lostinmyworld [2014-10-18 11:02:56 +0000 UTC]
One of my favourites of yours. Very cute. I'd maybe break up paragraphs after "neck", simply for the flow and the aesthetics.
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DSShadowPyro In reply to lostinmyworld [2014-10-18 11:20:18 +0000 UTC]
I decided to keep it as one as ai tend to break up a lot of my poems in such a manner, thought I'd go for a dif look.
lostinmyworld In reply to DSShadowPyro [2014-10-18 11:48:35 +0000 UTC]
Fair enough. Doesn't change the fact that it's a good poem anyway.
DSShadowPyro In reply to lostinmyworld [2014-10-18 16:35:27 +0000 UTC]
Why thank you. 😁
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