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Published: 2003-11-25 06:45:59 +0000 UTC; Views: 11752; Favourites: 35; Downloads: 6739
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Frigid dreamsSnow on her tongue
Ice skates and long walks
On cold December nights
Skin molded to resemble snowflakes
Opaque icicles hang from her joints
Frosted lips taste like peppermints
A snow angel lying outside for years
Her frozen breath goes unnoticed
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so simple, so eegant, so, just so cool ^^ wonderful stuff
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I love that!!! 
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intruiging. Im not entirely sure what your talking about. But I do like it.
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Wow i love how the whole poem has a "cold" wintry feel to in! Nice work!
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Eyes The Rock
The Poem Rocks too
Everything Rocks in 
Thank u sooooo. . . . .. . much
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Frosted lips taste like peppermints < ----Really caught my attention.
Beautiful.
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Very beautiful. 
"A snow angel lying outside for years
Her frozen breath goes unnoticed"
Good work! :Clap:
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At first I wasn't sure what to make of this. It seemed to be a collection of images, described beautifully, but when put together they don't really tell anything constructive.
But after thinking on it for a while, yeah I get it
Either way, I like this line: "Her frozen breath goes unnoticed". It makes her seem small, and therefore cute 
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her eyes seem to hold either a snowstorm or the Universe. which is best?
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eyes are so wonderful .... this eye is really unique.
i don't know why, but i feel this person is deep in thougt ... pondering something in her past that is slightly sad.
i love photos that evoke an emotional response ... this one definitely does.
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beautiful. im not sure what else to say... im not the greatest critic
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I feel really unqualified to crit this... All I can point out is "hang from her joints" -> 'hang' is a little weak and the word 'joints' somehow feels out of place. Sorry I can't be any more helpful.
I think I still like the other poem better, but this is lovely. Beautiful picture, too.
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this picture is so .. i dun know theres somethin so mystical about it . The eye and the whole image is so crystal clear ,its beautiful on the whole ,well done
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oohh! I love eye shots! this one is great! and also the white skin with the black outline...just wow!
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This is cool, it looks like thousands of stars in the eyes.
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Wow, you did a lot to the eye! So well done to the point that this picture looks like it was the original. Great picutre!
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i love the feel about this poem
part of me doesn't know what to make of it, another part of me dips in and out of meanings without embracing any of them, but for the most part i can drown myself in every single word for its intensity
:fav:
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I love the eye--I have a thing about eye imagery-- my pencil and hand are not so talented a yur eye and camera--this is lovely---
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Gods, this reminds me of somthing that happened here only this week, A boy's parents wouldn't let him go play in the snow, (he was like 5 and it was 6" of snow and was freezing rain outside) so once they were asleep he snuck outside and froze nearly to death when he locked himself out. He died in the hospital.
anyway on a hapier note
This is so short and sweet, it makes my lips curl like the last did. I really love the discription and the curt imagry. a grand job, can we have more?
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very well written and good imagery. I like how concise it is. Nope, cant find anything to criticise
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I don't know if I'm all wrong, but this piece seems very dark.
THe image almost looks like a corpse or victorian doll - macabre art.
Simple excellent.
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This poem makes me feel like someone got left behind not nessicaraly in the cold maybe in life. verygood poem
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That's awesome. That picture is absolutely amazing. Great job!
+fav
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oOO... the picture looks so cold and icy... i 
nice work
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I really like the pic, you can just look at it for hours trying to discern all of the small details. The poem leaves me wanting a little bit more though. I guess your just trying to describe a scene but the lack of an end just leaves me wanting to know what happens next.
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Very interesting figure, great description.
It's a powerful image, yet I would want to hear more. I sense a tragic fate here, something that might deserve to be rendered in words?
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I like the poem - cannot con crit as I have never been a poet anywhere near your level.. come to think of it, my art isn't near you level either.......
eh, but at least with that I can see what I like and how to make the rest of it so I like it.
I love the image here, the stark contrast of the black to the pale skin and silver hair, as well as the multi-light reflection in her eyes. The only thing I would have liked to have seen is an image where the blue eye was still pale, but brighter, or the liner in a dark silver... but it works well as it is.
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This piece paints a very vivid image in one's head.
I especially enjoyed the way you ended it... stunning really.
I don't have much more to say...
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man. looks so cold and bone chilling. nice work..man brrrrrr!...
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I adore eyes pictures
this is a very good one
keep up the good work
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The only thing I would have to complain about is the small size of the picture but otherwise
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The poem:
(I don't really know all the fancy poetry words in English so bear over with me.)
The second part, first line:
Skin molded to resemble snowflakes
It somehow doesn't fit in with the rest. Perhaps something along the lines of Skin molded, resembles snowflakes (the comma is optional) It somehow flows better that way in my opinion.
Also I feel you could exclude the "goes" from
Her frozen breath goes unnoticed but pretty much everybody would disagree with me on that.
I love the rest though, it has heavy symbolism.
The picture:
I took a look at both sources and I think you've really pulled of making something new out of it. It's fantastic how you turned that eye picture into something completely else. It would be nice if you had chosen a bigger picture though, I feel like I'm missing some details.
My overall impression of this is that you've pured your soul into it, it's a great piece of art and the poem and picture really compliment each other. Nice work.
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wow, thank you for the criticism. that's got to be one the greatest comments i've ever recieved
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hee hee that's nice to hear, I was a bit afraid that I may have sounded a but rough or something.
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Very nice imagery; absolutely lovely. And the picture is also beautiful.
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wow, i really like this. you closed it perfectly. and the picture is great... who are you? i must watch you.
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