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The eleventh page for the first chapter of Star Fox Sagas.Constructive Criticism would be greatly appreciated! ^^
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Great, now I got that annoying theme of Krystal in my head. Do people seriously consider a saxophone to be a "love" instrument? Oh, but I have nothing against Krystal, though. She's cool. But yeah, the music I hated.
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She is 17 in adventures from what I know. She would have been 16 in Dinosaur Planet
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Oh wait three years is 18... Well I guess as soon as she's legal lets put her in a child's game with as little clothing as we can get on her, right?
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You have very good designs for the characters. Fox and Falco are very well drawn and their characterization is very good especially in their facial expressions. Krystal's outfit definitely suits her being the team telepath as a opposed to her weird furry fetish armor from Assault. I also like how you kept the funny little 4 heads proportions the characters have in the games it definitely helps make the comic feel like a believable official continuation and less of a fan comic to retain those funky proportions.
The only criticisms I have is that Peppy looks a tad too much like an old human not a hare; maybe just define his nose like a Fox or Krystal with the black triangle look and lengthen his teeth just to give it more of an anthropomorphic look instead of almost human. Other than that from the other pages I've seen ahead Krystal looks like she's half asleep in some panels and it kinda kills her from being as expressive as she can potentially be with her eyes in a half shut state like she has to appear sexy and mysterious in every panel including her. That's just my two cents you can throw them in a wishing well if you want.
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i love the way that you draw Krystal.
Especially her outfit
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I thought Krystal would be, at least, two years younger than Fox. O_o
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For once, Krystal is dressed a little more modest and that actually make her look more attractive IMO.
And I know how that is . . . getting jobs that just aren't worth the fuel. Ugh.
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Krystal was 19 in Adventures, +3 for Assault, +2 for this. She should be 24, I believe.
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O.o Are Krystal 22 if fox is 29?! How old were she in adventures when fox was 22 then?! O.o (I think fox was 22 then. something around 20. He was 17-19 in 64, man I need to refrech my mind, I have forgott evrything O.o)
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wow. I can't even draw Krystal's face from the center! You did great at everything!
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Wow great job!
I especially like your design for Krystal's outfit.
I also like the way you've drawn her as well.I've had some tries at drawing Krystal but I can never get it right.I either make her too manlike or too annorexic.
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Usually I avoid criticizing someone's work when they put so much effort into it (and more importantly: finish it!) but is it the style or is Crystal's head a bit too big for her body?
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Yay, Krystal!
I know you want critique, but I can't find anything wrong. It's not bad at all, it's good!
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Krystal, I like how you drew her very nicely.
a new style, more non militant.
more civilian. I like it!
very good.
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Sorry for the double post, I meant "Natural progression to the official story itself."
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Definately can tell you put alot of work into the art because it looks awesome, better than the current official look as seen in Star Fox Command. The story feels very real as well, I honestly never really thought about the teams finances for their flagship, but this seems like the natural course for the team, as well as a natural progression to the story itself. Can't wait for the action/adventure to pick up though especially with the call Rob got.
Only thing that bugs me, and I think it may just be me, is Peppy's face, it looks awesome don't get me wrong, but I think his face was a little fuller in the cheeks.
Other than that great stuff, I can't wait to see more!
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Thanks so much for the crit!
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Sweet another character intro, krystal looks great in the outfit. Cant wait for the new message!
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Lovin' the comic so far, it's really paced well! Can't wait to see what the message is about.
Krystal's lookin' mighty fine--nice outfit. Her face is a little lopsided, though--could be the eyes.
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Thanks!
Yeah, now that I haven't seen it in a while, you're right. She is a little lopsided =\ Thanks for the heads up ^^
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All right!! It's great to see Krystal here and hot she is. I wonder what kind of mission they'll have. ^^
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^__^ Another great page! 
Nice work!
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I like the character art you put into these comics, they should hire you to publish english SF comics-you are very good at it-even though the story is a little slow, both good art and plot require a tremendous amount of time and patience, I look forward to the next page.
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Heh, I wish I'd get published!
I know the story is a bit slow right now, but I felt like I needed to do a lot of introductions and set-up before diving into the plot. Future chapters will be much more energetic, I promise ^^
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Glooooorious
Just been checking the past logs... looks like you get each page up between about 5 and 15 days (min and max respectively)
Gives me something to look forward to each day
Back to the comic, nice job with this one! Brilliant showing of detail to facial features... and not too overdone in any aspect. Truly, remarkable.
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Thanks so much!
I try to update on Wednesdays and Saturdays... unfortunately a lot of stuff can happen that sets me back DX
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*does the "YAY, Krystal" dance*
This comic is going great. Keep up the awesome work.
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I love Fox's jacket. xB
There's something bugging me about the second to last panel though. I can't seem to find Peppy's other shoulder. =\
Otherwise, great work! Keep it up!
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Yeah, I struggled with that shoulder. I guess I should go back and add it in, huh?
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Now I really like Krystal's new look. It just looks so..... I don't know how to describe it but it looks good, kindof a natural feel to it. And on another note the reference to the start of SF64 from ROB was a nice touch. Adding to that, I await what the villains/threat will be in this storyline.
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Awesome, you make em all look better than what nintendo does. Keep up the great work.
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I wonder what the business proposal is....? Hope it's funny!
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Er... Thanks...? I'm not sure I get what you mean o_O;;
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i mean she looks a little older old enough to be a mom XD
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Ah. Well, I wanted to give her character a little more substance than the sex symbol that the games have made her out to be. I never really thought it fit her.
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well she llooks hot any way XD
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I dig the way you draw Falco. Don't worry about everybody being a whinebaby about it taking so long to upload blah blah blah blah. When you read it all in one go it's not dragged out at all, it reads well.
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Danke ^^ I usually put more effort into drawing Falco. He's my favorite character.
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You have my attention ...
... you certainly are dragging things out though. I'm not going to 
*Prepares for the painfully long wait until the next page is completed*
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