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DEATHDREAMThe earth shook
tonight
A blue spark of
Sylvia's psyche jolted
through my body.
Beekeepers
Overachievers
Car bombs in Beirut were
screaming, screaming.
Liquid fire osmotes to
nerve ends.
I reset the stasis
Success becomes a beguiling
initiator of infirmity.
Oh Sylvia, can you bring
no more knowledge than
the image of a narrow poem
Strait cavity through
which the mind discerns
amaranthine tribulations?
Can you not dissever the
stench of
wars, wars, wars?
Hairy spirits demand
Sacrifice on tulip altars.
Fetch the faceless child
their kindred that
guards reticent innocence.
Nothingness crowds
my head.
The end will come
To show how mundane
we are and weak.
Doorways become mirrors
Stars sting like acrimonious
insects
And I am all alone!
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Is there anything creative you're not good at?????? I no longer want you to read my lit - I feel far too insuperior! 
Seriously though, very very good, but you probably already know that!
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Aw, you're too kind. I've got a degree in English so any creativity with words is the result of a long and difficult path. You should NEVER feel inferior as I believe all art (well, most art - there is a lot of trash here at dA as well) is worthwhile.
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I agree with that - that art is always worthwhile. If nothing else, it helps the creator.
A very good friend of mine took her life in January, and I've found I can write about it much more eloquently than I can speak about it... in actuality, I've barely spoken about it at all, but I've shared many a written verse about it, and it has helped me to cope where once upon a time I would have turned to other less productive methods of psuedo-coping.
I think anything creative that speaks honestly and emotionally will always be worthwhile, it is only when the work lacks those two elements that it fails; like the trash you refer to.
But as usual with you I have gone completely off topic!! All I wanted to say was I really liked your piece
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It's fine to go off topic with me - I love hearing you rant.
I've also had friends who committed suicide and there always seems to be an element of self-blame that I generally am able to work out creatively. I think being creative and having a prodigious imagination can also be a boon for us as we feel things more acutely than the less aware. Sylvia Plath and her close friend Anne Sexton (also an EXCELLENT poetess) both committed suicide.
Thank you once again for you kind comment regarding my poetry. There are other poems in my gallery if you care for a look.
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Beautiful work. I envy your command of language and ability to invoke such emotion.
I had to read it several times and each time I seemed to take with me a different meaning. I've dabbled in poetry, but none of my work has had as much presence and power.
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Thank you so much for your kind comments, Sara. I've been an art student all my life, but I have a B.A. in English. I specialized in the Romantic Period poets, but I especially like the American post-modernists.
Sylvia Plath and her friend Anne Sexton were two of the most tragic figures in my life of literature. Their poetry has always touched me in the most disturbing ways.
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She put her head in an oven, didn't she?
I love this.
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Yeah, she did. Her poetry was once hailed (by her literary mentor) as the longest suicide note ever written. Have you ever read any of her work?
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I have not. I was kind of weirded out by the manner in which she took her life...
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Yeah, it was pretty sad, especially if you consider that she took her two children a plate of cookies and a glass of milk before sticking her head in the oven.
Here is one of my favorite poems: [link]
Gweneth Paltrow did a movie/biography about her, but it wasn't well done and made her look like a screeching bitch!
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Oh God, how tragic.
I generally find that ALL of Paltrow's performances portray characters are "screeching bitches"
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I like her as an actress and her Mom was always spectacular, but this performance pretty much fell flat. I frankly don't think she had the depth to play Sylvia Plath.
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they say the greatest writers are mad! so glad my writing suck but you my friend are dancing on the edge of greatness or madness! just kidden.
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Yeah, it takes a special kind with a special mind, doesn't it?
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I must say, this is a brilliantly executed poem, and on top of it dedicated to my soulmate born decades too early.
The tone employed and many of the metaphors create a slowly building sensation, one that threatens to overtake everything in one emotional and existentialist strike. This mirrors all too much the storm of thoughts one suffering from depression with panic attacks endures and the culmination in Plath's suicide we already know from the beginning. The sum is, of course, emotional intensity and panic paired with futility.
