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DoubleDandE [2019-10-04 05:45:40 +0000 UTC]

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Rather interesting comic here- had to go back to the previous page to find out who these characters are and didn’t know it was MLP related. What does this have to do with anything? I was able to go back to the previous page, which is great that you did that, but… it was a bit of looking in between all the links to see where I was at. It would be more sufficient if you only linked the First page (usually a cover page of sorts that tells us about the comic), the previous page, and then the next. This will help new readers not have to do some detective work.

The art in the panels look nice. They are colored and shaded well, and nothing seems too rushed. I have to say the only panel that is probably the weakest of the bunch would be the fourth panel with the guy getting out of the pool- a better angle could have been done, but it’s okay. All that matters, as advice I’ve learned from a Pro, is you need to have at least one good panel per page.

The anatomy of the character’s look great. The facial features especially on the butler and on the guy who is standing full glory in front of panels four and five. The backgrounds are just fine, but I feel the last panel makes the entire area barren. Try adding some decorations or chairs to the area, or something as the last two panels make things look plain. The second panel does great in adding some background details, so try to push yourself to do so whenever possible. Trust me, I know.

Overall this is a rather nice comic. You’ve linked previous and the next pages down in the description, you’ve done a great job in shading your characters here, especially since you’re coloring them, and the features and anatomy don’t look off. The water looks nice, although maybe add in some dripping water on the guy on the close up shot of him. 

Keep up the good work.  

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