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Published: 2009-10-12 15:32:05 +0000 UTC; Views: 1151; Favourites: 25; Downloads: 11
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Ahhh finally I've finish it!!!! I started it in the beginning of september, i didn't expect that I will have so much homework and new project at school! WAHHHH VACATIONS PLEASE!!
I'm already tired of schooll grrrrAnyway, it's always a pleasure to draw! I will try to draw more stuff...
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So what do you think about this one, I know that something with her body is not good. There's a mistake somewhere... Please, tell me if you know what is it! If there is something that I could improve next time, say it too
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Promakers, soft pastel, gliterdust and imagination ^^
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Well, thanks for the critique and I'm happy that you liked this very old drawing of mine haha XD Oh god, I forgot that I've made this, this drawing is so bad XD Anyway, thanks for taking the time to give me some feedback 
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You're welcome. I have to admit, I didn't realize how old the picture was, I just saw that it was in the group and I liked it, so I figure I'd share my thoughts on it.
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It'S ok, I appreciate your critique
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Colours are nice (: Actually, I love everything in this picture
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this is really good, i love the coloring on it XD
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I love the concept and the eyes.
I think it could be improved by making the body larger and the chest more rounded/curvy/idk.
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it seems the head is disproportional to the body, maybe if you do a rough sketch of it first.....i love the colors you chose
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thank you!
I always do a sketch before ^^
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The body's just not proportioned well with her head. It's too thin/too small.
The mask is beautiful though! Keep up the drawing!
P.S. Do please learn how to spell masquerade if you're going to have it as your title!
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Hello,
I think the problem that you were noticing with her body but could not figure out what it was, was the fact that her head is very large. If you take your fingers and measure how large her head is in comparison to how much of the body you showed (including the neck) you will find that they are almost equal, when in actuality her head would be about the size from her neck to the top of her breast.
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Very nice. Just next time, spend "masquerade" properly. 
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oupsssssss sorry!!! I didin't know it was writting like that. Oh! I wrotte it in french XD
my english isn't good... I speak french XD
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Ohhh, awesome! I didn't realise, I just assumed it was in english. 
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hΓ©hΓ©! It's ok!
Your sentence is great ^^ Practicing is the key!
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a very nice pic i really like the medium used
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This image is doen very well, the hair is well drawn and shaded nicely, the eyes are missing the traditional "shine" but the shading is very well done there too, I'm pretty sure that the head is too big for the body but that is common in some forms of manga, but the face is exceptionally constructed and the composition is very well balanced, great job
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thank you very much
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Her hair is really nice and flowy, I love the addition of glitter for the trails its really cool.
I think she lacks a ribcage, under her breast it shoudln't bend in smo much with nothing else.. I think if you got a ref you might be able to fix it.
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wow, thats awesome. i always admire traditional works that that come out really full and colorfull. what i see wrong is that the chest turns into the abdomen to quickly, because the chest starts out fine. but i love the colors and such.
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First off great work, looks really good! I think the problem with her body is that its in profile and that kinna makes it look 2d... mibby if you'd chosen to angle her body sligtly more towards the viewer it'd fix that...?
Really love the colours too btw, very vibrant.
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Yeah, I should did the body in the same angle than the head!
Thanks!
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Iwouldn't say that just mibby a bit more towards the angle of the head...
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yeah, that's what I meant ^^
maybe, I wasn't clear, I'm still learning english^^
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No problem, your English is great ^_^
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The body huh? Well, here's what I see
Her breasts, while starting at a decent point, are too small, and too pointy. They should come back lower. Also, the breasts should be a little rounder at the tips, right now the round area is small and it makes the breasts seem pointy. Once again, lower the point at which the breasts return to the body, and make the end rounder. You don't have to make them bigger, per se, and the size of the breast should be controlled by the angle of the line where it starts. You have it starting at the collarbone and going out quite alot, but if it's at that angle, the breasts should be larger. If you want smaller breasts, angle the line down more. Also, don't forget to make the curves soft!
Also you could think about giving the stomach area, and the arm, a bit more width. You don't have to make her fat, but round her out a bit more, otherwise she looks overly skinny and disproportioned...also, that flower helps hide her body, but her arm should continue after it. Underneath the flower, we should see her arm and body...
I hope that was helpful in some way
The picture itself is very gorgeous, I'm a huge fan of the mask, and the colour scheme is crazy awesome
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thank you very much!
You helped me a lot!I realize after i've finished it, that i've forgot the arm underneath the flower XD
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ah, I'm glad it was helpful
Lol s'okay, easy mistakes
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Her head is much too big, and her body too small! Her breast looks like a zit, not like a breast.
You know, if you want to master the anatomy, you should begin drawing people without perspective first! After, you go with perspective, it will be more easier like that.
And I think, the picture would be nicer, without that childish glitter stuff.
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for the anatomy, normally I'm pretty good, I rarely do mistake now. It's just this one...
For the glitter stuff, I don't put a lot of this. Just for make this piece more mysterious. It's more beautiful when you see it in real than in the computer. The scanner isn't great for those things.
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I took a look at your gallery and I think in anatomical things your persons look like puppets. Very stiffly. So in my opinion there is a lot to do, but maybe I'm wrong. (We all have a lot to learn^^)
For the glitter stuff, I think it is very unnecessary. The picture would look better without it, but thats only my opinion. The colours are very impressing in your picture so I think you could do the sparkling and shiny effect better with your skills then with this glitter stuff. You should try it.
Yeah, scanners are bad in such things and maybe in real it looks better, but I don't like glitter. I think it ruined your art. But yeah, I'm an amateur, too, so thats only my opinion and so please don't be angry about my words
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no it's okay, everyone have a different opignion.
Maybe they look like puppet, but i'm not drawing real person. But what do you mean by stiffy? I'm not good in english either. I would like to know how to improve it, but the only comments I had are like: it's beautiful. It can't help me. I check some tutoral for anatomy, I have books with that and I do what I can. I don't know if there is some mistake if I don't see anything anormal and if nobody say it to me. But I know, in my gallery, some of my drawing are old and I can see my mistake. I know there is a lot to do ^^ Everyone have to learn.. no one's perfect. I'm only 15 and I started at 12, I have a lot to learn. I would like to take art class, but I don't have the munny for and I don't have much time with school.
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Her head's too big and her body's too small, that's about all I can complain about
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her body gets thin to fast
other then that great job
i like it
XD
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I think the phantom mistake is that the body is a tiny bit to small and the body (in my opinion) also curves down to fast.
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ok, thanks for the feed back
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*blinks* soo pretty.
I like the colours on this. The body could go a little digger. Also the coller bone looks a little too lumpy, makes the drop seem very very deep.
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