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TheTinkerThinker [2010-09-16 04:08:23 +0000 UTC]
I guess that answers the question of "What happens when you put two villains together?"
I love the battle of wills and wits here. Good fun reading.
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Cu-Sith1 [2010-05-23 00:15:19 +0000 UTC]
I think out of all your characters Sombra has to be my favourite, i just love his personality, so evil and devious.
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Leonca In reply to Cu-Sith1 [2010-05-23 02:58:05 +0000 UTC]
Thank you. Iβm really surprised with the positive reception heβs gotten.
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XenoFrobe [2010-05-21 04:38:22 +0000 UTC]
Nice. Very nice. I really like that "right to remain silent" line. I'm going to find an excuse to say that sometime.
And Sombra was awesome. Just... Awesome. I like that character.
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Deuce777 In reply to Leonca [2017-05-10 00:39:46 +0000 UTC]
Same with me; this is probably the best line I've ever written (For some context, it was after the aircraft the main character was on got shot down):
"The smell of burning jet fuel brought me back to the land of the living, but the barking of Dobermans is what got me on my feet"
Also, since I'm too lazy for two comments, the story was really great. I'm definitely going to read the two series this is crossing over!
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weepingtrees [2010-05-18 04:40:07 +0000 UTC]
This was fucking awweeesome. I love Sombra's character. You made him scary and bloodthirsty without overdoing it and making him tacky. Very well done!
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Leah-the-Red [2010-05-18 01:29:19 +0000 UTC]
Woah... scary. He is very much the bad guy you made him to be, this Sombra.
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NamelessShe [2010-05-17 19:34:19 +0000 UTC]
"You have the right to remain silent. Anything you say can and will annoy the hell out of me, so give a wolf's ears a break and keep in down in there."
Thank you, I just sprayed coffee all over my new computer screen! I absolutely enjoyed this!
I think you really nailed the pacing, the description, and the dialogue.
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