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Description Red wasn't himself

By Cherilyn Ohlau


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Cooped up in his room right after a visit to Lavender Town. It wasn't normal, and even then Red's mother didn't know what got into him. It could've just been poison or just a normal temporary paralyzation but when she looked to check on him, he was healthy and quiet like he usually was; but the air it felt heavy...
It was almost hard to breathe. She went up to Red's room one day, and opened the window, and a ghastly scent went up to her nose. The smell of rotting decay, the burning flesh, and the muggy taste as though it came from the soil. She coughed heavily and closed the window, and the stench faded. Red suddenly came in, "MOM! DON'T COME INTO MY ROOM!" he yelled in a upset tone.


"Red, hun, what...what did you bring? I-it reeks it smells; you can't can't possibly live in this condition, can you?"


"It's just...it's just...Gh--" Red started and one of the pokeballs on his belt started to rattle, and he shoved her out of the room, "GET OUT! NOW!"


SLAM!



Red's mother was shaken. This wasn't her sweet little boy, not anymore, she thought. She had to help somehow. She shakily raised up her hand to knock, but then stopped when he heard Red talking.


"This isn't what we agreed on, d-don't you have enough souls you already cursed? You can kill anyone you think is in our way but you can't kill her! You can't have my mom!"


She shivered. She wanted to run, but she couldn't leave him. Leave him with that...thing he was talking to.
She stood by the door as the conversation on the other side gradually turned into a full out argument. The door made a thump like something was thrown against it, and she got more worried. She heard and felt things being shred and torn. It felt like forever until things went quiet. Red's mother swallowed as she knocked on the door, and it slowly opened.


Everything was normal. Nothing was thrown or torn. It was in place like it usually was, but Red was gone.
And the window was opened. The stillness in the room was eerie, it was like no one lived there to begin with.
She felt her heart grow heavy and she cried.
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Comments: 47

MewTwoPlays [2018-10-11 15:30:05 +0000 UTC]

I think I know what happened...
CENSORED FOR SPOILER REASONS
That's what happened!

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CJCroen [2018-06-11 00:20:28 +0000 UTC]

Aww, I think it's kinda sweet that Red doesn't want Ghost to kill his mom!

But what exactly happened to Red? Did he leave or did he jump out the window to kill himself out of guilt?

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CherlnIDA In reply to CJCroen [2018-11-12 18:36:11 +0000 UTC]

Actually when I wrote this, I thought of Red's mom being dead from the start, so she's reliving her afterlife of suffering and never seeing Red again. She was meant to cry and say "purgatory" but that was cut. But I like seeing readers come up with numerous interpretations of what did happen, they could all have been of what transpired. ^_^ 

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CJCroen In reply to CherlnIDA [2018-11-12 20:04:26 +0000 UTC]

Ah. Still interesting and kinda sad.


I like it ^_^

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Crystaldragons [2012-06-09 21:05:34 +0000 UTC]

Wow. so scary!

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CherlnIDA In reply to Crystaldragons [2012-06-09 21:46:28 +0000 UTC]

Thanks. I'm glad you enjoyed it.

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Crystaldragons In reply to CherlnIDA [2012-06-09 22:12:48 +0000 UTC]

Yea I did, it gives me another idea as to why red left

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Suprememessage [2011-07-06 01:23:10 +0000 UTC]

Maybe red was like "I don't believe in trolls" and the magical power of ghost's magnets dragged him away to never never land and he got killed by captain hook.

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CherlnIDA In reply to Suprememessage [2011-07-06 01:50:48 +0000 UTC]

Ghost is dragging you to the internets, gutting your soul. Oh wait. OHSH--

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Suprememessage In reply to CherlnIDA [2011-07-06 15:21:49 +0000 UTC]

He used the cursor to gut me

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CherlnIDA In reply to Suprememessage [2011-07-06 15:51:53 +0000 UTC]

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CrispyCreamed [2011-06-26 04:02:23 +0000 UTC]

I really like it (:

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CherlnIDA In reply to CrispyCreamed [2011-06-26 20:12:01 +0000 UTC]

Thanks. : D

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XxxOceanXSapphirexxX [2010-12-17 22:40:01 +0000 UTC]

W-wait... What happened to Red now? o_o Did he run away to safe his mom, our did that... 'Thing' get him?
Poor Red...
Poor Red's Mom...
Poor Door...
...Wait I lost the line... *knifed*

Great Story btw.

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CherlnIDA In reply to XxxOceanXSapphirexxX [2010-12-17 22:54:50 +0000 UTC]

Th thing happens to be Ghost.
And thanks.

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FoxMccloud15 [2010-12-07 03:12:34 +0000 UTC]

You are right, purgatory made it sound like those perfume ads I never understand. :/ XD
Great short btw.

