meic2 [2003-10-06 20:57:02 +0000 UTC]

Nope ... never been to Puerto Rico before, but I feel I have now. Very evocative and atmospheric.

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benevolentsoul [2003-10-04 06:56:42 +0000 UTC]

The end is striking, but not because of poetic reasons, because it so thoroughly distorts and breaks a voice that's consistent throughout the poem.

I understand the shocking nature of such a statement, the cynicism is apparent, but the voicing and nature of dissent shifted so rapidly that it was more jarring than appropriate.

Just words.

- Keegan

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ton-dieu-noir [2003-10-04 03:52:01 +0000 UTC]

^_^ weeee free trip to peurto rico curtosy of suferxrosa thankyou for the fabulous trip and the incredible poem, your work never ceases to amaze me i love it!!

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corruptedangel [2003-10-03 19:47:32 +0000 UTC]

No... i've never been there. (Until now!)

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modestmelon [2003-10-03 07:54:00 +0000 UTC]

Never been to puerto rico myself.. but your poem gave me a nice taste of it I believe I have a fairly good imagination.. and when you pair that up with your writing I get a nice glimpse of a place I may never see. Very vivid!

-=Modestmelon=-

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starryangelicus [2003-10-03 03:59:44 +0000 UTC]

very well written.. now I kinda want to go to puerto rico.. ^_^

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jraub [2003-10-03 03:34:45 +0000 UTC]

Best line ever "Taxi cabs pronounced with acccents"

Instant fav!!

Since I hold you in such high esteem, I would like to know what you think about my writings.

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soulwrai [2003-10-03 03:05:34 +0000 UTC]

oooohh I like the last lines the best.... well done

I can leave this dried husk skin behind
Like a tree without roots in an ocean of stone

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