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fenue In reply to mu-nin [2009-10-20 19:52:02 +0000 UTC]

Oh, I'm so glad that it met you approval.
Thank you.

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fenue In reply to shmemcat [2009-10-17 16:07:11 +0000 UTC]

Thank you for the compliment. And thank million times for your sweet offer.

Feel free to give the critique on any pieces (or sum up from the whole gallery - up to your convenience). Though I may not say it out loud, I'm quite open for critique. It'd be more than help since nowadays I'm like oblivious artist - hardly know my weakness or what improvement should I make.

Thank again!

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shmemcat In reply to fenue [2009-10-17 16:52:39 +0000 UTC]

I'd love to give critique!

First off, allow me to say that I am being extremely nit-picky; your pictures are fabulous and there is really not much you can improve on. ^^

First off, I would like to bring up breast shape. For slimmer bodies like the one of Verdani, there's nothing to critique or be improved on. However, for more curvy females like Demeter (shown in your piece here [link] ) the breasts don't crease in the middle automatically unless pushed, which I assume might be the case in this picture? Anyhow, they set more towards the outside. ^^ (Also, it appears in that picture she has bigger hips then your slimmer characters? You may want to focus less on the bone there and more on rounding that area, it just looks a bit more streamline.)

Another point I'd like to discuss that I frequently see in your pictures is shoulders and neck tapering. It seems like, as of now, there is none. Take a look at the muscle guide section (numeral V) on this piece: [link]
If you'll see, the neck tapers slightly to the shoulders rather then it just being a right angle. While it is more prominent in men, it does appear in women too.

Just touching on points now: Your abdomens sometimes are a tad bit long, resulting in unproportionate arm length. The elbow should meet right at the waist, the wrists should be a head below that, and the fingertips should be a head below that.

That's about all there is to critique in your pictures that needed to be brought up by an outside party. Again, I was being extremely nit-picky, it was very hard to find anatomical error. And, I hope this didn't come across as harsh, because that's the last thing I was trying to accomplish!

I will say, that you should never change the way you do your head shape or facial design, because those are the stars and highlights of your pieces. They leave me speechless! Along with, of course, your lovely coloring. ^^

I would, also, definitely think about reading up on that guide I linked. Some points on there are absolutely fantastic and worth knowing!

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fenue In reply to shmemcat [2009-10-18 21:48:01 +0000 UTC]

*notes all points down*

Thank you very much. And those errors you've pointed out are ...wow... new discoveries. *laughs*

For the off-anatomical abdomen length, I'd love to put the blame on Clamp style. And, major blame on myself who know that that was off.

The guide you linked is totally helpful. I must find time to read that thoroughly one day.

And, hunny, your critique is far away from harsh. I assure you that.

Thank you again for such wonderful critique.

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shmemcat In reply to fenue [2009-10-18 21:50:42 +0000 UTC]

I'm glad you found my critique useful! Really, it means a lot that you took it.

Thanks again, I look forward to your future works!

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fenue In reply to alamarine [2009-10-13 21:18:00 +0000 UTC]

Thank you~♪

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