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the scarecrow's daughter [sd VI]
Published: 2017-01-08 11:09:54 +0000 UTC; Views: 3270; Favourites: 108; Downloads: 0
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nailed on a south-facing fenceout where horizon meets sky
her shadow follows the sun
frayed faded lips softly sigh
day by day slow years passing
the clouds and birds sailing by
bold ravens tell her wild tales
of a life living so high
her heart of straw is longing
not even saying goodbye
soon she will let it all goΒ
on a wild wind she will fly
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Oh my. Β If only I could write poetry like this. Β Stylish and meaningful? Β Now that is rare.
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but you can
listen to
the echoes
in your heart
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Awesome.
I'll be watching your progress from here on.
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Stay in touch.
~R~
~H~
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A DD! Congratulations! Well deserved, and it's about time. Prolific old mule finally got his recognition. Β
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thank you
the second one
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Sorry, I missed the first one. I'll have to go back and look it up. Β
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'singing with the wind'
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Beautiful. Poetry of motion.
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Beautiful piece... so haunting and lonely. 
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Struck a cord somehow.
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several, creating a melodic song...
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old mule's thanks
the cold and dark
inspire
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ItΒ΄s then we see the light better
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I'll third the motion and ArwynRie 's analysis below.
Wow.
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I got to thinking
about why she ran off
with the ravens
the wild wind
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May I draft "The Wild Wind" into the Renga Tree? Β As a tanka it's eligible. Β I'd take care of the details.
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It's been added to the tree. Β Thank you! Β
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line by line
how I feel about this
utter despair
'nailed on a south-facing fence'=the word 'nailed' says it all...
'out where horizon meets sky'=could one get any further from another object without losing sight?
'her shadow follows the sun'=...yearning...although I can see the shadow more hiding behind her, feeling unworthy
'frayed faded lips softly sigh'=words of unrequited love from a mouth so parched, thirsting for attention
'day by day slow years passing'=always hoping, never to be attained, time pressing ever heavier
'the clouds and birds sailing by'=without a glance or thought, flaunting their freedom
Β
'bold ravens tell her wild tales
of a life living so high'=boasting, only managing to make her more miserable
'her heart of straw is longing
not even saying goodbye'=no words can describe or help her conditionΒ
'soon she will let it all go'=so tired, so hopeless, she feels there is no other way, but to give up on trying
Β
'on a wild wind she will fly'=a sweet release, finally free...a handful at a time
[so sad, but awesome~]
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you could write something
about her disintegration/transformation
'a handful at a time,
straw into gold....'
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ya beat me to itΒ
since I'm so slow
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it's in him and it's got to come out
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'a handful at a time'
disintegration...
i hadn't thought of that.
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