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ScurvySimon [2009-12-30 22:51:15 +0000 UTC]
Lovely poem! You did a great job with the rhythm and rhyming here - rhymes can often appear forced or tacky in a serious poem, but in this they flow wonderfully, and really capture the message of the poem.
The background image fits in very nicely, too!
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purple-whirlpool In reply to ScurvySimon [2009-12-31 15:24:57 +0000 UTC]
Thank you so much for such wonderful edifying comments. This poem got integrated into a new one [link] because after writing it I wrote another one with much the same subject and the same rythm so I spliced the two together and added more to the end.
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Dacha-thwei [2009-12-15 05:51:37 +0000 UTC]
This text is very beautiful! It touched me so much that I cried - the words you've written down is certainly blessed by the Holy spirit of God. *favs*
"Lord, my soul cries out in pain
Your Spirit's the life-blood in my veins,
When you lift my spirit feels slain
I cry to you, don't go!"
This was the part that made me cry - keep up with the great work and God bless!
~Dacha-thwei
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BOBSZY [2009-12-14 23:20:42 +0000 UTC]
Great job!
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MrsPasswordEnna [2009-11-09 21:40:37 +0000 UTC]
So beautiful^^ I liked so much!
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