Comments: 11
NorraMo [2014-09-30 21:43:59 +0000 UTC]
Hi there! Long time no read
I’ve been very curious about the continuation of this and I’m very happy to see a new chapter.
First, man this is getting brutal. I’m not used to torture violence in your stories. You’ve had your moments bit the things that happened to Jim in this chapter was something I didn’t expect from you to write.
What I did expect however was the return of Ray. Yeah, you had me there for a moment but I remembered that you once wrote in a journal that you wouldn’t kill off your characters just like that
Also, I wanted to point out a little detail that confused me a bit. It could be just me but when it’s first mentioned that Amos uses Jim’s jacket to clean his knife I didn’t understand that he was actually holding the jacket and that Jim wasn’t wearing it anymore. I understood it later but it confused me at first. Again, it could be just me missing a detail.
Over all, this is a very enjoyable chapter. You write Amelia so well!
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95JEH In reply to Eventhorizon6 [2014-09-10 16:37:01 +0000 UTC]
so exciting!! can't wait!!
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