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eat-ride-listen [2012-11-13 00:50:55 +0000 UTC]

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Hello! I figured I would return the critique favor since you were so kind to critique a couple of my pieces. e.deviantart.net/emoticons/s/s… " width="15" height="15" alt="" title=" (Smile)"/>
I guess I'll start with the foal first. Pretty much everything looks good, from what I can see, but I would recommend a couple things. First, the foal doesn't really pop out. What my eye is first drawn to is the bright reflection on the water, which you might want to burn a bit or otherwise darken. I would make the eye brighter, make the foal a bit brighter and maybe put an outline around the edges, not too bright, but to make it stand out. The cutting out is good, nice and sharp. The shadow confuses me a bit; it's a cloudy and snowy day, so the shadow shouldn't be quite so dark, and I think it would fall more directly under the horse as there isn't really a specific light source, and since there isn't strong light it wouldn't be too defined either. The mane and tail look like they stop at the ends kind of abruptly - maybe make more use of your pressure sensitivity on your tablet (if it's not broken or anything) or smudge the ends just a bit. I like the snow sprinkled across the back (assuming it's not appaloosa markings), but I think on a moving horse there wouldn't be quite so much - maybe a few flakes here and there or stuck in the mane and tail, but not so much across the back. (Discount that sentence if they're spots on the horse, haha.) The grounding is pretty good, but you can see the brush you used to simulate snow. I would advise varying the shade (some lighter spots for shading would especially help there) and maybe using a fuzzy brush a bit.
Your background blending is impressive; I didn't realize it was two images until I looked closer. Except for the few plants along the creek side that look a bit out of place with no snow or anything (I think it would be better if the snow went all the way to the edge) the bit of snow by the closest tree on the right that looks like it got cut off, and the reflection that I mentioned earlier, the background is great. You could gaussian blur the far background (starting maybe from behind the closest tree on the right or so) a little, to add depth and put more focus on the foal. The snow falling is a nice touch, although possibly a bit less of it would be better. Maybe even add a larger and detailed snowflake or two, closer to you as it were, to add perspective.
Considering your background, I think the composition isn't bad. The foal isn't really at a point of interest, but unless you were to put the foal in the water or move the creek over and provide more space on the left side, I don't know how you could really improve the composition.
I hope I didn't come across as harsh anywhere e.deviantart.net/emoticons/s/s… " width="15" height="15" alt="" title=" (Smile)"/> I really like this manip, and I hope I offered a couple useful tips and wasn't too awfully long winded, haha. ^^

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grandmoonma [2012-11-30 15:07:52 +0000 UTC]

now featured in my holiday wonders on my profile page

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VampressWolf [2012-11-16 02:33:28 +0000 UTC]

This is very pretty! The only critique I have is that it's a bit dark in places. It makes for a nice effect though ^w^

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optimus-prime-girl [2012-11-13 03:00:31 +0000 UTC]

Love it!

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