tragicrabbit [2004-01-24 20:44:29 +0000 UTC]

Newspapers fold their wings and
Fly away

nice imagery

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modestmelon [2004-01-22 08:15:31 +0000 UTC]

Ahhh very dark texture to this one. The whole poem also conveys a cold feel to it, the choice words help it to flow (cold, dead, fall, fly away..). Thanks again for a great piece

-=Modestmelon=-

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citizenerased [2003-12-06 10:21:05 +0000 UTC]

if you ever find time,make some space for me in your mind,please.I wanna stay there , on holidays.and weekends.and always.very beautiful images.

more than blah blah whine , to me .
hope you are doing fine
nova

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voices [2003-12-04 09:06:49 +0000 UTC]

the images are pretty trippy which i like, and i thought it has substance as well,

Stock markets fall
And rise again
But the sun sleeps in
Till two o’clock

yeah intresting mix of images

i really liked this

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ton-dieu-noir [2003-12-04 03:18:10 +0000 UTC]

i love this, great feeling great description awesome stuff

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soulwrai [2003-12-04 00:11:06 +0000 UTC]

this is very well done, good work

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corruptedangel [2003-12-03 20:25:47 +0000 UTC]

The last line seems sooooo arkward! I highly suggest a shortened version of that line. other than that this is SUPERB! I always enjoy reading your work.

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princepoo [2003-12-03 19:36:56 +0000 UTC]

last line brought in by winter gale.

frostbitten cotton mitten underwritten
writer

laying at your door.

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theunwarymariner [2003-12-03 08:45:17 +0000 UTC]

i think that this is just gorgeous, i love it. it paints such a lovely picture, yet lonesome....i really don't have anything else to say except that i love it.

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dragonflykiss [2003-12-03 05:04:51 +0000 UTC]

ahh i love the last stanza.
nice work :0)

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