borleias [2017-04-23 14:03:00 +0000 UTC]
Been through the first chapter now. It has a rough start and get's better at the end.
First it was hard for me to get into the story, because of all the different characters and events and the quick jumps fron one to the other. It wasn't clear what this story is about.
All changed when you got to the part with the new airbender. With the focus on the dialog and the two characters, I started to feel with Femke. So I got interested in your fanfiction and will continue with chapter two.
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femkeschattig In reply to borleias [2017-04-23 15:16:32 +0000 UTC]
thanks, and yeah I had to get into it at first and needed to tell the story from some diffrent POV's.... I sure hope you will enjoy the rest
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