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baronvonvoe In reply to Cathiegirl16 [2009-03-16 02:53:53 +0000 UTC]
It's been a while since I'm heard from you and Hisoka is the wife; Ami is the mistress.
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Cathiegirl16 In reply to baronvonvoe [2009-03-16 18:46:11 +0000 UTC]
i know, i'm sorry for that but thanks for clearing that up for me!
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Gangstabeck [2009-03-12 18:32:46 +0000 UTC]
It seems like Kanaye found his sense of honor and his wife, Hisoka, is showing her true colors. It makes me worry of what the Hyuuga could possibly be planning. The more I see of them, the more my opinion of the Hyuuga, with a few obvious exceptions, falls.
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mzhamma [2009-03-12 13:07:33 +0000 UTC]
Man, this was a really good chapter my friend. You really know how to work the plot twists. There's just one minor correction you need to make. The 3rd Hokage's name is spelled Hizuren not Hiruzen. I found this out on a website completely dedicted to Naruto. If you want, I can give you a link for it; it has the names of all the previous Hokage's, including the first and second.
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baronvonvoe In reply to mzhamma [2009-03-13 03:19:55 +0000 UTC]
Yeah send me the link.
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baronvonvoe In reply to mzhamma [2009-03-16 03:02:01 +0000 UTC]
Thanks a lot for that link...instantly book marked and you're very welcome.
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baronvonvoe In reply to mzhamma [2009-03-17 04:28:20 +0000 UTC]
I can tell that you have worked very hard on both of them. I'm extremely impressed with the detail you put into their stories and jutsu. Personally I would be begging you to let me use them in my story if Akatsuki was still around in KFS.
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baronvonvoe In reply to mzhamma [2009-03-18 03:13:10 +0000 UTC]
The honor would be mine...it's just too bad I couldn't use them in KFS.
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baronvonvoe In reply to Slayer-1412 [2009-03-10 03:42:45 +0000 UTC]
No he didn't, he was hurt really bad...and to my mistake I left him like that. The trick of story telling is making each character a part of you and understanding them regardless of who they are or what they do.
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baronvonvoe In reply to Slayer-1412 [2009-03-11 02:46:01 +0000 UTC]
Yes he was ANBU but remember the ones who attacked him were the elite of the Village Hidden Among the Clouds.
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ThatNinja [2009-03-09 19:56:18 +0000 UTC]
short but satisfying, this cuop is confusing me but i guess i'll understand it soon
if hiruzen is his actual name then what does sarutobi mean?
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baronvonvoe In reply to ThatNinja [2009-03-10 03:43:41 +0000 UTC]
Sarutobi is his family name and the coup will make sense before long.
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Adaron1912 [2009-03-09 15:08:57 +0000 UTC]
Dam and i thought the Uchiha's were bad with the coup de ta. which made the 3rd hokage order Itachi to kill his whole clan and become a missing nin. brovo my friend. Also i like how you found the 3rd. hokages real name i know that must of been hard since more profiles about him call him Sarutobi or just 3rd hokage.
one personal quetions do you know how to spell the nick name Naruto gave to Tsunade
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baronvonvoe In reply to Adaron1912 [2009-03-10 03:44:44 +0000 UTC]
It took some doing to find the 3rd's name and grandmother is spelled Obaa-chan.
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sebo70 [2009-03-09 09:45:15 +0000 UTC]
Wow!
Kanaye really changed back to before he become Hiashi's pawn. Maybe not completely but he is on good way.
Conspiracy and threat from Hyuuga. Kanaye is in mortal danger. And I bet that Kumo'Honzar had something with all change of Kanaye and Hiashi's hate to Naruto. This old spider-demon can be as old as Kyuubi and maybe even far dangerous than the old fox.
Bet also that Hisoka and others are one side with this old insect. After Ami give birth they probably kill her, take her baby and rise as new Hyuuga heir and then Head of the Clan.
Or they could also use it to bring Honzar to the world.
Man, your story is great! Can't wait for the next chapter! And good we could see Konohamaru. He didn't appear in this fic until now. Or it was who forgot about him? I don't know.
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baronvonvoe In reply to sebo70 [2009-03-10 03:46:26 +0000 UTC]
Just know that Kumo'Honzar is very old and very powerful and his influence among people is not over. Honestly I did forget about Konohamaru and I left him in a bad position back in Fiery Dawn during the chunin exams.
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Autistic-teddy [2009-03-09 07:43:45 +0000 UTC]
a good idea is to have Naruto fully healed and kick the chakra out of Hisoka for her treachery against his son and then Naruki and Hana should learn of it and fireworks will happen
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baronvonvoe In reply to Autistic-teddy [2009-03-09 07:58:05 +0000 UTC]
Interesting thought...but what do you mean fireworks will happen?
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