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Fatemaster44 [2012-07-17 06:08:58 +0000 UTC]
Im assuming rapist or murderer but ill have to check out the next chapter to be sure
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coolbigsis [2011-11-20 20:20:47 +0000 UTC]
:dumb:
YAY
It ish so awshum
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BlackWidower [2011-11-10 03:03:43 +0000 UTC]
Two things:
"It was about this time that the mane six had returned from their adventure of the day and were heading for home."
I have to say, the words "mane six" and "adventure" don't sound like words that should be used in-universe.
Perhaps the words: "Twilight and her friends" and "trip to save the dragons from the bumblebees" or something equally rediculous.
"'Will you stop is?'"
I think you mean "stop it"
But overall, kinda interesting. Though I think the end is a bit cliche. Sounds like they met a ponied Witch Hazel! I wonder how they're going to kill her.
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writemaster93 In reply to BlackWidower [2011-11-10 14:39:48 +0000 UTC]
Thank you for your feedback!
And I've almost finished part 3.
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dwreanpony [2011-10-04 15:53:46 +0000 UTC]
the plot thickens...
and vinyl scratch is a cousin!
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writemaster93 In reply to dwreanpony [2011-10-04 20:27:55 +0000 UTC]
Yeah, someone brought it up on this one pic and it sounded good to me.
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