I wish less people could relate than I know can.
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"I wish less people could relate than I know can."
This says it all, and seems to be the binding agent for many of Plath's fans. Her poetry was touted by Robert Lowell (her mentor at Boston University) as "the longest suicide note ever written," and I can't help but wonder if her early demise was substantially delayed because of her literary outlet.
Thanks for the well-written comments and the gracious compliments. I feel unworthy as I've almost abandoned the written word for solace elsewhere - at least you've helped dispel my belief that the understanding found in the depth and complexity of good poetry is a lost virtue.
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"Sacrifice on tulip altars", reminds me about Charles Baudelaire's work: the conjuntion of beauty and ugliness. Man, it drove me in a dark mood, perfect for painting
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I was wondering what someone who knew something about psychology would think of this poem. Glad you liked it!
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Yes, i was wondering it too!!!
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Wow...I'm always impressed by you(please don't let that be a pressure thing, it was meant as a compliment)...I've never heard of Sylvia Plath before this, I'll have to check her out...
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She wrote a short novel called "The Bell Jar" if poetry isn't your thing. Her work was once hailed as the longest suicide note ever written (she killed herself in the mid-sixties). Gwenith Paltrow also starred in a movie entitled "Sylvia" which got horrible reviews (they made her seem like a real bitch).
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Hm...I'll have to find The Bell Jar...
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I'm sure you'll like it, it's all about a young girl coming of age. Look for her poetry books too, Ariel is particularly good!
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Ah, cool...thanks for the suggestion,
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A worthy dedication! I love your use of vocabulary and the imagery that forms as a result. I especially like the reference to osmosis and stasis; I think I have a soft spot for Biology.
It's frustrating that we'll never really know much more about a poet, than what we learn from their poems. But like you said, perhaps it's for the best.
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Yes, you're probably right, especially considering Sylvia's turbulent mind. I'm often attracted to "suicide poets" because many of them are so adept at describing what drove them to their wasteful end. Still, the look into such a dark psyche can't leave a person untouched, and it's best not to delve too deep.
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Wow, the imagery is amazing. The different images it conjures up are really intense. Great job
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Thank you again! I love dark imagery in poetry and always tend to read poets who specialize in making a reader think and imagine.
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Very nice, and in that,...lonely and sad. It seems to me, to an extent, a compliment to "The Prophet".
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You're right, I hadn't quite thought of it that way (I did Deathdream years before the prophet). Thank you for the compliments.
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Pretty tragic and dramatic work. The imagry is like a mini-movie, and was swept away in it all..Nice ride. I believe we all have chosen tragic paths at one time or another, but that nothing is absolute-Unless your driven to absolute madness of course! Great stuff man.
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Thank you again, David. I was hoping the imagery would carry the reader (for a short while) down a tragic path.
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"Liquid fire osmotes to
nerve ends."
I can feel that. Wow.. you are very well versed. This is a very beautiful poem.
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Thank you. What feelings I can't portray in words, I can (sometimes) paint. Everything else remains terrifying to me. There is no catharsis to wipe clean the slate.
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No, not entirely, but that's okay, because sometimes what terrifies us also teaches us. And if we survive, we will grow stronger.
And creativity is the ultimate catharsis, is it not?
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Creativity is a catharsis to a point, and I take myself to that point often enough. For the times I can't rely on creativity, I rely on the support of friends like dawno, *MAD-Uninc (and a host of others whose friendship I hold dear).
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GOOD friends are very important! Thanks for being one of them.
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I love the third verse. Wish I could understand everything.
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Well, you already know how Sylvia Plath felt about tulips - you probably also know about her putting a glass of milk by the bedside of her children before she committed suicide in her kitchen . . . you can refer to dictionary.com for the definitions you don't understand.
I think you understand quite a bit more than you are aware of. You're a very intelligent lady.
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u use to complicated expressions in english XD
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Yes, I like my readers to use their heads AND their dictionaries.
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