shineytrooper In reply to spinekicksy [2017-11-25 16:20:24 +0000 UTC]

Hi

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spinekicksy In reply to shineytrooper [2017-11-25 19:10:10 +0000 UTC]

How are u?

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shineytrooper In reply to spinekicksy [2017-11-25 19:21:44 +0000 UTC]

Alright

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spinekicksy In reply to shineytrooper [2017-11-25 19:25:48 +0000 UTC]

That's good

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shineytrooper In reply to franklando [2017-07-12 20:15:39 +0000 UTC]

its cool

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shineytrooper In reply to TheDubstepAddict [2017-01-15 08:46:06 +0000 UTC]

Hello?

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TheDubstepAddict In reply to shineytrooper [2017-01-15 13:50:49 +0000 UTC]

I came from yt. Kickass videos man.

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shineytrooper In reply to TheDubstepAddict [2017-01-15 14:00:02 +0000 UTC]

ah... ok

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TheDubstepAddict In reply to shineytrooper [2017-01-15 14:02:48 +0000 UTC]

Lol

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shineytrooper In reply to AhsokaTano1611 [2017-01-01 20:15:18 +0000 UTC]

np

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AhsokaTano1611 In reply to shineytrooper [2017-01-01 20:52:41 +0000 UTC]

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shineytrooper In reply to AhsokaTano1611 [2016-12-31 14:52:35 +0000 UTC]

thanks and yeah its really good... i think in places it falls short because of your writing but you get better.

when it comes to writing i think you need to read a lot of books as it helps you understand creative
writing. a lot of books that help me are star wars ahsoka and dark disciples as well as others. you seem to use
a lot of repeated words and dont really use interesting language (might be useful to use a thesaurus)

when working with a pre made character like ahsoka (especially with ahsoka) i think you need to
understand them a little better and when you make her do something with her you need to look over it 
and and check if you could imagine ahsoka saying this or doing this

also with that point you have to read over your work and try and imagine if this is how normal people would
interact a lot of your interactions between characters felt forced or awkward and a lot of the time you need to
slow down because the story moves too fast

im sorry for turning this into a review lol i tend to over analyse things but i really enjoyed it

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AhsokaTano1611 In reply to shineytrooper [2016-12-31 15:06:57 +0000 UTC]

plus I never had time on my hands

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AhsokaTano1611 In reply to shineytrooper [2016-12-31 15:06:28 +0000 UTC]

Ok thanks I'll use these tips, I'm not the best author

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shineytrooper In reply to AhsokaTano1611 [2016-12-31 16:03:55 +0000 UTC]

ill also be sure to check out any new chapters because i enjoyed it and you might want to expect some fan art from me when i get around to it

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AhsokaTano1611 In reply to shineytrooper [2016-12-31 16:08:28 +0000 UTC]

I've started Nebula's complete back story, it's called 90 Years.

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shineytrooper In reply to AhsokaTano1611 [2016-12-31 17:17:50 +0000 UTC]

anything else i should read?

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AhsokaTano1611 In reply to shineytrooper [2016-12-31 18:45:50 +0000 UTC]

No, not really. Well I'll see.

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shineytrooper In reply to AhsokaTano1611 [2017-01-01 01:43:54 +0000 UTC]

I made a basic idea of what i think Nebula would look like based off yours and spinekicksys drawings of her

keep in mind this is a rough sketch and the colours and shapes are not final 

uploadpie.com/dtKMgz

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AhsokaTano1611 In reply to shineytrooper [2017-01-01 08:35:48 +0000 UTC]

Well I like it!

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shineytrooper In reply to AhsokaTano1611 [2017-01-01 14:11:56 +0000 UTC]

so before i properly draw it out this is the right idea?

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AhsokaTano1611 In reply to shineytrooper [2017-01-01 14:13:27 +0000 UTC]

Yes!

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shineytrooper In reply to AhsokaTano1611 [2016-12-31 15:16:40 +0000 UTC]

dont worry im not either but we learn and improve no one is good at anything naturally

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AhsokaTano1611 In reply to shineytrooper [2016-12-31 16:08:03 +0000 UTC]

I'm slowly getting better. I guess. And I read a lot of books, and I'm reading the book Ahsoka at the min, but because I'm not actually English, I'm from Germany, I don't know a lot of words.

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shineytrooper In reply to AhsokaTano1611 [2016-12-31 17:20:14 +0000 UTC]

the ahsoka novel is a great book especially for ahsoka fans i was surprised when i found out it wasnt in german and other languages and being english i had to ship my copy from america when it was released.

I hope you enjoy it 

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AhsokaTano1611 In reply to shineytrooper [2016-12-31 18:46:09 +0000 UTC]

Yeah I am! Have you read A New Dawn?

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shineytrooper In reply to FlameHeart0 [2016-12-24 12:48:46 +0000 UTC]

no problem

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shineytrooper In reply to spinekicksy [2016-12-19 14:13:05 +0000 UTC]

no problem, although the first thank was enough

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spinekicksy In reply to shineytrooper [2016-12-19 15:11:11 +0000 UTC]

Ok 😊 how are you?

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shineytrooper In reply to spinekicksy [2016-12-19 15:37:53 +0000 UTC]

im good, i showed my friend habari your work and he loved it... till he saw it was lux Bonteri and ahsokas child

he really has something against lux

what about you?

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spinekicksy In reply to shineytrooper [2016-12-19 15:46:42 +0000 UTC]

I'm fine

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shineytrooper In reply to spinekicksy [2016-12-19 16:01:41 +0000 UTC]

so i was wondering where do you normally get your ideas for your work?

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spinekicksy In reply to shineytrooper [2016-12-19 18:03:04 +0000 UTC]

I just love her smuggler outfit and I wish I would have the ahsoka novel (only problem: I think the book is just in english language and I can't buy it in Germany or just per internet(that could be very expensive ).)

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shineytrooper In reply to spinekicksy [2016-12-19 18:44:57 +0000 UTC]

its a shame its a really good book... though do you speak or at least understand English? you seem to be able to write and reed English 

I have a download link of the audio book by ashley eckstiein (the voice of ahsoka tano) you might enjoy but again its in English... 

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spinekicksy In reply to shineytrooper [2016-12-19 19:01:38 +0000 UTC]

Ok I have my dictionary

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shineytrooper In reply to spinekicksy [2016-12-19 20:01:33 +0000 UTC]

it a long book, but if you can understand a bit of English then you can give it a go

www.mediafire.com/file/b9cv29s…

www.mediafire.com/file/hehak9t…

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spinekicksy In reply to shineytrooper [2016-12-19 20:05:15 +0000 UTC]

Thx

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shineytrooper In reply to spinekicksy [2016-12-19 21:34:45 +0000 UTC]

no problem 

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shineytrooper In reply to SubduedMoon [2016-12-07 13:16:35 +0000 UTC]

No problem 

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