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CherlnIDA In reply to FoxMccloud15 [2010-12-07 03:14:18 +0000 UTC]

You make me sad I thought it'd be super creepy if I added it.

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FoxMccloud15 In reply to CherlnIDA [2010-12-12 23:30:09 +0000 UTC]

Well you know I r stoopid and I don't always have the thoughts of everyone else XD So consider my non liking a yes liking!

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CherlnIDA In reply to FoxMccloud15 [2010-12-12 23:30:41 +0000 UTC]

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da07pokemon24 [2010-12-05 22:11:37 +0000 UTC]

Wow, awesome (and creepy,) story O.o
Except that the last word totally ruined the mood. I'm not that old (13), and a Dane, so how am I suposed to know what "Purgatory" is? It kinda ruined the story for me :/ (It's like saying 'Pie Factory', it just doesn't make sense)

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CherlnIDA In reply to da07pokemon24 [2010-12-05 22:34:00 +0000 UTC]

Oh, I'm sorry, I'm willing to edit it out if you want. xD

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da07pokemon24 In reply to CherlnIDA [2010-12-06 11:21:12 +0000 UTC]

Nah, it's fine. Now I know what it is anyway xD

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CherlnIDA In reply to da07pokemon24 [2010-12-06 17:19:58 +0000 UTC]

Oh, okay. Well, I took it out anyway just in case.

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WorldTraveler128 [2010-11-19 06:05:25 +0000 UTC]

man i think i cried ;u;
awsome man just awsome.
Whuts purgatory anyways?

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CherlnIDA In reply to WorldTraveler128 [2010-11-19 21:15:54 +0000 UTC]

It's like the feeling of being punished over and over again, it's an endless cycle. And thanks.

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WorldTraveler128 In reply to CherlnIDA [2010-11-20 03:56:54 +0000 UTC]

np, and how creepy

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CherlnIDA In reply to WorldTraveler128 [2010-11-20 04:02:48 +0000 UTC]

Yeah, it is.

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Charlesthefrog4 [2010-09-29 23:06:16 +0000 UTC]

This both disturbs and saddens me. I belive that you have accomplished your mission. Good job!

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CherlnIDA In reply to Charlesthefrog4 [2010-09-29 23:07:33 +0000 UTC]

Aw, thanks. And you're welcome.

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Shadonut [2010-09-28 04:37:45 +0000 UTC]

i don't realy get it, explain?

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CherlnIDA In reply to Shadonut [2010-09-29 00:03:19 +0000 UTC]

Well, it's not really that hard if you think about the creepypasta story involving GHOST in your party when you use curse. Someone, like a trainer, dies. And remember at the near the end at the house where you don't see your mom? This is my idea of it, that's she ended up being cursed and she's in an endless purgatory to repeat what happened over and over.

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Shadonut In reply to CherlnIDA [2010-09-29 22:40:06 +0000 UTC]

i havn'trad any pastas or played PkMn Black...

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CherlnIDA In reply to Shadonut [2010-09-29 22:54:06 +0000 UTC]

No, no, not the recent game pokemon black. I mean the creepypasta of the hacked Red game called Pokemon Lost or Creepy Black. xD

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Shadonut In reply to CherlnIDA [2010-09-29 23:16:14 +0000 UTC]

oohh,

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CherlnIDA In reply to Shadonut [2010-09-29 23:29:05 +0000 UTC]

[link]

Here's the story of it.

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orochimarusgirl541 [2010-09-26 19:03:07 +0000 UTC]

Awesome!^^

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GengarGirlCat [2010-09-26 17:55:40 +0000 UTC]

oooo i liek me a good creepy story :3

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TJtheZafara [2010-09-26 03:03:19 +0000 UTC]

You love those hacks dont you? XD

But neat work here.

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CherlnIDA In reply to TJtheZafara [2010-09-26 19:10:27 +0000 UTC]

Creepy hacks are XD
And thanks. I feel like I wanna make more.

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TJtheZafara In reply to CherlnIDA [2010-09-26 19:40:37 +0000 UTC]

XDD
Dont mention it.

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riflow [2010-09-26 00:04:35 +0000 UTC]

Ah, the edited/hacked pokemon games?

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CherlnIDA In reply to riflow [2010-09-26 00:05:47 +0000 UTC]

Yep.

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riflow In reply to CherlnIDA [2010-09-26 00:08:54 +0000 UTC]

No wonder it was creepy.

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CherlnIDA In reply to riflow [2010-09-26 00:11:51 +0000 UTC]

Success. I managed to keep the creepy vibe!

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riflow In reply to CherlnIDA [2010-09-26 00:12:36 +0000 UTC]

for me at least.

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CherlnIDA In reply to riflow [2010-09-26 00:14:38 +0000 UTC]

That's good either way. It's been AGES since I wrote a horror story.

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riflow In reply to CherlnIDA [2010-09-26 00:16:05 +0000 UTC]

Hehe.

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