HOME | DD
DearPoetry β Frost
Published: 2012-11-30 18:22:27 +0000 UTC; Views: 4489; Favourites: 230; Downloads: 36
Redirect to original
Description
I am devouring chaos,chasing it down with winter's chill.
Spare me your fingerprints,
summer's lovechild. Β Those knowing owl eyes
have me second guessing the wild churning
in my bones. You are the sleep that sweeps
my eyelashes, drowning me in my own daydreams.
When was it...
that you plastered yourself to my ribcage?
Related content
Comments: 68
π: 0 β©: 0
As I am sure it is said before, I love it.
π: 0 β©: 1
Not a problem.
π: 0 β©: 0
Can you please explain the poem to me in depth
π: 0 β©: 0
π: 0 β©: 1
Ohhh, thank you so much!! I'm honored to yet again be featured in your contest!
π: 0 β©: 0
This is such a beautiful piece of art! It's so darkly romantic and I personally prefer that kind of romance over anything else. The first line is by far my favourite because it pulls in and makes you want to read the entire poem. I loved it! 
π: 0 β©: 1
Oh I am much better, and thank you!
π: 0 β©: 1
Completely incredible, i have written a Critique but it will not let me rate it. I hope you do not mind if i put it here
I would first like to say that this is a beautiful piece of Poetry you have here. I am completely astonished how your mind works when you are sick. I think that the first sentence of the poem really catches your attention. It is beautiful yet wants you too keep reading more to see what the Chaos could possibly be. The language put into that is remarkable.
Now the second line, beautiful and perfect for the conditions as it is winter.
The third line just set me off, after that line I simply had to read the rest. The place of the words makes it all just beautiful. Any other lines and I might have stopped reading it.
The fourth line was another beauty, 'those knowing owl eyes' was a beautiful way to put it.
Fifth line was full of second thoughts, your second guessing and the wild churning made it seem as though the reader was feeling the same.
And now the last two lines in the bigger part of the poem, pure amazing words. 'The sweeps my eyelashes' was a great touch to the end of the poem which made me want more.
And the last two lines which were little, were big in meaning. The question you gave made me want to be able to understand it myself and wanted more of your poetry.
I believe that you should write more poetry because it is simply lovely.
I am sorry that this is fairly long but this piece was just amazing. I am amazed at the talent performed in this piece.
π: 0 β©: 0
Absolutely beautiful. I love your writing style
π: 0 β©: 1
Being sick in bed all day isn't entirely bad. It takes the thoughts like the fever you have.
Or whatever symptoms one has.
π: 0 β©: 1
I wrote a lot actually, this one just happened to make the most sense. lol
π: 0 β©: 1
Those are fun~
Sometimes all those thoughts bundled up together can make a masterpiece though. Like take a few lines here from there and BAM
π: 0 β©: 1
Yes! I do that quite often!
π: 0 β©: 1
Well anyways, I hope you feel better (if not already)
π: 0 β©: 1
I have a sinus headache, but I am doing much better, thank you!
π: 0 β©: 1
Ouch.
Just so you know,
If you ever have a bad cold
Wasabi does the trick (as crazy as that sounds)
the leaves do too.
π: 0 β©: 1
Oh! I didn't know that!
π: 0 β©: 1
What you come up with when you're sick is just as brilliant as when you're well. Beautiful.
π: 0 β©: 1
It feels like I could drown in every sentence - such beautiful use of words. Touching.
π: 0 β©: 1
WOW--thank you so much!
π: 0 β©: 0
In the second line, 'winters should actually be possessive 'winter's'.
π: 0 β©: 1
Very welcome!!!!
A very happy day to you!!!
π: 0 β©: 0
Wonderful~! You get such a depth from this, the choice of words is wondrous!
π: 0 β©: 1
π: 0 β©: 0
The poem is strange of that I must say but I like it for reasons I canβt really explain. The symbolism is deep and every time I take a peek I get a different meaning from your words. Well done.
π: 0 β©: 1
| Next =>