or "closer"?
please tell me what you think(and tell me if i am annoying you)
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this is better in that there is a clear image.
but it is still not traditional because there isn't any seasonal feeling in the verse.
join #the-haiku-club and you should get even more help from other haiku poets.
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seasonal feeling? you mean like rise, climax, fall? or like a twist in the meaning with the third verse?
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No, spring summer autumn winter. Seasons. The presence of a seasonal symbol is a must in a haiku.
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can you give me an exsampel?
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[link]
Please read up some of the great masters of traditional haiku. I translated some in my journal in the link above.
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so a haku does not have to display symbols of every season? like you said issa1 is a spring poem?
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yes, of course. the haiku should show the time when you are writing it.
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something like
lightning reflections
on the frozen seas surface
make the young girl smile
...?
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frozen sea must be fictional? i've never heard of that before.
anyway, since minimalism is a virtue:
lightning reflects
on frozen sea-
the young girl smiles.
you are close to a traditional haiku.
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well i could also have written frozen lake.
so minimalism is more important then the 5-7-5 stystem`?
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yes. minimalism is the gist. 5-7-5 is only for japanese haiku.
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bright reflections
on frozen lake
the young girl smiles
something like that?
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Yes. Something like that.
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you do not sound convinced.
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certainly this is not the best haiku there is yet.
i am picky, sorry to tell you that.
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well if you were easy to please i would not know if there is room for improvment, would i?
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I am glad you are so understanding.
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hey, if i am not annoying you, can you look at this one? i would like to hear your opinion [link]
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"understanding" is like my second name^^
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I'm honestly not sure why I hadn't been watching you already. Rectified.
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Neko wa ii desu!!!
I've been teaching myself Japanese out of books for the past 2 months, and I find your poetry intriguing...
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