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Published: 2006-02-08 02:10:10 +0000 UTC; Views: 109; Favourites: 1; Downloads: 4
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Description silver
and gold
following lines
and boxes
that leap into
symmetrical
lanes

hair
corse
and lovely
like cranberry stems
the prostitute
of Gods
and ladies
that wait
colored as this
to sit
on the rizers
that do not rise

they reach
for sour plums
anything
beautiful
to satisfy
a lust
for beautiful
anythings

almost worth a tear
but they've pulled themselves
to this state
of sane insanity

so they will stay
with the pidgeons
and the crows
for the sake of the statues
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Comments: 15

Superhim [2006-02-19 02:29:08 +0000 UTC]

...you got that "Flash Gordon" song by Queen out of my head! THANKYOUSOMUCH!

Unfortunately, the first lines of your poem stuck "Silver and Gold" right into it's place, so as punishment, I summon EEEVILLLL spirits to force you to share my pain.

"Silver and gold
silver and gold
Everyone wishes
for silver and gold.
How do you measure it's worth?
Just by the pleasure it gives... here on earth.

Silver and gold
silver and gold
mean so much more when I see
silver and gold decorations
on every Christmas tree."

Thanks loads.

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LipWriting In reply to Superhim [2006-02-19 03:38:49 +0000 UTC]

o.o" Well, uh you're welcome? o.o Maybe?

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Superhim In reply to LipWriting [2006-02-20 01:52:14 +0000 UTC]

Some people say that I am a very odd person. I agree, because being absolutely normal is a waste of time, and possibly money.

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LipWriting In reply to Superhim [2006-02-21 00:37:54 +0000 UTC]

Damn...money stealing normal people. Damn them straight to normal people hell. H-E-doublefuckinghockeystick.

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Superhim In reply to LipWriting [2006-02-21 01:33:46 +0000 UTC]

I think putting "fuck" in the middle negates the purpose of using doublehockeysticks.

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LipWriting In reply to Superhim [2006-02-21 02:06:05 +0000 UTC]

Well, yes...that's why they are there. So that the word hell gets the effect still while still trying to tone it down....
that doesn't make much sence...

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Silvermoon148 [2006-02-11 04:10:03 +0000 UTC]

schweet! -fave-

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LipWriting In reply to Silvermoon148 [2006-02-11 17:24:49 +0000 UTC]

Thankee!

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madhatterzwei [2006-02-09 02:23:41 +0000 UTC]

Yay! More Alanna poetry! Wootin rootin tootin! ^__^ __

MISPELLINGS:
"corse" should be "coarse"
"rizers" should be "risers"

I REALLYREALLYREALLY Love this poem. Enough to capitalize the L in love. Yup. That's right. for you daaaaarrrrrrrling. ^__^

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LipWriting In reply to madhatterzwei [2006-02-09 03:00:38 +0000 UTC]

Oh yeah. I knew about the misspellings. Thanks and all that though for critique-ish shtuff.

THANK YOU THANK YOU!

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madhatterzwei In reply to LipWriting [2006-02-09 11:30:53 +0000 UTC]

^___^ Okay. It's no problem. Love ya!

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bittersweet-insanity [2006-02-08 23:29:36 +0000 UTC]

I love you and your poetry, Alanna. whenever I get around to actually making my wall of poetry- this will be on it. <3

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LipWriting In reply to bittersweet-insanity [2006-02-08 23:46:10 +0000 UTC]

I love you and your poetry too! Thank you.

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Misplaced-Karma [2006-02-08 02:21:10 +0000 UTC]

This powm tastes like a lime with apple juice inside....


That is to say, good.

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LipWriting In reply to Misplaced-Karma [2006-02-08 21:25:22 +0000 UTC]

I wanna taste that. Maybe I already have though...if my peice sounds like that I mean..Thank you though! ^_^

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